Politeness— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Cần sửa ngữ pháp thì hiện tại/ quá khứ, dùng câu chủ đề rõ ràng và sắp xếp ý mạch lạc hơn. Thêm chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ hành động của bố mẹ) và dùng liên từ để kết nối câu. Tránh lặp từ và dùng từ vựng phù hợp (ví dụ: observe, behave, show respect).

Ejemplo: I learned to be polite by observing my parents when I was a child. For example, they always said “please” and “thank you,” greeted neighbors warmly, and listened carefully when others spoke. Because I watched these habits every day, I started to copy them and it became natural for me to show respect to others.

Sugerencia: Cần sửa ngữ nghĩa không rõ và lỗi từ (từ ‘Shozo/Shoxo’ không rõ). Trả lời trực tiếp với một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, giải thích lý do cụ thể (ví dụ: tạo môi trường tích cực, cải thiện giao tiếp) và dùng liên từ để nối ý. Sử dụng từ vựng chính xác (respect, create, improve, atmosphere).

Ejemplo: Yes, I believe politeness is very important because it creates a respectful and pleasant environment. When people are polite, communication becomes smoother and conflicts are less likely to happen. As a result, workplaces and communities function better and people feel more comfortable.

× To learn to be polite, I will look at my parents whose very polite people and I will look at how they talk, how they do and respect others so I can do it like them.

✓ To learn to be polite, I looked at my parents, who are very polite people, and I watched how they talk, how they act, and how they respect others so I could do the same.

Use past tense to match 'How did you learn' (Present-Past consistency). Replace 'whose' with the relative pronoun 'who' for people; 'whose' shows possession. Change 'very polite people' order to 'who are very polite people' and add comma. Use 'looked at' -> 'looked at' or 'watched' and 'how they do' -> 'how they act'. Use 'so I could do the same' to show ability in the past. Ensure pronouns refer to people correctly and verbs agree with tense.

× Yes, of course being polite is very important in Shozo.

✓ Yes, of course being polite is very important in society.

The original sentence likely has a wrong noun 'Shozo' (probably intended 'society'). Keep present simple 'is' for general truth. Ensure correct noun choice; proper nouns must be used correctly. If 'Shozo' were a proper noun, retain it, but 'society' fits the context.

× When everyone is polite they will make Shoxo small respect others and more make the shows more better and be good for the other.

✓ When everyone is polite, they show more respect to others, make our communities better, and it is good for everyone.

Sentence had multiple issues: subject-verb agreement and word choice. Use a comma after the subordinate clause. 'They will make Shoxo small respect others' is unclear: replace with 'they show more respect to others'. Remove redundant 'more' and incorrect comparative 'more better' -> 'better'. Use parallel structure for verbs: 'show..., make..., and it is...'. Ensure noun agreement 'everyone' -> singular pronoun 'they' acceptable for gender-neutral; verbs must agree. Clarify meaning with 'communities' or 'society' and 'everyone' instead of 'the other'.