Paper— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 回答基本切题，也提供了具体经历，但开头的“I remember Kari that But”不自然，句子连接和语法问题较多。应直接说明做过什么，再用“when I was a child”和“because”补充背景和原因；“compete with my friends”应改为“competed with my friends”，“whose airplane can fly far away”应改为“whose plane could fly the farthest”。

Ejemplo: Yes, I used to make paper airplanes when I was a child. I often competed with my friends to see whose plane could fly the farthest. I usually won, so it was one of my favorite activities.

Sugerencia: 回答有明确活动和细节，但“cat care carton”表达不清，应使用“a cartoon cat character”；代词和时态不一致，如“her/his”和“admire”应统一为过去时“admired”。建议先直接回答喜欢做什么，再说明模仿对象、原因和投入的时间，并使用“especially”和“because”增强逻辑。

Ejemplo: When I was a child, I loved drawing cartoon characters on paper, especially a cat character from my favorite cartoon. I often copied her facial expressions and clothes because I admired her style. Then, I would spend hours coloring her with colored pencils.

Sugerencia: 回答直接表达了“不经常写”，并给出了生日的具体例子，但第一句缺少完整结构，建议说“Not very often, but I do so on special occasions”。“came to her birthday”应改为“went to her birthday party”，“She's very enjoyed”应改为“She really enjoyed it”。

Ejemplo: Not very often, but I still write physical letters on special occasions, such as my best friend’s birthday. Last summer, I wrote her a handwritten letter and gave it to her at her birthday party. She really appreciated it because it felt personal and thoughtful.

Sugerencia: 回答提到了现代人依赖手机和电脑，但语法、词汇和逻辑不够清晰。“most of people”应改为“most people”，“they not frequently keep handwriting letters”表达错误。应明确回答大多数人不会保存手写信，但有些人会因为情感价值而保留，并加入对比或原因。

Ejemplo: I think most people do not keep many handwritten letters nowadays because they use phones and computers to communicate. However, some people still keep letters from family members or close friends because these messages have strong sentimental value.

Sugerencia: 答案没有直接回答自己是否随身携带纸和笔，而是讨论了人们如何保存信息，因此需要先明确回答“Yes, I do”或“No, I don’t”。此外，“storm personal messages”应为“store personal messages”，“instead of keep”应为“instead of keeping”。可以补充一个具体场景，例如记笔记、填写表格或手机没电时使用。

Ejemplo: No, I usually don’t carry paper and pens when I go out because my phone is more convenient for taking notes. However, I might bring them to a meeting or when I travel, in case I need to write something down or my phone runs out of battery.

× Yes, I remember Kari that But when I was a child, I always made the paper airplane and to compete with my friends. whose airplane can fly far away.

✓ Yes, I remember that when I was a child, I always made paper airplanes and competed with my friends to see whose airplane could fly farther.

原句中有多余和重复的连接词，句子结构混乱；“whose airplane...”也是不完整的句子。可以用“to see whose...”连接目的，使句子结构完整、清晰。

× I always made the paper airplane and to compete with my friends.

✓ I always made paper airplanes and competed with my friends.

这里是在泛指小时候经常做的纸飞机，所以应使用复数“paper airplanes”。同时，两个并列动作应保持一致。

× I always made the paper airplane and to compete with my friends.

✓ I always made paper airplanes and competed with my friends.

“When I was a child”表示过去时间，因此“compete”应使用过去式“competed”，并与“made”保持时态一致。

× whose airplane can fly far away.

✓ to see whose airplane could fly farther.

这里是在比较谁的飞机飞得更远，应使用比较级“farther”。因为叙述的是过去的经历，“can”应改为过去式“could”。

× especially a favorite cat care carton.

✓ especially my favorite cartoon cat.

原句中的修饰词顺序不自然。“cartoon”应放在名词“cat”前面作定语；“my favorite”也比“a favorite”更符合语境。

× I remember I often copied her facial expression and clothes because I admire his style and I would spend hours coloring her with colored pencil.

✓ I remember that I often copied its facial expressions and clothes because I admired its style, and I would spend hours coloring it with colored pencils.

