Tiredness— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Correct grammatical errors and make the response more concise and natural. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one brief supporting detail using a linking word. Avoid redundancy (don’t repeat similar phrases).

Ejemplo: Not really. I usually only feel tired after I come back from school or after a basketball session because those days are long and physically demanding.

Sugerencia: Keep the clear topic sentence, but reduce filler language and fix grammar. Use one linking word to add a specific reason and an example. Be concise (max 5 sentences).

Ejemplo: I often feel tired after a full day at school because there are many lessons to concentrate on and a lot of information to remember, so by the evening my energy is drained.

Sugerencia: Fix verb tense and word order, remove hesitation words, and provide a clearer structure: topic sentence + linking word + specific activities and result. Mention how these actions help you to show reason-effect.

Ejemplo: When I feel tired, I usually go for a short walk or visit the gym; these activities help me relax and reduce stress, so I regain my energy more quickly.

× Not really. I only feel tired whenever I'm came back from school or back from my basketball session.

✓ Not really. I only feel tired whenever I come back from school or come back from my basketball session.

The original uses 'I'm came back', which mixes present continuous 'I'm' with the past participle 'came'. The correct simple present form 'I come back' fits habitual actions ('do you often feel tired?'). Use 'come back' for repeated/regular events. Suggestion: use simple present for habitual actions (I come back).

× For me, I often feel tired after going to school, you know, a long day with a lot of lessons and things to remember, and it's really drained out my energy.

✓ For me, I often feel tired after going to school, you know, after a long day with a lot of lessons and things to remember, and it really drains my energy.

Two problems: 'it's really drained out my energy' uses past participle 'drained' incorrectly with 'it's' and wrong phrasal verb 'drained out'. The meaning requires simple present 'drains' because this is a habitual result. Also 'a long day' needs 'after a long day' or rewording. Suggestion: use present tense 'drains' for habitual effects and 'drains my energy' (no 'out').

× Actually I didn't do don't do much when I feel tired, like I only go outside uh taking a walk or go to the gym to work out so I would feel less stressed.

✓ Actually I don't do much when I feel tired; I only go outside to take a walk or go to the gym to work out so I feel less stressed.

The original 'I didn't do don't do' mixes past and present negatives. Because the speaker describes habitual behaviour, use simple present 'I don't do much'. Also 'go outside uh taking a walk' mixes structures; use 'go outside to take a walk' or 'go for a walk'. 'So I would feel' should be 'so I feel' for habitual result. Suggestion: keep tense consistent (simple present) and use infinitive 'to take' after 'go outside' or use 'go for a walk'.