Tiredness— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Make the answer more concise and structured: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid fillers (uh) and repetition. Use more natural phrasing (e.g., “busy days” instead of a long list).

Ejemplo: Yes, I often feel tired. For example, on days when I go to the gym and also have household chores and errands, I get drained because I’m active for long periods. Therefore, busy days with physical tasks make me more tired than when I stay at home and rest.

Sugerencia: Give a direct topic sentence, then supply a clear specific condition and brief explanation. Avoid unclear phrasing and repetition. Use linking words (for example, because) and correct grammar for time references.

Ejemplo: I usually feel tired when I skip breakfast. For instance, if I have to get to university early and miss breakfast, I lack energy throughout the morning because I haven’t refueled my body.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and concisely: state your main action first, then give one or two specific details and a linking phrase to show sequence or result. Use correct tense and clearer vocabulary (e.g., “eat a high-protein meal,” “rest for 20–30 minutes”).

Ejemplo: When I feel tired, I usually eat a high-protein snack first. For example, I might have yogurt with nuts, which quickly boosts my energy, and then I rest for about 20–30 minutes to recover.

× Well whenever I feel tired the first thing came in my mind that my body have low energy.

✓ Well, whenever I feel tired, the first thing that comes to my mind is that my body has low energy.

Problems: incorrect verb tense and forms. 'came' is past tense but the clause is general/present, so use present 'comes'. 'came in my mind' is non-idiomatic; use 'comes to my mind'. 'have' does not agree with singular subject 'my body' and should be 'has'. Suggestion: use present simple for habitual or general statements and ensure subject-verb agreement: 'the first thing that comes to my mind is that my body has low energy.'

× So I used to take a kind of good meal or a kind of high protein meal for my body.

✓ So I take a good meal, usually one high in protein, to help my body.

Problems: incorrect use of 'used to' (implies past habit) when speaker describes a regular present habit; awkward phrase 'a kind of good meal'. Use present simple for habitual actions: 'I take'. Also make adjective order and phrasing natural: 'a good meal, usually one high in protein.'

× So it make me feel energetic and my tiredness going out.

✓ So it makes me feel energetic and my tiredness goes away.

Problems: subject-verb agreement and verb forms. 'make' should be 'makes' to agree with singular subject 'it'. 'my tiredness going out' is ungrammatical; use present simple 'my tiredness goes away' or 'I feel less tired.' Suggestion: ensure verbs agree with their subjects and use correct phrasal verbs ('goes away').

× So this is the first thing and after that I used to do rest.

✓ So this is the first thing, and after that I rest.

Problems: incorrect use of 'used to' for a current habitual action. 'used to' indicates past habit. Use present simple 'I rest' to describe what you do now. Also 'do rest' is awkward; native phrasing is simply 'I rest' or 'I take a rest.'

× Yeah, I feel tired, but mostly when I go to the gym and I have a lot of stuff to do in my house, in and out, work, go to market and rest of the things like, uh, those things make me more feel tired rather than resting myself at home.

✓ Yeah, I feel tired, but mostly when I go to the gym and when I have a lot of things to do at my house — going in and out, work, going to the market and other tasks — those things make me feel more tired than resting at home.

Problems: prepositions and idiomatic expressions. Use 'at my house' not 'in my house' for general activities, 'going to the market' not 'go to market'. 'rest of the things' should be 'other tasks' or 'other things'. 'make me more feel tired' word order is wrong; use 'make me feel more tired'. 'resting myself' is non-idiomatic; use 'resting' or 'resting at home.' Suggestion: choose correct prepositions and natural collocations ('go to the market', 'feel more tired').

× Well, I would feel tired mostly when I don't eat anything in breakfast and go to my daily stuff like university or some other place if I have to reach on time early.

✓ Well, I usually feel tired when I don't eat anything for breakfast and then go about my daily activities, like going to university or another place if I have to arrive early.

Problems: tense/modal misuse and preposition. 'I would feel' suggests conditional; use present simple 'I usually feel' for habitual situations. Use 'for breakfast' not 'in breakfast'. 'go to my daily stuff' is unidiomatic; use 'go about my daily activities' or 'do my daily tasks'. 'reach on time early' should be 'arrive early' or 'arrive on time.' Suggestion: use present simple for habits and correct prepositions ('for breakfast') and verbs ('arrive').

× So yes, it's for it's difficult for me to eat breakfast and whenever.

✓ So yes, it's difficult for me to eat breakfast regularly.

Problems: redundant and broken sentence structure 'it's for it's' and unfinished 'and whenever'. Simplify to clear expression: 'It's difficult for me to eat breakfast regularly.' Suggestion: remove redundancy and complete the idea; use adverb 'regularly' to express frequency.