Politeness— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 回答は意味が通りますが、いくつかの点で改善できます。まず主題文は明確ですが、文法と語彙の誤り（例：'praise and great people' は不自然）を直す必要があります。具体的には、短く簡潔なセンテンスを心がけ、正しい動詞形や前置詞を使いましょう。また、例をもう少し具体的に（何歳のときにどのように教えられたか等）述べると説得力が増します。最後に、回答の長さは3文以内にまとめ、冗長な語句を避けてください。

Ejemplo: My parents taught me manners from a young age because they valued rules. For example, they always reminded me to say “thank you” and to speak respectfully to adults at home and school. As a result, politeness became a habit.

Sugerencia: 主張は明確ですが、文中に繰り返し（"it helps me it helps people"）や語の誤用（"grading people politely"）があります。論理のつなぎ目を滑らかにするために接続詞や副詞（therefore, because, for exampleなど）を適切に使い、具体的な理由や短い一例を加えると良いです。文法を正し、冗長な表現を省いて、2〜3文で簡潔に述べましょう。

Ejemplo: Yes, I think politeness is very important in Japan because it helps people get along and prevents misunderstandings. For instance, showing appreciation and speaking respectfully to others is expected in both schools and workplaces.

Sugerencia: 回答は論理的で自然ですが、'especially strangers or others' のような重複を避け、もう少し具体的な場面（職場、家庭、公共の場など）を挙げると良いです。また、接続語（for example, such as）を用いて文を整理するとさらに明瞭になります。回答は2文以内にまとめるのが望ましいです。

Ejemplo: We should be polite in most social situations, such as when talking to strangers, colleagues, or elders. For example, using polite language on public transport or in meetings shows respect and helps maintain good relationships.

Sugerencia: 内容は分かりやすいですが、時制や語順の問題（"I always say"→過去形の方が自然、"and doing so they treat me kindly" の構造が不自然）が見られます。具体的な行動（例えば毎朝挨拶した、宿題を手伝ってくれたときに礼を言った）を短く述べ、なぜそれが効果的だったかを一文で説明すると良いでしょう。

Ejemplo: As a child, I showed politeness by greeting adults every morning and saying “thank you” when someone helped me. Because of these habits, teachers and family members often treated me kindly, and I developed strong relationships.

× When I was a child my parents taught me to be polite because they are very strict about rules and manners.

✓ When I was a child, my parents taught me to be polite because they were very strict about rules and manners.

The sentence mixes past and present tense: 'When I was a child' sets past context, so 'are' should be 'were' to match tense. Add a comma after the introductory clause for clarity. Improve coherence by keeping verbs in the same time frame.

× For example they encouraged me to say thank you and praise and great people politely.

✓ For example, they encouraged me to say thank you and to praise and greet people politely.

Missing comma after 'For example'. The phrase 'praise and great people' has a typo: 'great' should be 'greet'. Also add 'to' before 'praise' to create parallel infinitives 'to say' and 'to praise and greet'.

× Yes, being polite is very important, especially in Japan because it helps me it helps people to get along and avoid misunderstandings.

✓ Yes, being polite is very important, especially in Japan, because it helps people get along and avoid misunderstandings.

Remove redundant 'it helps me it helps' and unnecessary 'to' after 'helps'. Add commas to separate the parenthetical phrase. Use 'helps people get along' (bare infinitive) rather than 'helps people to get along' for more natural phrasing.

× For example, grading people politely or showing appreciation is expected from both children and adults.

✓ For example, greeting people politely or showing appreciation is expected from both children and adults.

'Grading' is incorrect; context requires 'greeting'. Ensure subject-verb agreement: 'greeting or showing appreciation is expected' is acceptable because the compound gerund phrase is treated as singular.

× We should be polite when we speak with others, especially strangers or others because politeness shows respect and consideration to them, which helps build good relationships.

✓ We should be polite when we speak with others, especially strangers, because politeness shows respect and consideration for them, which helps build good relationships.

Remove redundant 'or others'. Use comma before 'because' to improve readability. Use 'consideration for' rather than 'consideration to' — 'consideration for someone' is the correct prepositional collocation.

× By greeting politely or saying thank you, I showed my politeness as a child.

✓ By greeting people politely or saying thank you, I showed politeness as a child.

Add object 'people' after 'greeting' for clarity. 'My politeness' is awkward; 'showed politeness' is more natural. Keep past tense 'showed' to match the timeframe.

× For example, I always say thank you to my parents or teachers and doing so they treat me kindly so I could build good relationships.

✓ For example, I always said thank you to my parents and teachers, and because I did, they treated me kindly, so I could build good relationships.

The original mixes present ('always say') with past context; change to past 'always said'. Use 'and because I did' to link cause and effect; insert commas for clarity. 'Parents or teachers' becomes 'parents and teachers' (both often receive thanks). 'Could' is acceptable for past ability/outcome.