Politeness— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 回答直接提到了父母，但语法和表达不够自然。应说“learned good manners from my parents”，并将过去时“ask”改为“asked”。“say hello to my relatives”中不需要“when”，而且应使用连接词把例子和结果连接起来。建议用2—3句话说明父母如何教你，以及这种教育带来的影响。

Ejemplo: I learned good manners mainly from my parents. They often reminded me to greet my relatives and say “please” and “thank you” when I was young. As a result, I became more respectful and considerate toward other people.

Sugerencia: 观点是明确的，但存在较多语法和搭配错误。“crucial to one success”应改为“crucial to a person’s success”；“their guest”与“their guests”应保持一致；“abandon them”语气过强且不自然，可以改为“may avoid them”。结尾重复使用“matter”和“manners”，影响流畅度。建议用“because”或“as a result”清楚解释礼貌如何帮助建立良好的人际关系。

Ejemplo: Yes, I think being polite is extremely important because it helps us build positive relationships. For instance, if someone treats their guests rudely, those guests may feel uncomfortable and avoid visiting again. Good manners show respect and make communication much smoother.

Sugerencia: 这段回答的核心意思不清楚，主要问题是把“polite”误说成了“played”，并且句子结构混乱。“on almost every occasion”比“in almost every occasion”更自然；“when we greet our acquaintances”应使用正确搭配。建议先直接回答“几乎所有场合”，再列举正式场合、与陌生人交流等具体例子，并用“especially”和“although”组织内容。

Ejemplo: We should be polite on almost every occasion, especially when we meet strangers, attend formal events, or speak to older people. Even with close friends, we should avoid saying things that might hurt their feelings. However, we can usually speak more casually with people we know well.

Sugerencia: 回答没有完整结束，因此内容不充分。应使用过去时，例如“greeted”和“waited”，而不是“will wait”。“greeted almost every relative”已经足够，不需要重复“every relative”；“wait and see”不符合这里的意思，可以改为“waited for everyone to be served”。建议提供两个具体行为，并用“also”或“in addition”连接。

Ejemplo: As a child, I showed politeness by greeting my relatives whenever I saw them. I also waited for everyone to be served before starting dinner. In addition, I listened quietly when adults were speaking and said “thank you” after meals.

× They often ask me to say hello when to my relatives when I was a child.

✓ They often asked me to say hello to my relatives when I was a child.

句子描述的是童年时期发生的事情，应该使用一般过去时，所以 ask 要改为 asked。

× They often ask me to say hello when to my relatives when I was a child.

✓ They often asked me to say hello to my relatives when I was a child.

say hello 后面直接使用介词 to，表示“向某人问好”。不能说 say hello when to my relatives。

× Yes, I believe being polite is crucial to one success.

✓ Yes, I believe being polite is crucial to one's success.

one 表示泛指的“一个人”时，后面需要使用所有格形式 one's，表示“一个人的成功”。

× For example, if someone is impolite to their guest, I think their guests will just abandon them.

✓ For example, if someone is impolite to their guests, I think their guests will just abandon them.

前面使用了复数概念 their guests，后面也应保持复数形式和表达的一致性。

× So it's really the matter so the manners are really matters.

✓ So, manners really matter.

原句把 it matters、the matter 和 manners matter 等结构混在一起，导致句子结构错误。这里用 manners 作主语，使用动词 matter，意思是“礼仪真的很重要”。

× I think we should be played in almost every occasion.

✓ I think we should be polite on almost every occasion.

played 是动词 play 的过去式或过去分词，不能表达“有礼貌的”。这里需要使用形容词 polite。

× I think we should be played in almost every occasion.

✓ I think we should be polite on almost every occasion.

表示“在每个场合”通常使用 on，应该说 on almost every occasion，而不是 in almost every occasion。

× I just think during any occasion we shouldn't be played maybe when we greet with our acquaintances, but we also need to be polite we cannot cross on certain lines.

✓ I just think that during any occasion we shouldn't be impolite. Maybe when we greet our acquaintances, we also need to be polite, and we cannot cross certain lines.

played 不能表示“无礼的”；这里应使用形容词 impolite。

× I just think during any occasion we shouldn't be played maybe when we greet with our acquaintances, but we also need to be polite we cannot cross on certain lines.

✓ I just think that during any occasion we shouldn't be impolite. Maybe when we greet our acquaintances, we also need to be polite, and we cannot cross certain lines.

greet 后面直接接人，不使用 with；应该说 greet our acquaintances。cross lines 也是固定搭配，cross 后面不需要介词 on。

× I just think during any occasion we shouldn't be played maybe when we greet with our acquaintances, but we also need to be polite we cannot cross on certain lines.

✓ I just think that during any occasion we shouldn't be impolite. Maybe when we greet our acquaintances, we also need to be polite, and we cannot cross certain lines.

原句中多个分句直接连接，缺少清晰的连接方式。使用 that、maybe 和 and 可以使各个分句之间的逻辑关系更清楚。

× I just think during any occasion we shouldn't be played maybe when we greet with our acquaintances, but we also need to be polite we cannot cross on certain lines.

✓ I just think that during any occasion we shouldn't be impolite. Maybe when we greet our acquaintances, we also need to be polite, and we cannot cross certain lines.

原句包含多个独立分句，但没有正确使用标点或连接词，造成句子结构混乱。应拆分句子，并使用合适的连接词连接分句。

× What I often did is as I greeted almost every relative every relative.

✓ What I often did was greet almost every relative.

What I often did 后面应使用 was，再接动词原形 greet。as 在这里没有必要，而且 every relative 重复了一次。

× Also for example when we had dinner I will wait and see.

✓ Also, for example, when we had dinner, I would wait and see.

when we had dinner 表示过去的习惯，主句不能使用将来时 will。描述过去经常做的事情时，可以使用 would；也可以说 I waited。