Tiredness— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and grammatical. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then add one brief supporting detail. Avoid repetition and unfinished fragments. Use connector words if adding reasons (e.g., "because" or "especially").

Ejemplo: Yes, I often feel tired. I usually get tired quickly because I do a lot of physical activities during the day, and when I move at a fast pace it drains my energy rapidly.

Sugerencia: Give a clear, structured answer: state when you feel tired, then give 1–2 specific examples. Use linking words (e.g., "for example", "especially") and correct grammar (verb forms and articles). Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

Ejemplo: I usually feel tired at the end of the day, especially after a busy day. For example, after finishing a long shift at the hospital or coming home from school and still having chores to do, I feel exhausted and low in energy.

Sugerencia: Answer directly: state the main action you take, then give a brief reason or extra detail. Use clear verbs and avoid redundancy (e.g., "essential" repeated). Keep it natural and within 2–3 sentences. Mention one specific restful activity if possible.

Ejemplo: When I feel tired, I usually rest or take a short nap to recharge. I also try to listen to my body by relaxing, avoiding screens, and going to bed a bit earlier so I can recover for the next day.

× I do notice at the end of my activities that I do feel tired very often and very quickly, especially if I do things very. And speed is hello.

✓ I notice at the end of my activities that I feel tired very often and very quickly, especially if I do things very quickly.

Remove unnecessary auxiliary 'do' in simple present (present tense issue) and complete the fragment 'very' to 'very quickly'. The original also contains an irrelevant fragment 'And speed is hello.' which should be removed. Use simple present for habitual actions: 'I notice' and 'I feel'. Use an adverb 'quickly' to modify 'do things'. Suggestions: avoid redundant 'do' and ensure fragments are complete and relevant.

× As I have noticed in my experience, I often feel tired at the end of the of a day, especially if it is a busy day like rise down pole after coming home from school or from a duty in the hospital and afterwards I come home and still has some chores left to do. The end of the day I would feel my body.

✓ As I have noticed from my experience, I often feel tired at the end of the day, especially after a busy day, for example after coming home from school or from a hospital shift, and I sometimes still have chores left to do. At the end of the day I can feel it in my body.

Multiple problems: extra article 'the of a day' is incorrect (article error), incorrect phrase 'rise down pole' unclear and likely wrong (sentence structure), incorrect verb form 'has' with subject 'I' (subject-verb agreement/tense), and awkward final sentence. Use 'from my experience', 'at the end of the day', 'after a hospital shift', and 'I sometimes still have' to correct tense and agreement. Change 'I would feel my body' to 'I can feel it in my body' to express sensation correctly. Suggestions: simplify complex phrases, ensure subject-verb agreement, and use clear nouns for events (shift, day).

× By following my daily routine after doing everything in my chores, I would get some sleep by resting my body after being exhausted all day long.

✓ After finishing my chores and following my daily routine, I usually get some sleep and rest my body after being exhausted all day long.

Using 'would' here is inappropriate for a habitual action; use present simple 'usually get' to describe regular behavior. Also reorder phrase for clarity: 'After finishing my chores' rather than 'after doing everything in my chores'. Suggestions: use present simple for routines and habits and place adverbs like 'usually' to indicate frequency.

× Listening to my body is very essential and that I think is essential for my health.

✓ Listening to my body is essential, and I think it is important for my health.

Redundant wording and incorrect pronoun reference 'that I think is essential' is awkward. Replace with clear pronoun 'it' and avoid repeating 'essential' twice. Use parallel structure: 'Listening to my body is essential, and I think it is important for my health.' Suggestions: avoid redundancy and use clear pronoun references.