Tiredness— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and directly answer the question first, then give one or two clear reasons with correct grammar and natural phrasing. Avoid redundancy and limit to 3–4 sentences. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' correctly and watch verb tense and article use (e.g., 'a part-time job').

Ejemplo: No, I don't often feel tired recently. That's because my part-time job keeps me active until about 10 p.m., so I stay energetic throughout the day. I also sleep well, which helps me recover quickly.

Sugerencia: Answer directly using present tense and a clear topic sentence, then support with a specific circumstance. Reduce repetition and correct word choice (use 'morning' not 'mourning'). Use a linking phrase like 'usually' or 'typically' to signal frequency.

Ejemplo: I usually feel tired at the end of the day. After working and doing my part-time job all day, I feel exhausted once my daily routine is finished.

Sugerencia: Start with a clear statement of what you do, then give specific details about how and why. Use consistent tense (present simple) and avoid repetition. Include linking words like 'then' or 'so' to organize the sequence.

Ejemplo: When I'm tired, I write in my journal. Writing helps me process my emotions and record what I did, and then I note one or two things I can improve for the next day.

× No, for this past few weeks I don't feel tired that easily because I have my part time job which keeps me alive up until probably around 10 in the in the evening and it's for me, it's really a great.

✓ No, for the past few weeks I haven't felt tired that easily because I have my part-time job which keeps me awake until about 10 in the evening, and for me it's really great.

Errors: incorrect article use ('for this past few weeks' -> 'for the past few weeks'); tense/aspect mismatch (present 'don't feel' with 'for the past few weeks' -> present perfect 'haven't felt'); incorrect compound adjective formatting ('part time' -> 'part-time'); wrong verb choice 'keeps me alive' -> 'keeps me awake'; redundant words and word order issues. Suggestion: Use 'the' with time spans like 'the past few weeks', use present perfect to describe experiences over a recent period, hyphenate compound adjectives before nouns, choose verbs that convey intended meaning ('awake' for not sleeping).

× I felt tired when my day is done, when my when my work and my part time job done because all day I've been productive mourning until the evening.

✓ I feel tired when my day is done, when my work and my part-time job are finished because all day I've been productive, working until the evening.

Errors: tense inconsistency ('I felt' past vs general habit -> 'I feel'); missing third person plural verb 'are' for 'work and my part-time job are finished'; spelling mistake 'mourning' should be 'working'; compound adjective 'part time' -> 'part-time'. Suggestion: Maintain present tense for habitual actions, ensure subject-verb agreement for compound subjects, correct word choice and spelling, hyphenate compound adjectives.

× So right after I'm I'm done with my routine.

✓ So right after I'm done with my routine.

Errors: repeated word 'I'm' creates redundancy and breaks fluency. Suggestion: Remove the duplicated 'I'm' to produce a coherent sentence.

× When I feel tired, I do my journal.

✓ When I feel tired, I write in my journal.

Errors: incorrect verb collocation 'do my journal' should be 'write in my journal' to match the activity. Suggestion: Use verbs that collocate with nouns (write in a journal) and keep present tense for habitual actions.

× After a long day, I wrote all the emotions, the things that I do, I do and what I can improve for the next day or for the next month of my life.

✓ After a long day, I write down all my emotions, the things that I did, and what I can improve for the next day or the next month.

Errors: inconsistent tense ('I wrote' past vs habitual present 'I write'); awkward phrasing 'the things that I do, I do'; incorrect article use and redundancy. Suggestion: Use present simple 'I write' for habitual routine, use 'write down' for recording, use past tense 'did' when referring to actions you recorded about the day, and simplify time expressions ('the next day'/'next month').