Politeness— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 문법과 어휘 사용에서 여러 오류가 있어 의사 전달이 다소 불분명합니다. 문장은 현재 과거 일치를 맞추고 관용 표현과 단어 철자를 정확히 사용하도록 연습하세요. 또한 질문에 바로 답하는 주제 문장(예: 'I learned to be polite from my parents')을 먼저 말하고, 이어서 구체적 예시(문을 잡아주기, 인사하기 등)를 연결어(For example, also, because 등)로 자연스럽게 연결하세요.

Ejemplo: I learned to be polite from my parents. For example, they taught me small gestures like holding the door for others and saying 'please' and 'thank you'. Because of their guidance, these habits became natural to me.

Sugerencia: 의견 제시는 잘 되었으나 문장 구조와 어휘 선택을 더 명확히 해야 합니다. 핵심 문장을 간결하게 말한 뒤 이유를 두 세부 항목으로 나눠 구체적으로 설명하세요. 연결어(for example, because, therefore 등)를 사용해 논리 흐름을 명확히 하세요.

Ejemplo: Yes, I believe being polite is very important. It helps build good relationships and shows respect for others. Also, being polite benefits ourselves because it creates a positive atmosphere and makes social interactions smoother.

Sugerencia: 의도를 잘 전달하려 했으나 어휘(‘limited’, ‘daily lives’)와 문법(조동사·관사) 오류가 보입니다. 질문에 직접 답하는 주제 문장을 사용하고, ‘in daily life’나 ‘on all occasions’ 같은 자연스러운 표현을 사용하세요. 또한 구체적 예시(공공장소, 직장, 가족 등)를 덧붙이면 좋습니다.

Ejemplo: Politeness should be practiced in everyday life, not only on special occasions. For example, we should be polite at work, in public places, and when talking with family members because it shows respect and consideration.

Sugerencia: 과거 상황을 묻는 질문이므로 과거 시제를 정확히 사용하세요. 또한 구체적인 행동을 더 명확하게 제시하고 간결하게 말하세요(예: 'I used to let my friends go first' 등). 연결어(For example, also)로 행동을 나열하면 듣기 쉬워집니다.

Ejemplo: When I was a child, I showed politeness by letting my friends go first and by standing quietly in line. I also tried to say 'please' and 'thank you' whenever I asked for something.

× As I were young, my parents always said the politi comes from a smart thing, not a big thing.

✓ When I was young, my parents always said that politeness comes from small smart actions, not big things.

'As I were young' uses wrong verb form and connector; correct is 'When I was young' (past). 'Were' should be 'was' for singular first person in past. 'The politi' is incorrect article and noun form; use 'politeness'. 'Comes' is present simple which is acceptable as a general truth, but surrounding clause is past so include 'always said that' + present simple 'politeness comes' or 'politeness came' depending on emphasis; here 'said that politeness comes' is fine. 'From a smart thing' is unnatural; change to 'from small smart actions' and 'not a big thing' to 'not big things' to match plural. Suggestion: use 'When I was young, my parents always said that politeness comes from small thoughtful actions, not big gestures.'

× Like, for example, hold a door for my behind person

✓ For example, hold the door for the person behind me.

'Hold a door' is acceptable but 'hold the door' is more natural. 'For my behind person' uses incorrect word order and preposition; correct is 'the person behind me.' Use 'behind me' to indicate position. Also add an article 'the' before 'door' and 'person' for specificity.

× I think politeness is one of the important values that we have to keep in mind for daily lives and polite is not about the other person but also to ourselves.

✓ I think politeness is one of the important values we should keep in mind in daily life, and politeness is not only about the other person but also about ourselves.

'For daily lives' is incorrect; use 'in daily life' or 'in our daily lives.' 'Polite is not about the other person' uses adjective 'polite' where noun 'politeness' is needed and misses 'only' to express contrast. Also 'but also to ourselves' requires 'about ourselves.' Suggestion: use consistent noun forms and prepositions: 'politeness... in daily life... not only about others but also about ourselves.'

× Actually, I think the politeness is not a thing that limited in some special moments or situations and to some people, I think politeness is should be cresp to our daily lives.

✓ Actually, I think politeness is not something limited to special moments or certain people; I think politeness should be present in our daily lives.

'The politeness' incorrectly uses definite article; use 'politeness' without 'the.' 'A thing that limited in' is ungrammatical; use 'something limited to' or 'limited to.' 'To some people' should be 'certain people.' 'Politeness is should be cresp' mixes modal/auxiliary and a wrong adjective 'cresp' (not a word). Correct is 'should be present' or 'should be part of' our daily lives. Suggestion: use 'something limited to' and replace 'cresp' with 'present' or 'common.'

× As you know, it's quite hard for show our politeness when we're young, but I think I give it first for my friends and stand in line quietly.

✓ As you know, it's quite hard to show politeness when we're young, but I think I gave it to my friends first and stood in line quietly.

'For show' is incorrect; use 'to show.' Tense consistency required: question asked about childhood (past), so use past verbs 'gave' and 'stood.' 'I give it first for my friends' is unnatural; use 'I gave it to my friends first.' Also 'stand in line quietly' should be past 'stood in line quietly.'

× I think that's polite enough when we're young.

✓ I think that's polite enough when we were young.

Context refers to past (childhood), so 'we're young' (we are) is inconsistent; use past 'we were young.' 'That's' can stay as contraction of 'that is' but context prefers 'that was' — however 'that's' as comment about past action is better as 'that was polite enough.' Suggestion: maintain past tense for consistency.