Politeness— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 「両親から学んだ」という主題は適切ですが、言い直しや不自然な表現が多く、意味が伝わりにくくなっています。「polite」や「behave politely」を使い、具体的にどのような場面で教えられたかを1つ加えましょう。

Ejemplo: My parents taught me to be polite when I was a child. They told me to say “please” and “thank you” and to listen carefully when other people were speaking.

Sugerencia: 意見と理由を述べようとしている点は良いですが、「being bright」は文脈に合わないため「being polite」に直す必要があります。また、「rudeness makes other people feel annoyed」の前に、自然な主語と文構造を置き、結果を明確に説明しましょう。

Ejemplo: Yes, I think being polite is very important because it shows respect for other people. If we are rude, people may feel uncomfortable or annoyed, and this can damage our relationships.

Sugerencia: 電車内のマナーについて答えようとしていますが、文法と語彙の誤りが多く、質問への回答が不明確です。「on public transport」などの一般的な表現を使い、具体的な行動（声を小さくする、電話を控える、席を譲る）を論理的につなげましょう。

Ejemplo: We should be polite on public transport, especially when we are on a crowded train. For example, we should keep our voices down, avoid making phone calls, and give our seat to elderly passengers if necessary.

Sugerencia: 「子どもの頃に何をしたか」という質問に対し、具体的な行動を明確に述べる必要があります。「intended to Great」は不自然なので、「greeted people」や「said hello」を使いましょう。誰に、どのように挨拶したかを加えると、内容がより具体的になります。

Ejemplo: When I was a child, I showed my politeness by greeting people whenever I met them. I usually said hello to my teachers, neighbours, and my parents’ friends.

× My parents told me how to behave poetry, like how to speak.

✓ My parents taught me how to behave politely, such as how to speak politely.

The word 'poetry' is a noun and cannot modify the verb 'behave'. The adverb 'politely' is needed because it describes how someone behaves or speaks.

× My parents told me how to behave politely, like how do I say like how to speak politely.

✓ My parents taught me how to behave politely, such as how to speak politely.

After 'told me how to', use an infinitive phrase, not a direct-question structure. 'How do I say?' is a direct question, whereas 'how to speak' is appropriate in this sentence.

× Yeah, I think being bright is very important because the rudeness makes other people feel annoyed.

✓ Yes, I think being polite is very important because rudeness makes other people feel annoyed.

When 'rudeness' refers to the general quality of being rude, it is an uncountable abstract noun and normally does not take the definite article 'the'.

× For example, when you on the train, you should be polite.

✓ For example, when you are on the train, you should be polite.

The clause 'when you on the train' has no verb. The linking verb 'are' is required after the subject 'you'.

× You should the neighbour make a phone call on the train.

✓ You should not make a phone call on the train.

A modal verb such as 'should' must be followed by the base form of a verb. To express the intended negative advice, place 'not' after 'should' and use the base verb 'make'.

× When you are on train, you should be polite.

✓ When you are on the train, you should be polite.

Use the definite article 'the' in the common expression 'on the train' because you are referring to a specific type of public transport and its usual setting.

× For example when you are on the train you should be polite like siren so you should not make the neighbour make a phone call on the train.

✓ For example, when you are on the train, you should be polite, such as by not making a phone call.

The original sentence contains several clauses joined in an unclear order. Use a complete 'when' clause followed by the main clause, and use 'such as by + -ing' to give an example of polite behavior.

× When I was a kid, I usually intended to greet with people who met first.

✓ When I was a kid, I usually tried to greet people I met first.

The original sentence has an incomplete and incorrectly organized verb phrase. 'Greet' is a transitive verb, so it is followed directly by an object such as 'people', not by 'with'. The relative clause can be reduced to 'people I met first'.