Politeness— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Your answer has a relevant main idea (parents taught you politeness) but is unclear and repetitive. Improve by giving a clear topic sentence, one or two specific supporting details (examples or how parents taught you), and avoid repetition. Use linking words (for example, however, therefore) and correct basic grammar (e.g., “When I was a child,” “humanity” → “being humane” or “kindness”). Keep it concise (max 4–5 sentences).

Ejemplo: When I was a child, my parents taught me to be polite by setting an example and correcting my behavior. For example, they always said “please” and “thank you” and encouraged me to greet elders respectfully. As a result, I learned that politeness helps build trust because appearances can be misleading; a friendly manner makes people feel comfortable.

Sugerencia: The answer repeats earlier points and is incomplete. State your direct opinion first (Yes or No), then give one or two specific reasons (e.g., builds relationships, shows respect), using linking words to connect ideas. Fix grammar and finish sentences. Keep it concise and avoid repeating wording from the previous answer.

Ejemplo: Yes, I think being polite is very important because it shows respect and helps form positive relationships. For instance, politeness can make first impressions better and ease conversations with strangers. Therefore, even if someone looks unfriendly, a polite attitude often reveals their true character and encourages goodwill.

× When I was child, my parents told me to be kind and polite.

✓ When I was a child, my parents told me to be kind and polite.

The noun 'child' needs the singular determiner 'a' when referring to a single, indefinite instance. Use 'a child' to indicate the speaker's state in childhood. Suggestion: include the article 'a' before singular countable nouns (e.g., 'When I was a child').

× But from my perspective the previous thing it's still to be humanity because in our life we can't meet someone who can look dangerous.

✓ But from my perspective, the most important thing is to be humane, because in life we may meet someone who looks dangerous.

Multiple issues: 'previous thing' is unclear and unnatural, 'it's still to be humanity' is ungrammatical; 'humanity' is a noun meaning compassion but 'humane' or 'kind' fits better; 'in our life we can't meet' contradicts intended meaning, use 'in life we may meet' or 'we can meet'; 'who can look dangerous' should be 'who looks dangerous' (no modal). Suggestion: simplify to 'the most important thing is to be humane' and use 'may meet' for possibility and simple relative clause 'who looks dangerous'.

× But as life shows especially these people have kind heart.

✓ But as life shows, these people especially have kind hearts.

Word order and noun form: 'especially these people' is awkward; place 'especially' before the phrase or after the verb; 'kind heart' should be plural 'kind hearts' when speaking generally. Suggestion: write 'these people especially have kind hearts' or 'especially these people have kind hearts'.

× We can meet someone with pretty face but his soul and heart are this.

✓ We can meet someone with a pretty face but his soul and heart are not the same.

Missing article before 'pretty face' ('a pretty face'); 'this' is incorrect pronoun to compare inner qualities, use 'not the same' or 'different'. Suggestion: use 'a' before singular countable nouns and choose appropriate comparative phrase like 'not the same'.

× When I was a child, my parents taught me to be kind and polite. However, from my perspective, the most private thing is still to be humanity in our life we can meet new people, someone can look dangerous but as life shows especially these people have kind heart.

✓ When I was a child, my parents taught me to be kind and polite. However, from my perspective, the most important thing is to be humane. In life we can meet new people who may look dangerous, but as life shows, these people especially often have kind hearts.

Run-on sentence and wrong word choices: 'most private thing' is incorrect; use 'most important thing'. 'To be humanity' should be 'to be humane' or 'to show humanity'. Sentence needed splitting with punctuation. 'Someone can look dangerous' should be 'people who may look dangerous'. 'Have kind heart' needs plural 'kind hearts' and adverb placement 'especially often' or 'often especially' with commas. Suggestion: break into shorter sentences, choose correct adjectives ('important', 'humane'), and use modal 'may' for possibility.