原句交替使用“her”和“his”，指代不一致。猫卡通形象通常用“it/its”指代。另外，“facial expressions”和“colored pencils”在这里应使用复数。

× I remember I often copied her facial expression and clothes because I admire his style and I would spend hours coloring her with colored pencil.

✓ I remember that I often copied its facial expressions and clothes because I admired its style, and I would spend hours coloring it with colored pencils.

整段是在讲童年时的经历，因此“admire”应改为过去式“admired”，与“copied”和“would spend”保持一致。

× I remember I often copied her facial expression and clothes because I admire his style and I would spend hours coloring her with colored pencil.

✓ I remember that I often copied its facial expressions and clothes because I admired its style, and I would spend hours coloring it with colored pencils.

“facial expressions”表示多种面部表情；通常使用彩色铅笔时也用复数“colored pencils”。

× Not often but some special occasions such as my best friend Amy's birthday.

✓ Not often, but I do write letters on some special occasions, such as my best friend Amy's birthday.

原句只有短语，没有完整的主语和谓语，因此不是完整句子。应补充主语“I”和谓语“write”。

× Not often but some special occasions such as my best friend Amy's birthday.

✓ Not often, but I do write letters on some special occasions, such as my best friend Amy's birthday.

表示“在某些特殊场合”时，应使用介词“on”，即“on some special occasions”。

× I remember clearly that last summer holiday when I came to her birthday, I wrote a handwritten letter for her.

✓ I remember clearly that during the last summer holiday, when I went to her birthday party, I wrote a handwritten letter for her.

“came to her birthday”搭配不正确。参加生日聚会通常说“went to her birthday party”。表示“在暑假期间”时，可以使用“during”。

× She's very enjoyed.

✓ She enjoyed it very much.

“last summer holiday”表示过去时间，所以应使用一般过去时“enjoyed”。“She's enjoyed”不能表达“她很喜欢”，并且“enjoy”需要明确宾语“it”。

× I think most of people rely on using phones or computers to remember some information such as the letters and message they not frequently keep handwriting letters.

✓ I think most people rely on using phones or computers to remember some information, such as letters and messages, and they do not frequently keep handwritten letters.

“most people”表示“大多数人”，泛指复数名词时不需要“of”。只有在“most of the people”这类结构中才需要“of”和限定词“the”。

× I think most of people rely on using phones or computers to remember some information such as the letters and message they not frequently keep handwriting letters.

✓ I think most people rely on using phones or computers to remember some information, such as letters and messages, and they do not frequently keep handwritten letters.

“letters and message”是并列名词，前者为复数，因此“message”也应改为复数“messages”。

× I think most of people rely on using phones or computers to remember some information such as the letters and message they not frequently keep handwriting letters.

✓ I think most people rely on using phones or computers to remember some information, such as letters and messages, and they do not frequently keep handwritten letters.

原句把多个意思直接堆在一起，缺少清晰的连接结构。可以用“and”连接两个完整分句，并把“handwriting letters”改成“handwritten letters”来修饰名词。

× they not frequently keep handwriting letters.

✓ they do not frequently keep handwritten letters.

一般现在时的否定句需要使用助动词“do”或“does”。主语是“they”，所以使用“do not”。

× I think most people nowadays rely on phones or computer to storm personal messages and letters because it's more convenient and easier to find later.

✓ I think most people nowadays rely on phones or computers to storm personal messages and letters because they are more convenient and easier to find later.

“phones or computer”表示两种设备，名词应保持并列一致，因此“computer”应改为复数“computers”。“they”指代复数的手机和电脑，所以谓语应使用“are”。

× I think most people nowadays rely on phones or computer to storm personal messages and letters because it's more convenient and easier to find later.

✓ I think most people nowadays rely on phones or computers to storm personal messages and letters because they are more convenient and easier to find later.

“it's”指代不清，而且后面的形容词比较对象是“phones or computers”，它们是复数，因此应使用“they are”。

× many people keep emails and scanned copies of old letters on their phones instead of keep the original handwriting

✓ Many people keep emails and scanned copies of old letters on their phones instead of keeping the original letters.

“instead of”后面通常接名词或动名词。因为后面表示动作，所以“keep”应改为动名词“keeping”。