Tiredness— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Bạn nên nói rõ ràng hơn, tránh lặp từ và sắp xếp ý theo thứ tự: trả lời trực tiếp, nêu lý do cụ thể, rồi kết luận hành động bạn làm. Dùng câu ngắn, tránh tiếng thơm (um, uh) và sửa ngữ pháp (ví dụ: "I'm homey" không phù hợp; có thể là "I'm at home" hoặc "I'm often at home"). Thêm từ nối như "because", "so" để mạch lạc. Giữ tối đa 4-5 câu.

Ejemplo: Yes, I often feel tired. I usually feel exhausted because I work long hours and study at the same time. Because of the stress, I prefer to rest at home to recover. So I avoid the internet and try to relax my mind before going to bed.

Sugerencia: Cần trả lời rõ thời điểm và giải thích cụ thể hậu quả. Tránh lặp và giữ câu mạch lạc bằng các liên từ (e.g., "after", "because", "so"). Sử dụng cụm từ chính xác để mô tả cảm giác (e.g., "I feel too tired to eat"). Giữ 2-4 câu, không lặp từ như "in my" nhiều lần.

Ejemplo: I usually feel tired right after I finish my work or school. After a long day I often feel too exhausted to eat because my mind only wants to rest. As a result, I often go straight to bed or take a short nap to recover.

Sugerencia: Tránh cách xưng hô thân mật với giám khảo (ví dụ: "bro"). Nói cụ thể những hoạt động bạn làm (ví dụ: "take a short nap", "read a book", "go for a walk"). Dùng cấu trúc rõ ràng: chủ đề + lý do + ví dụ. Loại bỏ tiếng ấp úng và sửa ngữ pháp ("turn off the Internet", "avoid playing video games").

Ejemplo: When I feel tired, I try to relax my mind by turning off the internet and taking a short nap. I also avoid playing video games because they make me more distracted. Instead, I sometimes go for a short walk or read a book so I can sleep better that night.

× Yeah, because because I'm homey so I always feel tired like umm, when I before the work or study in school because it's really stressed with me.

✓ Yeah, because I'm at home a lot, I always feel tired before work or school since it makes me very stressed.

The original sentence has repetition, incorrect word choice (homey), and poor sentence structure with misplaced clauses. Use 'at home' and 'before work or school' for correct preposition and noun use. Combine clauses with 'since' or 'because' to show cause clearly. Avoid filler words and repetition.

× So to handle this I will rest in home and umm, not sort the Internet to uh, relax my brain.

✓ To deal with this, I rest at home and don't use the Internet to relax my mind.

Use the base verb 'rest' for habitual action in present, and 'use' instead of 'sort' or incorrect verb. 'At home' is the correct prepositional phrase. 'Relax my mind' is more natural than 'relax my brain.' Also use negative form 'don't use' for general habits.

× Honestly, I feel tired when I finish my work. My work or my school. Yeah, it's so time with me.

✓ Honestly, I feel tired when I finish my work or school; it takes a lot out of me.

The phrase 'it's so time with me' is ungrammatical. Use 'it takes a lot out of me' or 'it is exhausting' to express the idea. Combine fragments into one coherent sentence and maintain present simple for habitual feelings.

× So it made me can, if anything, yeah, very lazy to eat.

✓ Because of that, I often feel too lazy to eat.

Original mixes tenses and has incorrect modal placement ('made me can'). Use 'often feel too lazy to' to express habitual tendency. Keep subject-verb order simple.

× I in my in my, in my, in my mind. I always in oh, I need to rest now. I need to sleep. I don't wanna eat anything.

✓ In my mind, I always think, 'I need to rest now. I need to sleep. I don't want to eat anything.'

Remove repeated fragments and place 'in my mind' at the start. Use 'think' to introduce internal thoughts and use full form 'want to' in formal speech. Quoted thoughts can express internal monologue.

× I told you bro, when I feel tired, I will relax my brain and uh, either blow the Internet and uh, avoid to umm, to play game with video games.

✓ Like I said, when I feel tired, I relax my mind, either by turning off the Internet or by avoiding playing video games.

Use present simple 'relax' for habitual actions. 'Turn off the Internet' is the correct phrase instead of 'blow the Internet.' Use 'avoid playing' rather than 'avoid to play' — 'avoid' is followed by a gerund.

× Yeah voice and it made me feel better in tomorrow.

✓ That helps me feel better the next day.

Don't use 'in tomorrow'; use 'the next day' or 'the following day.' Use present simple or present tense to describe general result: 'That helps me feel better the next day.' 'Made' should be 'helps' for habitual effect.