Paper— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more fluent and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words, correct tense and agreement, and add one specific example. Use linking words for clarity.

Ejemplo: Yes. I often make origami for friends or my college events because it is simple and relaxing. For example, last month I folded several paper cranes for a charity display, which my friends really liked.

Sugerencia: Use correct past tense and more precise vocabulary. Give one clear supporting detail and use a linking word to connect ideas. Avoid unclear phrases like "I have the new."

Ejemplo: As a child, I often made paper kites and origami. Because I enjoyed being creative, I remember spending afternoons folding kites with my cousins, and the finished kites would fly well in the park.

Sugerencia: Make the answer direct and grammatically correct. Remove hesitations and give a specific reason or example. Use a linking word to add detail.

Ejemplo: Yes, I still write physical letters occasionally. For example, I send handwritten birthday cards to close friends because a personal note feels more meaningful than a text.

Sugerencia: Be clearer and more concise: state your opinion, then give a specific reason and example. Use linking words and avoid repetition.

Ejemplo: Yes, I think many people keep handwritten letters because they are tangible mementos. For instance, people often save letters from loved ones to remember important moments or family stories.

Sugerencia: Provide a clear, concise statement and a specific example. Correct grammar (frequency adverbs, pronouns) and remove fillers. Use linking words to explain exception.

Ejemplo: Yes, I sometimes carry a small notebook and a pen when I go out. For example, if I need to share my address or phone number with someone quickly, I write it down on a note and hand it to them.

× Yes, I love the DIG stuff so I usually make some origami item for my friend or my college.

✓ Yes, I love the DIY stuff so I usually make some origami items for my friends or my classmates.

The word 'DIG' is likely a typo for 'DIY' (do-it-yourself). 'Origami item' should be plural 'origami items' to agree with 'some'. 'Friend or my college' is incorrect: 'college' is a place, not a person; use 'friends or my classmates'. Also use plural forms for consistency and clarity.

× It's so uh, simple and easy to make it and it make me relax uh, when I do it.

✓ It's so simple and easy to make, and it makes me relaxed when I do it.

Subject-verb agreement: 'it make' should be 'it makes' because the subject 'it' requires third-person singular verb. 'Make me relax' is acceptable conversationally but more natural is 'makes me relaxed' or 'helps me relax'; choose one consistently. Also remove unnecessary pronoun 'it' after 'make' and add a comma before the coordinating conjunction.

× When I was a child, I often do the handmade items with the paper at the paper kite or the paper origami.

✓ When I was a child, I often made handmade items from paper, such as paper kites or paper origami.

The time expression 'When I was a child' requires past tense: 'do' should be 'made'. Use 'made handmade items from paper' for correct preposition and natural phrasing. 'At the paper kite' is ungrammatical; use 'such as paper kites' to list examples.

× It's relaxed me and I have the new.

✓ It relaxed me and made me feel renewed.

'It's relaxed me' is incorrect tense and form; use past tense 'It relaxed me'. 'I have the new' is unclear and ungrammatical; likely intended meaning is 'I felt renewed' or 'it felt new'—I used 'made me feel renewed' to convey a refreshed feeling.

× Umm, I usually write a letter for my uh friends or my old college, uh, to ask uh, to greeting them.

✓ I usually write letters to my friends or former classmates to greet them.

Use plural 'letters' for habitual action and 'to my friends or former classmates' is correct noun choice. 'Old college' is incorrect; use 'former classmates' or 'my old college friends'. 'To ask to greeting them' is ungrammatical; use 'to greet them'. Modal verbs not directly involved but sentence needed restructuring.

× And I love making it making it because, umm, uh, it make.

✓ And I love making them because they make me happy.

'Making it making it' is repetitive; change to 'making them' (plural, referring to letters or items). 'It make' should be 'they make' for subject-verb agreement. Add an object or result 'me happy' to complete the sentence.

× Yes, I think so because it's the, the physical letter known as the memory item, memorable memor, memorable items, uh, and it will remind them to remember the, uh, the value.

✓ Yes, I think so because physical letters are memorable keepsakes and they remind people of their value.

Awkward phrasing and repetition: use plural 'physical letters' and 'memorably' isn't needed; 'memorable keepsakes' or 'memories' is clearer. 'It will remind them to remember the value' is redundant; use 'they remind people of their value.' Ensure subject-verb agreement ('letters... are'/ 'they remind').

× Yes, but sometime not usually because the I want to, uh, share.

✓ Yes, but not usually because I don't always want to share.

'Sometime not usually' is incorrect ordering; use 'not usually' or 'sometimes not'. 'the I want' is ungrammatical; clarify meaning as 'I don't always want to share.' Quantifier 'usually' should be placed after auxiliary verbs or before main verb appropriately.

× For example, when I want to share my address or my number to another, I usually write the write down the uh in the note, uh, note paper and give.

✓ For example, when I want to share my address or phone number with someone, I usually write it down on a piece of paper and give it to them.

Use 'share ... with someone' not 'to another'. 'Write the write down the uh in the note' is repetitive and incorrect; use 'write it down on a piece of paper'. Add 'give it to them' to complete the action. 'Phone number' is clearer than 'number'.