Paper— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Improve grammar, tense consistency and clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence in present or past tense, use correct articles and plural forms, and limit to 2–4 concise sentences. Add one specific detail about a craft and linkers like “for example” to make it coherent.

Ejemplo: Yes. When I was a child I often made paper crafts, especially toy airplanes and cars from old magazines and used test papers. For example, I would fold a page into a simple plane and decorate it with pens, which kept me amused for hours.

Sugerencia: Use a clear direct topic sentence (short negative), correct tense and phrasing, and avoid fillers. Explain one clear reason with a linking word (because/so) and give a brief example of digital alternatives.

Ejemplo: No, I don’t. Nowadays I prefer digital communication because email and messaging apps are faster and free, so I rarely write on paper. For example, I usually send emails or use WhatsApp to stay in touch with friends.

Sugerencia: Make the response more natural and concise. Start with a clear opinion sentence, then give two specific reasons with linking words (first, second). Correct word choice (handwritten letters, sentimental, historic -> nostalgic) and avoid repetition.

Ejemplo: Yes, some people still keep handwritten letters. First, handwritten notes can feel more sentimental and personal, and second, they are seen as a romantic or nostalgic way to preserve memories.

Sugerencia: Clarify vocabulary (notes, notebooks) and structure. Give a clear topic sentence, then two concise reasons using linking words (for example, also). Avoid vague phrases like “mammals” and correct grammar.

Ejemplo: Yes, I usually carry a small notebook and a pen. For example, I take notes during seminars and jot down ideas, and I also like having paper in case of an emergency when my phone is unavailable.

Sugerencia: Provide a clear topic sentence and one or two specific examples. Use past tense consistently and reduce fillers. Link your reason to the example (for instance/because) to make it coherent.

Ejemplo: When I was a child I loved drawing on paper. For instance, I would copy scenes from movies I watched and sketch characters to express my feelings, because drawing helped me show what I was thinking quickly.

× Yes, in the childhood I really like to make craft with papers, especially with some ad papers or the test paper that is without any usage, and then I will make the airplanes or make cars to play.

✓ Yes, in my childhood I really liked to make crafts with paper, especially from old advertisements or unused test papers, and then I would make airplanes or cars to play with.

Errors: incorrect tense and articles, singular/plural, word choice, prepositions and pronouns. Use 'my childhood' (correct article/pronoun), past tense 'liked' for past habit, plural 'crafts' and uncountable 'paper', 'ad papers' -> 'old advertisements' or 'ad papers', 'test paper that is without any usage' -> 'unused test papers', 'will' inappropriate for past habitual action -> 'would', and end with 'play with'. Suggestion: use consistent past tense for childhood activities and correct noun forms and prepositions.

× No, actually right now when I left never write the visible paper since I was born right now the in the digital, uh, generations, there's too convenient to write an e-mail without paying anything.

✓ No, I do not write on paper now; since I was born into the digital generation, it is very convenient to write an e-mail for free.

Errors: tense and time expressions, word order, incorrect verbs and articles. 'right now when I left never write' is ungrammatical. Use present simple 'do not write' for current habit; 'since I was born into the digital generation' expresses timeframe; 'there's too convenient' -> 'it is very convenient'; 'without paying anything' -> 'for free'. Suggestion: simplify sentence, use correct present tense for current habits and standard collocations.

× So I think that is more reliable and fast.

✓ So I think that is more reliable and faster.

Errors: comparative form. 'fast' is an adverb; when comparing adjectives use comparative adjective 'faster'. 'More reliable' is correct. Suggestion: use parallel comparative forms (more reliable and faster).

× Yes, I know some people like the handwriting letters first because the handwriting letters can express some emotions through the writing process and seconds is also a more romantic and historic way to keep in touch with friends.

✓ Yes, I know some people like handwritten letters: firstly because they can express emotions through the writing, and secondly because they are a more romantic and historic way to keep in touch with friends.

Errors: word form and sequence words. 'handwriting letters' should be 'handwritten letters'; use ordinal markers 'firstly', 'secondly'; 'seconds is also' incorrect subject-verb agreement and pronoun use; 'the writing process' simplified to 'the writing'. Suggestion: use correct adjective form 'handwritten' and proper linking words 'firstly/secondly' with matching clauses.

× So it's I think it's interesting.

✓ So I think it's interesting.

Errors: redundant words and word order. Duplicate 'it's' and awkward ordering. Suggestion: remove redundancy for clarity.

× Yes, first because right now I still prefer to write the mammals or write the recording about the seminars or the stuff I have met or the ideas with the physicals books or the paper.

✓ Yes. Firstly, right now I still prefer to write memos or notes about seminars, things I have seen, or ideas in physical notebooks or on paper.

Errors: word choice and pluralization. 'mammals' incorrect for 'memos'; 'write the recording' -> 'write notes'; 'the stuff I have met' -> 'things I have seen/encountered'; 'physicals books' -> 'physical notebooks'. Also improve article use and parallel structure. Suggestion: use correct vocabulary ('memo', 'note', 'notebook') and maintain parallel list structure.

× And 2nd is sometimes you maybe get some accident so it's better to do.

✓ Secondly, sometimes you may have an accident, so it is better to write things down or carry paper and a pen.

Errors: modal and verb choice, noun use and ambiguity. 'you maybe get some accident' should be 'you may have an accident'; 'so it's better to do' is vague. Suggestion: use modal 'may' + verb 'have', and clarify the recommendation (write things down or carry paper and a pen).

× Oh, for when I was child, I really like to draw some interesting stuff.

✓ Oh, when I was a child, I really liked to draw interesting things.

Errors: article and tense and word choice. Use 'a child', past habit 'liked' not 'like', 'stuff' -> 'things' for formality. Suggestion: use correct article and past tense for childhood activities.

× The stuff I, I see, the movie I watch, uh, those can be the contents of my drawing and I think it's a really great way to express my emotions and what I'm thinking right away.

✓ The things I see or the movies I watch often become the content of my drawings, and I think drawing is a great way to express my emotions and thoughts immediately.

Errors: repetition, plural/singular agreement, tense and word choice. 'The stuff I, I see' has repetition and wrong form; 'the movie I watch' -> 'movies I watch'; 'those can be the contents' -> 'become the content of my drawings'; 'what I'm thinking right away' -> 'my thoughts immediately'. Suggestion: remove redundancy, use plural/singular consistently, and prefer concise phrasing.