Tiredness— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more grammatically accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence that answers directly, then add one brief reason. Avoid vague phrases like “from them” and correct comparative grammar (e.g., “more tired than usual”).

Ejemplo: Yes, I have been more tired than usual recently because I helped organize a wedding. I was involved in planning and attending many events, so I didn’t get enough sleep.

Sugerencia: Give a clear topic sentence and use linking words to make the answer coherent. Reduce repetition of “so” and provide one or two specific details (time, travel).

Ejemplo: I usually feel tired in the evenings after school because I travel a long distance from my home to my school in Scotland. The commute takes about an hour, and after a full day of classes and travel I feel exhausted.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and add a brief, natural sequence with linking words. Use present simple for habitual actions and avoid unnecessary modal verbs. Provide one additional specific remedy or result.

Ejemplo: When I feel tired, I usually take off my makeup and go to bed straight away. Afterwards I sleep for a few hours and wake up feeling much better, or sometimes I take a short nap and have a cup of tea to refresh myself.

× These days I'm feeling very tired than the usual because there was a marriage so I was really tired from them.

✓ These days I feel more tired than usual because there was a wedding recently, so I was really tired from it.

The sentence mixes continuous present ('I'm feeling') with a comparison that requires 'more' and the simple present 'feel' is more natural for habitual states (Present tense issue). 'than the usual' should be 'than usual'. 'marriage' in this context is more naturally 'a wedding'. 'from them' is incorrect for an event; use 'from it' or 'because of it'. Suggestion: use simple present for general states ('I feel'), use 'more' for comparisons, and use correct noun ('wedding') and pronoun ('it').

× Usually it's in the evening after the school so my school is situated in Scotland so there is a long distance between my house and the school so when I'm back I feel very tired.

✓ Usually it is in the evening after school. My school is in Scotland, so there is a long distance between my house and the school; when I get back I feel very tired.

Multiple issues: 'after the school' is incorrect — use 'after school' (There be / article issue). 'is situated in Scotland' is acceptable but can be simplified to 'is in Scotland'. The long sentence benefits from splitting and using 'get back' for returning (There be issue relates to article and phrasing). Suggestion: remove unnecessary articles ('the') with general nouns like 'school', split clauses for clarity, and use simple verbs like 'get back'.

× When I feel tired, the first thing I would do is remove my makeup and just sleep.

✓ When I feel tired, the first thing I do is remove my makeup and just sleep.

Using 'would' here incorrectly suggests a conditional or habitual past. For habitual actions use simple present ('do') (Verb in the past participle form / tense issue). Suggestion: use 'do' for regular routines. The rest of the sentence is fine.

× After that I will be okay.

✓ After that I am okay.

Saying 'I will be okay' implies a future change relating to a future reference, but in this context you describe an immediate habitual result after doing something, so simple present 'I am okay' fits better (Future tense issue). Suggestion: use simple present for habitual or immediate results.