Tiredness— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and clear. Start with a direct topic sentence (Yes/No + reason), avoid repeating phrases ("vitamin D levels" twice) and fix grammar ("that makes me tired" is unclear). Add one specific supporting detail and use a linking word. For example, say you feel tired because of a medical reason and mention how often or when it affects you.

Ejemplo: Yes, I often feel tired because I have low vitamin D, which affects my energy levels. Consequently, I take supplements most days, but I still feel tired in the mornings. For instance, I often wake up sluggish and need extra rest before I can concentrate.

Sugerencia: Give a complete, well-structured answer. Start with a clear topic sentence stating the typical time you feel tired (e.g., after school), then add specific reasons and use linking words (e.g., because, so). Avoid hesitations and unfinished phrases. Provide one concrete example of an activity that tires you.

Ejemplo: I usually feel tired after school because many of my lessons include long laboratory sessions, so I spend a lot of time standing and moving equipment. For example, last Tuesday I felt exhausted after three back-to-back labs where we carried heavy glassware and worked for hours.

Sugerencia: Organize your answer: state the main strategy first, then add an alternative and a brief reason using linking words. Remove filler words (uh) and fix grammar ("more tired than I usually am"). Be specific about duration or effects of the nap or coffee to make the response more informative.

Ejemplo: When I feel tired, I usually take a short nap of about 20 minutes to recharge. Alternatively, I drink an Americano because I find that milk-based drinks make me feel heavier and more sluggish, so black coffee helps me stay alert.

× I need to take more supplements to increase my vitamin D levels and that makes me tired every day even though I'm not doing something really.

✓ I need to take more supplements to increase my vitamin D levels, and that makes me tired every day even though I'm not really doing anything.

The phrase 'doing something really' is incorrect word order and form. Use 'doing anything' after a negative ('not') and place 'really' before the verb phrase ('really doing anything') for natural emphasis. Also add a comma before 'and' to separate clauses.

× That's why the days I have umm ex.

✓ That's why on the days I have lab sessions I feel especially tired.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear ('umm ex' is filler). Replace filler with a complete noun phrase 'lab sessions' and add the verb phrase 'I feel especially tired' to complete the sentence. Include the preposition 'on' for 'on the days'.

× I usually take a short nap when I feel really tired or I drink coffee, usually Americano because uh, milk in the latte or other cafes makes me more tired than I usually AM.

✓ I usually take a short nap when I feel really tired, or I drink an Americano because milk in lattes or other coffee drinks makes me more tired than I usually am.

Use 'an Americano' (article use) and avoid capitalizing 'AM'. 'Milk in the latte or other cafes' is incorrect: 'lattes or other coffee drinks' is the proper noun phrase. 'Makes me more tired than I usually am' is the correct comparative structure. Also add a comma before 'or' to separate the alternatives.