Paper— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and correct minor grammar and repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundant phrases like "I could still recall" or repeating "origami/origamis."

Ejemplo: Yes, I have. As a child I often made origami, especially cranes. In Chinese culture folding a thousand cranes is believed to bring good luck and grant a wish, so I spent many afternoons practicing different folds to make them neatly.

Sugerencia: Improve sentence clarity and tense consistency. Begin with a direct statement, then give one specific example and explain why it matters using a linking word like "because" or "so." Avoid vague phrases like "put everything in paper."

Ejemplo: Yes, I still enjoy writing physical letters, especially for close friends and family. For example, when my best friend visited Dubai with her husband, I wrote her a letter describing our time together because I wanted to give them a personal keepsake.

Sugerencia: Remove repetition and correct grammar. Give a clearer topic sentence and a concise reason with a linking word. Use singular/plural consistently and avoid filler words.

Ejemplo: I can't speak for everyone, but I always keep handwritten letters because they remind me of the feelings and memories associated with the moment I received them.

Sugerencia: Make the response more concise and avoid repeating ideas. State your main point first, then contrast with a reason using a linking word like "because" or "however."

Ejemplo: I usually only carry a pen, not paper, because I can quickly jot things down on my phone. However, I keep a pen in my purse for situations when paper is necessary.

Sugerencia: Be direct and correct tense usage. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific detail or short example. Avoid repeating "when I was a child/kid."

Ejemplo: As a child I loved making paper planes and testing how far they could fly. My friends and I would fold colorful paper and compete to see whose plane stayed in the air the longest.

× Yes, I have made some crafts with paper.

✓ Yes, I made some paper crafts.

The question asks about past experiences generally; using simple past ('I made') is more natural here than present perfect. Also 'crafts with paper' is awkward; 'paper crafts' is the correct noun phrase order. Suggest using 'I made' for past experiences and place adjective before noun: 'paper crafts'.

× When I was a kid I could still recall I used to make this origami.

✓ When I was a kid I can still recall making origami.

Mixing 'could still recall' and 'used to' with past reference is awkward. Use 'I can still recall' (present ability to remember) and the gerund 'making' after 'recall'. Also 'this origami' is unnatural; use 'origami' without 'this' or 'an origami crane' if specific.

× It's very known in the Chinese culture that if you create origamis of cranes, it will give you good luck and you can make a wish.

✓ It's well known in Chinese culture that if you fold origami cranes, they bring good luck and you can make a wish.

Use 'well known' not 'very known'. Omit 'the' before 'Chinese culture'. 'Create origamis of cranes' is incorrect: 'fold origami cranes' or 'make origami cranes' is idiomatic. Use plural agreement 'they bring' for cranes. 'It will give you good luck' is acceptable but 'bring good luck' is more natural.

× Yes, I very much still like writing physical letters, especially for my friends and family.

✓ Yes, I still very much like writing physical letters, especially for my friends and family.

Adverb placement: 'still' and 'very much' should be ordered 'still very much' before the verb phrase for natural emphasis. The present tense 'like writing' is correct for habitual preference.

× Last time I wrote a letter to my best friend when she and her husband visited me here in Dubai for the first time.

✓ The last time I wrote a letter was when my best friend and her husband visited me here in Dubai for the first time.

Sentence structure needs a clear time clause. Use 'The last time I wrote a letter was when...' or 'I last wrote a letter when...' to connect past events. Also place subjects 'my best friend and her husband' together for clarity.

× I really appreciate them and I have put everything in paper for them to remember.

✓ I really appreciate them and I put everything on paper so they would remember.

'Appreciate them' is acceptable but ambiguous; keep as is. 'Have put' suggests present relevance—simple past 'put' matches the completed action. Use 'on paper' not 'in paper'. Use 'so they would remember' (reported result) or 'so they can remember' depending on intended meaning.

× I'm not really sure about other people if they keep handwritten letters, but for me, I personally personally want to keep it whenever I receive 1 because it makes me remember the time that the the letter made me feel whenever I received them.

✓ I'm not sure whether other people keep handwritten letters, but I personally like to keep them whenever I receive one because they remind me of how I felt when I received them.

Multiple issues: 'about other people if' should be 'whether other people'. Remove duplicate 'personally'. Use plural 'them' to refer to 'letters' and singular 'one' for a single letter. Avoid 'it' when referring to letters. 'Makes me remember the time that the letter made me feel' is ungrammatical; 'remind me of how I felt when I received them' is clear and grammatical. Remove duplicate 'the'.

× Nowadays I don't usually bring paper with me but pen for sure because whenever I need it I can just take it from my purse.

✓ Nowadays I don't usually bring paper with me, but I always bring a pen because when I need one I can just take it from my purse.

Contrast requires 'but I always bring a pen' not 'but pen for sure'. Include article 'a pen'. Match 'it' to 'one' or 'a pen'. Use 'when I need one' for clarity.

× But I could say that not much because I can have it handy on my phone if I want to take note of something.

✓ But I wouldn't say so much, because I can have notes handy on my phone if I want to take note of something.

'I could say that not much' is ungrammatical; 'I wouldn't say so much' or 'not really' is natural. 'Have it handy on my phone' is vague; 'have notes handy on my phone' clarifies. 'Take note of something' is fine.

× I think when I was a child, I love making paper planes.

✓ I think when I was a child, I loved making paper planes.

Time clause 'when I was a child' requires past tense 'loved' rather than present 'love' to maintain tense consistency.

× We used to play it a lot when I was a kid and it's really fun to see them flying around and we can make them with different colors.

✓ We used to play with them a lot when I was a kid; it was really fun to see them flying around, and we could make them in different colors.

'Play it' is incorrect; use 'play with them' (planes). Maintain past tense 'it was' and 'we could' for past habitual ability. 'Make them with different colors' should be 'make them in different colors'. Split into clearer clauses using a semicolon or conjunction.