Paper— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Answer the question directly and use a clear past-tense structure. The response contains several unclear words and phrases, such as “clothesparent,” “raise them,” and “in the playground,” and it combines too many ideas in one sentence. Explain what you made, who you gave it to, and why you enjoyed it. Use linking words such as “then” and “because,” and keep the answer to two or three complete sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, I made paper planes when I was young. I often gave them to my classmates, and we flew them in the playground. It was simple and inexpensive, but we enjoyed improving our designs.

Sugerencia: Begin with a direct topic sentence and describe the activities accurately. Some words are unclear, including “paper cliffs,” “clothes plains,” and “tolly”; use familiar vocabulary such as “paper crafts,” “classmates,” and “toys.” Correct the verb forms: say “we decorated them and then flew them” and “because it was fun and inexpensive.” Give one specific reason why you liked this activity.

Ejemplo: As a child, I liked making paper planes and other simple paper crafts with my classmates. We decorated them and then flew them in the playground. I enjoyed it because it was fun, creative, and much cheaper than buying toys.

Sugerencia: Give a clear answer and avoid repeating “actually.” The words “pistol” and “pon” appear to be transcription or pronunciation problems; use “physical letters” and “phone.” Explain when or why you write letters, and use natural expressions such as “more personal” rather than “more romantic” if you mean that letters feel meaningful. Improve grammar by saying “it is easier for me to express my emotions.”

Ejemplo: Yes, I still write physical letters occasionally, especially for birthdays or other special occasions. I prefer writing on paper to typing on my phone because it feels more personal. It also makes it easier for me to express my emotions.

Sugerencia: The answer is incomplete, so finish your main idea with a clear conclusion. Avoid repeating “many people” and replace unclear words such as “poem” with “phone.” Use a contrast to make the answer more balanced: most people store messages digitally, although some keep handwritten letters because they are sentimental. Include one specific reason or example.

Ejemplo: Most people do not keep many handwritten letters today because they usually communicate through their phones and do not carry pens or paper. However, some people still keep letters from family members because they are personal and memorable.

Sugerencia: State your answer directly and complete the final sentence. Replace “pants” and “pun” with “pens” and “phone,” and say “when I need to write something” instead of “when I face the occasion.” Use a simple reason-and-alternative structure: you do not carry stationery because you can use the notes app on your phone. Avoid unnecessary words such as “the” before “my phone.”

Ejemplo: No, I usually do not carry paper and pens when I go out. If I need to write something down, I use the notes app on my phone because it is more convenient. I only take a pen and some paper when I attend a class or a meeting.

× Yes, I used it to fold the paper plane when I was young so I gave it to my clothesparent to raise them in the playground the process was very simple and we can easily enjoy that and we tried to improve our design.

✓ Yes, I used it to fold a paper plane when I was young, so I gave it to my clothesparent to raise them in the playground. The process was very simple, and we could easily enjoy it. We tried to improve our design.

Use the indefinite article a before a singular countable noun when mentioning it for the first time. Paper plane is being mentioned for the first time, so a paper plane is more appropriate than the paper plane.

× Yes, I used it to fold the paper plane when I was young so I gave it to my clothesparent to raise them in the playground the process was very simple and we can easily enjoy that and we tried to improve our design.

✓ Yes, I used it to fold a paper plane when I was young, so I gave it to my clothesparent to raise it in the playground. The process was very simple, and we could easily enjoy it. We tried to improve our design.

The pronoun it should refer to the singular noun paper plane. Them is a plural pronoun and does not agree with paper plane. Also, it is more natural than that when referring to an activity or experience.

× Yes, I used it to fold the paper plane when I was young so I gave it to my clothesparent to raise them in the playground the process was very simple and we can easily enjoy that and we tried to improve our design.

✓ Yes, I used it to fold a paper plane when I was young, so I gave it to my clothesparent to raise them in the playground. The process was very simple, and we could easily enjoy it. We tried to improve our design.

The answer describes an experience in the past, so can should change to could. Keep the verb tense consistent with used, gave, was, and tried.

× Yes, I used it to fold the paper plane when I was young so I gave it to my clothesparent to raise them in the playground the process was very simple and we can easily enjoy that and we tried to improve our design.

