Paper— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 回答不够连贯且语法错误较多。要直接回答问题后用一两句具体细节支持，注意时态和句子结构，避免重复词。例如说明何时、制作了什么样的纸工艺和谁教的。

Ejemplo: Yes, I have. I made many paper crafts when I was in primary school. For example, in art class my teacher taught us to fold origami animals and cut out paper flowers, which I enjoyed making during recess.

Sugerencia: 内容有一定相关性但时态和信息不一致（问题问童年，却提到高中），并有重复词和冗长表达。应直接说童年喜欢做的事情，给出具体例子并用连词连接原因和结果。

Ejemplo: As a child I loved drawing on paper, especially cartoons and landscapes. Drawing helped me relax after school, and I often spent weekends sketching scenes from picture books.

Sugerencia: 回答含糊且语法混乱，信息不明确。应先明确是否经常写信，然后用一两句说明原因或频率，避免重复和不必要的词。

Ejemplo: Not often, but occasionally I read and write physical letters. I prefer instant messages for daily contact, but I still write handwritten notes for special occasions because they feel more personal.

Sugerencia: 观点明确但表达不够清晰，有重复与措辞错误。回答时先给出直接立场，再用具体理由支持（如情感价值、纪念意义），并用连词连接句子。

Ejemplo: Yes, many people keep handwritten letters as keepsakes. Handwritten notes often carry emotional value and personal memories, so families save them to remember special moments.

Sugerencia: 回答逻辑混乱且不符合自然表达。要先直接回答是否随身携带，然后给出具体情境和原因，句子要简洁明了并避免无关信息。

Ejemplo: Not always, but I usually carry a small notebook and a pen in my bag. I find them useful for jotting down directions, shopping lists, or phone numbers when my phone is unavailable.

× Yes, I have made lots of crafts with my with paper.

✓ Yes, I have made lots of crafts with paper.

句子结构重复，出现了多余的“with my with paper”。应删除冗余部分使句子简洁通顺。建议检查并删去重复词语。

× When I in my primary school in the 1st art school art class, the teacher told us how to made the PE made the crafts with the paper.

✓ When I was in primary school, during my first art class the teacher showed us how to make crafts with paper.

原句结构混乱并包含多余词语，时态和动词形式错误（made 应为 make），缺少系动词“was”。应把时间状语放在从句开头，使用过去时态的过去习惯性叙述并用不定式表示动作的方式。建议使用“When I was in primary school”并把“how to make crafts with paper”作为从句。

× When I in my high school, I usually draw some wonderful pictures in my paper because that can help me enjoy enjoy the art and relax myself because of high study.

✓ When I was in high school, I usually drew some wonderful pictures on paper because that helped me enjoy art and relax due to intense studying.

时态不一致：叙述过去习惯应使用过去时（draw → drew；can help → helped）。另外介词用法错误（on paper 而不是 in my paper），重复单词（enjoy enjoy），以及措辞不自然（because of high study 应为 due to intense studying）。建议将叙述统一为过去时并修正介词与重复词。

× Yes, I read a physical letter these days, but in my opinion even this days computer under the phone sends the message easily, but also but also that physical letters can improve ourselves.

✓ Yes, I have read physical letters these days, but in my opinion, even though computers and phones send messages easily these days, physical letters can still improve us.

原句中时态、冠词及词序混乱（a physical letter these days → have read physical letters；this days → these days；computer under the phone 无意义应为 computers and phones），重复“but also”。此外“improve ourselves”措辞不准确，应根据语境改为“improve us”或更具体表达。建议合并句子并使用现在完成时描述最近经历。

× Yes, I think people should keep handwritten letters today because that kind And that are the treasures for for them because when they read the hardware by themselves, they can get the memory.

✓ Yes, I think people should keep handwritten letters because they are treasures for them; when they read the letters themselves, they can recall memories.

原句有多处结构和词汇错误：'that kind And that are' 没有意义且重复，'hardware' 用词错误，应为 'letters'，'get the memory' 表达不自然，应为 'recall memories'。需删去多余词语并替换错误词汇，使句意清晰。建议使用简洁句子并用正确词汇。

× Yes, I always carry paper and pens when I forget my iPhone when When I go to the shopping mall because when I'm in shopping mall, the strangers always ask me how to do.

✓ Yes, I always carry paper and pens when I go to the shopping mall because if I forget my iPhone, strangers often ask me for help and I can write notes for them.

原句存在重复（when When）、从句顺序混乱（条件应先于结果）、以及含义不清（'the strangers always ask me how to do' 不完整）。建议先表明情景（go to the shopping mall），然后说明条件（if I forget my iPhone）和结果（strangers ask for help），并用清晰动词（ask me for help / ask me how to do something）。