Paper— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Improve grammar and fluency: use correct verb forms and simpler, clearer sentences. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add a brief reason and an example. Use linking words (for example, because) and avoid repetition.

Ejemplo: I haven't made paper crafts, but I'm interested in origami because it's a traditional Japanese art. For example, I admire how a single sheet of paper can be folded into complex shapes, and I would like to learn it one day because it looks creative and relaxing.

Sugerencia: Reduce hesitation and be concise; state your main idea clearly then support it with one or two specific reasons. Avoid filler words and repeated phrases.

Ejemplo: No, I don't write physical letters anymore. Nowadays people use messaging apps instead, so letters feel outdated. Occasionally people send cards on special occasions like Valentine's Day, but it's rare in my country.

Sugerencia: Clarify and correct grammar, give a clear topic sentence then a specific example. Use linking words (for example, because) to connect ideas and avoid vague phrases.

Ejemplo: Yes, some people still keep handwritten letters because they preserve memories. For example, my grandmother still has the letter my grandfather wrote when he proposed, and she treasures it as a family keepsake.

Sugerencia: Make the response more natural: use correct tenses and reduce wordiness. Start with a clear statement, then provide one or two concrete conditions with linking words like 'however' or 'but'.

Ejemplo: It depends. If I'm just hanging out with friends, I don't carry paper and pens. However, when I go to university I usually bring a notebook and pen because I need to take notes during lectures.

Sugerencia: Be more concise and correct grammar: use past tense for childhood. Provide a clear topic sentence, then one specific example of how drawing helped you, using linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

Ejemplo: As a child I loved drawing, and I still enjoy it as a hobby. Drawing helped me express my emotions and develop my imagination, for example I used to create stories and characters on paper almost every day.

× No, I've never actually do this, but I think origami is first of all is traditional Japan art and it really into Japan culture and I'd love to master it one day because I think it's something.

✓ No, I've never actually done this, but I think origami is, first of all, a traditional Japanese art and it is really part of Japanese culture, and I'd love to master it one day because I think it's something special.

Errors: incorrect verb form ('do' should be past participle 'done' after 'I've never'); extra 'is' and missing article and adjective form ('traditional Japan art' -> 'a traditional Japanese art'); incorrect structure 'it really into Japan culture' needs verb and preposition ('is really part of Japanese culture'); vague ending improved. Suggestion: use correct perfect tense with past participle, use adjectives correctly (Japanese), include articles where needed, and use clear verbs for relationships ('part of').

× It's so cool to be able to do something from the piece of paper.

✓ It's so cool to be able to make something out of a piece of paper.

Errors: unnecessary definite article ('the piece of paper') and awkward preposition 'from' with 'do something'. Suggestion: use 'a piece of paper' and the common collocation 'make something out of'.

× No, we, we, we, I don't do this anymore.

✓ No, I don't do this anymore.

Errors: repetition and pronoun confusion. Suggestion: remove repeated words and use the correct singular first-person subject 'I'.

× And I think none of like my country's residents do this anymore because, uh, it's meaningless nowadays.

✓ And I think most people in my country don't do this anymore because it's mostly unnecessary nowadays.

Errors: 'none of like my country's residents' is ungrammatical and 'meaningless' feels too strong; quantifier and word choice incorrect. Suggestion: use 'most people in my country' or 'few people', and 'don't do' for negative present; choose appropriate adjectives ('unnecessary' or 'less common').

× I mean, probably there are some traditions related to it, for instance, Valentine's Day Day, but it's not that cultivated in my country and society.

✓ I mean, there are probably some traditions related to it, for instance, Valentine's Day, but it's not widely practiced in my country.

Errors: word order ('probably there are' is better), repetition ('Valentine's Day Day'), incorrect adjective 'cultivated' for describing cultural practice. Suggestion: use 'widely practiced' or 'common' to describe social customs and avoid repetition.

× I think yes, as a piece of words or something that's holds past and story.

✓ I think so; a handwritten letter is a piece of writing that holds the past and tells a story.

Errors: 'I think yes' awkward, 'piece of words' incorrect noun, 'that's holds' extra 's' with auxiliary. Suggestion: use 'I think so' and correct noun 'piece of writing' and correct relative clause 'that holds' or 'that tells'.

× For instance, my grandma still had still have the letter that my grandfather gave her during his like proposal.

✓ For instance, my grandma still has the letter that my grandfather gave her during his proposal.

Errors: tense inconsistency and duplication ('still had still have'), incorrect use of 'like' and possessive/time phrase 'his like proposal'. Suggestion: use present tense 'still has' for possession, remove 'like', and use 'during his proposal' or 'when he proposed'.

× I think it's really nice and something that we should preserve.

✓ I think it's really nice and something we should preserve.

Errors: extra 'that' is unnecessary but not strictly wrong; sentence improved by removing redundancy. Suggestion: keep concise phrasing.

× It depends on the establishment where you're going to.

✓ It depends on the place where you're going.

Errors: 'establishment' is formal and 'going to' at end is awkward. Suggestion: use 'place' or 'establishment' with correct word order 'where you're going' without trailing 'to'.

× For instance, if I just hanging out with friends, I'm not doing this, but if I go to the university or any other educational establishments, I It is a commodity to have piece of paper because you need to write down everything that teacher says.

✓ For instance, if I'm just hanging out with friends, I don't do this, but if I go to the university or any other educational establishment, it is useful to have a piece of paper because you need to write down everything the teacher says.

Errors: incorrect verb form 'if I just hanging' should be 'if I'm just hanging' (present continuous), mismatch 'I'm not doing this' better 'I don't do this'; plural 'establishments' should match context 'establishment' or 'institutions'; awkward phrase 'I It is a commodity' duplicated and wrong; missing articles 'a piece of paper' and missing definite article with 'the teacher'. Suggestion: fix verb forms, use singular/plural consistently, include articles, and use 'useful' instead of 'commodity'.

× What did you like to do with paper as a child?

✓ What did you like to do with paper as a child?

No grammatical error detected in this question; tense and structure are appropriate. Suggestion: none.

× I think draw drawing is something that I still preserve as a hobby and I think it is essential for child to actually draw this.

✓ I think drawing is something that I still keep as a hobby, and I think it is essential for a child to actually draw.

Errors: redundant 'draw drawing' — use gerund 'drawing'; 'preserve' is odd for a hobby, use 'keep' or 'maintain'; missing article 'a child'; unnecessary 'this' at the end. Suggestion: use gerund properly, choose appropriate verbs, and include articles.

× This was the way that I express my emotions and it kind of cultivated my imagination.

✓ It was a way I expressed my emotions, and it helped cultivate my imagination.

Errors: tense inconsistency ('was' with 'express' present), awkward 'kind of' and word order. Suggestion: keep past tense consistently ('expressed') and use clearer verbs ('helped cultivate').