✓ Yes, I used it to fold a paper plane when I was young, so I gave it to my clothesparent to raise them in the playground. The process was very simple, and we could easily enjoy it. We tried to improve our design.

The original contains several independent clauses joined without appropriate punctuation or sentence boundaries. Divide the ideas into separate sentences and use commas before coordinating conjunctions such as so and and.

× We looked forward and decorated them and then fly them in the playground because it is very fun and cheap.

✓ We looked forward to decorating them and then flying them in the playground because it was very fun and cheap.

The expression look forward to is followed by a noun or a gerund, not a bare verb. Therefore, use to decorating and then flying.

× We looked forward and decorated them and then fly them in the playground because it is very fun and cheap.

✓ We looked forward to decorating them and then flying them in the playground because it was very fun and cheap.

After the preposition to in look forward to, use the -ing form. The coordinated verbs should also be parallel: decorating and flying.

× We looked forward and decorated them and then fly them in the playground because it is very fun and cheap.

✓ We looked forward to decorating them and then flying them in the playground because it was very fun and cheap.

The speaker is talking about childhood, which is a past time. Change is to was so that the tense agrees with looked forward and the past context.

× Yes, I still write pistol etc actually I prefer writing on paper rather than typing on my pon and actually it makes me more romantic and easy to express my emotion to others.

✓ Yes, I still write pistol, etc. Actually, I prefer writing on paper rather than typing on my pon because it makes me feel more romantic and makes it easier to express my emotions to others.

The adjective easy cannot directly describe the action in this structure. Use makes it easier to express, and use feel after makes me when describing an emotional state.

× Yes, I still write pistol etc actually I prefer writing on paper rather than typing on my pon and actually it makes me more romantic and easy to express my emotion to others.

✓ Yes, I still write pistol, etc. Actually, I prefer writing on paper rather than typing on my pon because it makes me feel more romantic and makes it easier to express my emotions to others.

The speaker is expressing emotions in general, so the plural noun emotions is more appropriate than the singular emotion in this context.

× No, I think actually many people prefer typing letters on their poem today because many people don't carry pen or paper when they go out or when they study so they think it is

✓ No, I think that many people prefer typing letters on their poem today because many people do not carry a pen or paper when they go out or study, so they think it is more convenient.

Pen is a singular countable noun, so it needs an article. Use a pen when referring to one nonspecific pen. Paper is uncountable and does not need an article here.

× No, I think actually many people prefer typing letters on their poem today because many people don't carry pen or paper when they go out or when they study so they think it is

✓ No, I think that many people prefer typing letters on their poem today because many people do not carry a pen or paper when they go out or study, so they think it is more convenient.

Use that after I think to introduce the opinion clause. A comma before so also makes the relationship between the reason and the result clear.

× No, I think actually many people prefer typing letters on their poem today because many people don't carry pen or paper when they go out or when they study so they think it is

✓ No, I think that many people prefer typing letters on their poem today because many people do not carry a pen or paper when they go out or study, so they think it is more convenient.

The original sentence is incomplete because it ends with it is without a complement. Add an adjective such as convenient to complete the structure it is more convenient.

× I don't carry paper and pants when I go out because when I face the occasion I have to write I usually use the my pun where the note function is and I can usually

✓ I do not carry paper and pants when I go out because, when I face an occasion when I have to write, I usually use my pun, which has a note function, and I can usually take notes easily.

Use the indefinite article an before the singular countable noun occasion because it refers to one nonspecific occasion. Do not use the before the possessive determiner my; use my pun, not the my pun.

× I don't carry paper and pants when I go out because when I face the occasion I have to write I usually use the my pun where the note function is and I can usually

✓ I do not carry paper and pants when I go out because, when I face an occasion when I have to write, I usually use my pun, which has a note function, and I can usually take notes easily.

Use which to introduce a relative clause describing the pun. Where is normally used for places, whereas which is appropriate for referring to an object.

× I don't carry paper and pants when I go out because when I face the occasion I have to write I usually use the my pun where the note function is and I can usually

✓ I do not carry paper and pants when I go out because, when I face an occasion when I have to write, I usually use my pun, which has a note function, and I can usually take notes easily.

The original contains several clauses without clear punctuation and ends with an incomplete phrase, I can usually. Add commas, organize the clauses, and complete the final verb phrase with take notes easily.