Paper— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be clear, grammatical and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence (e.g., what you made), then give one or two specific details using linking words. Correct vocabulary (e.g., "paper crepe" → "paper flowers" or "paper decorations") and verb forms ("It's make" → "It made"). Avoid repetition and long unclear phrases.

Ejemplo: Yes. I made paper decorations, mainly paper flowers, for a friend’s birthday party. They relaxed me while I was crafting, and the guests enjoyed them. I felt proud because the decorations showed how much I cared.

Sugerencia: Answer directly, then give a concise reason and one specific example. Use correct grammar for negatives ("I don’t"), prepositions and gerunds ("comfortable writing physical letters"). Use linking words like "because" or "however" to make the logic clear.

Ejemplo: No, I rarely write physical letters because I work in an electronics shop and mostly communicate by email or messaging. However, when a matter is important or personal, I prefer writing a letter because it helps me think carefully and avoid mistakes.

Sugerencia: Give a clear opinion sentence, then support it with one or two specific reasons or examples. Use linking words ("because", "however", "for example"). Improve phrasing: "I don't think so" and "text messages" or "digital messages" are better. Avoid vague phrases like "very interesting thing."

Ejemplo: I don't think many people keep handwritten letters today because most communication is digital, such as text messages and emails. However, some people still write letters for sentimental reasons; for example, parents may keep their children’s notes as memories.

Sugerencia: Start with a clear topic sentence ("Sometimes I do"). Explain the conditions with linking words ("if", "because"). Use correct vocabulary and grammar: "pencils", "depends on the situation", "it feels heavy", "when I go to university". Limit to 2–3 concise sentences.

Ejemplo: Sometimes I do. It depends on where I’m going: I avoid bringing paper and pens when I travel because they feel heavy, but I always carry a notebook and a pencil when I go to university for taking notes.

Sugerencia: Give a direct past-tense topic sentence ("As a child, I liked to..."). Provide specific examples of activities and use correct verbs ("draw", "make", "cut out"). Use linking words if you add more details. Keep it concise and avoid filler words like "uh".

Ejemplo: As a child, I liked to draw on paper. I often drew animals and made simple collages from leaves and colored paper, which I would stick on a chart for my school projects.

× Yes, I have made a crepes with papers in my tissues birthday party.

✓ Yes, I have made crepes with paper for my sister's birthday party.

The original sentence has incorrect articles and noun forms. 'A crepes' mixes singular article with plural noun; use 'crepes' (plural) or 'a crepe' (singular). 'Papers' should be 'paper' (uncountable when referring to material). 'in my tissues birthday party' is incorrect phrasing and likely meant 'for my sister's birthday party' or another possessive; here 'sister's' fits context. Use correct possessive and preposition 'for'. Suggestions: choose correct singular/plural with articles and use 'paper' for material; use 'for' + occasion and correct possessive noun.

× It's make me feel relaxed and gives me a give them a laugh for myself and it's I think it's represent the love of myself.

✓ It makes me feel relaxed and gives me a laugh; I think it also represents my love.

Multiple problems: verb form and subject-verb agreement ('It's make' should be 'It makes'); redundant and unclear phrases ('gives me a give them a laugh for myself') need simplification; awkward reflexive and possessive phrasing ('the love of myself') should be 'my love'. Suggestions: ensure correct third-person singular verb form, remove redundancy, and use clear possessive adjectives like 'my'.

× No, I don't still write physical letters because I'm working in a electronic shop so I need to do everything with computers.

✓ No, I don't still write physical letters because I work in an electronics shop, so I need to do everything on computers.

Tense and article errors: 'I don't still write' is awkward—use 'I don't still write' could be 'I don't write' or 'I no longer write'. 'I'm working' present continuous is unnecessary for a habitual fact; use simple present 'I work'. 'a electronic shop' needs article and adjective form: 'an electronics shop'. Preposition 'with computers' is better as 'on computers'. Suggestions: use simple present for regular activities, correct article 'an' before vowel sound, and use 'electronics' as adjective/noun.

× But sometimes whenever it's important discussions I feel comfort to writing a physical, so it helps me to correct the mistake and fill me a relax.

✓ But sometimes, when the discussion is important, I feel comfortable writing a physical letter because it helps me correct mistakes and relax.

Errors: 'whenever it's important discussions' should be 'when the discussion is important' (noun/adjective order). 'I feel comfort to writing' is incorrect: use adjective 'comfortable' and gerund without 'to' ('comfortable writing'). 'a physical' is incomplete; 'a physical letter' or 'a handwritten letter'. 'helps me to correct the mistake' -> 'helps me correct mistakes' (remove unnecessary 'to' and pluralize). 'fill me a relax' is ungrammatical; use 'relax' or 'feel relaxed'. Suggestions: use correct adjective 'comfortable', correct gerund usage, and clear noun phrases.

× I don't think it's so because in the modern era people prefer to text in the message like with their though their mobile phone or computers and sometimes people prefer to handwrite letters to represent their loves with others.

✓ I don't think so because in the modern era people prefer to text on their mobile phones or computers, although sometimes people prefer to handwrite letters to express their love for others.

Multiple issues: 'I don't think it's so' should be 'I don't think so'. 'prefer to text in the message like with their though their mobile phone' is convoluted—use 'prefer to text on their mobile phones or computers'. 'represent their loves with others' is awkward; use 'express their love for others'. Suggestions: simplify sentence structure, use correct prepositions ('on' for devices), and use 'express' for feelings.

× And it's very interesting thing I think.

✓ And I think it's very interesting.

Word order and article misuse: 'very interesting thing' is wordy; native order is 'very interesting'. Move 'I think' for natural flow. Suggestions: use natural adjective-noun ordering and place opinion phrase appropriately.

× Sometimes I carry papers and pencil with me whenever I go out.

✓ Sometimes I carry paper and a pencil with me when I go out.

Plural/uncountable and article errors: 'papers' could be 'paper' (uncountable) or 'papers' if referring to documents; context implies paper material so use 'paper'. 'pencil' needs article 'a pencil'. 'whenever' is acceptable but 'when' is more natural. Suggestions: use correct articles and singular/uncountable forms.

× Uh, it's depend on the situation that where I'm actually go.

✓ It depends on the situation and where I'm actually going.

Verb agreement and verb form: 'it's depend' should be 'it depends' (third-person singular). 'where I'm actually go' incorrect verb form; use present participle 'going'. Suggestions: ensure subject-verb agreement and use '-ing' after auxiliary 'am' for present continuous.

× Like if I go travelling with my friends or family members, I don't like to carry it because it fill me first date and heavy.

✓ For example, if I go travelling with my friends or family, I don't like to carry it because it makes me feel awkward and heavy.

Problems: 'fill me first date' is nonsensical; likely intended 'makes me feel out of place' or 'awkward'. 'fill' should be 'makes' and need an adjective 'awkward'. 'family members' can be shortened to 'family'. Suggestions: choose correct verbs ('make') with object plus adjective, and use natural collocations like 'feel awkward'.

× But if I'm going to college or university at the moment I prefer to carry it.

✓ But if I'm going to college or university, I prefer to carry it at the moment.

Word order and tense: 'at the moment' placement was awkward. If referring to a current habit, use 'I prefer to carry it at the moment' or remove 'at the moment' if describing general preference. Ensure consistency of present continuous 'I'm going' with context. Suggestions: place time expressions where they fit logically.

× When I was a child, at the moment I tried to Draw Something with paper like I art animals or make, uh, some natural art at the chart.

✓ When I was a child, I used to draw things with paper, like making animal art or creating nature-themed art on charts.

Multiple tense and form issues: 'at the moment' is wrong for past habitual actions—use 'used to'. 'tried to Draw Something with paper' capitalization and infinitive misuse; say 'used to draw things with paper'. 'I art animals' incorrect—use 'making animal art'. 'some natural art at the chart' should be 'nature-themed art on charts'. Suggestions: use 'used to' for past habits, correct verb forms, and clearer noun phrases.