Music— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and grammatical: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid vague endings like “Then I feel so.” Also correct verb forms and article use.

Ejemplo: I like both happy and sad music. For example, I usually play upbeat songs when I want to relax and lift my mood, but when I feel upset I listen to sad music because it helps me process my emotions.

Sugerencia: Give a clear, fluent response with correct tense and fewer fillers. Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, and, so, because) and one concrete example of what you do when excited.

Ejemplo: Yes, it does. When I listen to happy music I get excited and often start dancing, and sometimes my friends join me, so we have fun together.

Sugerencia: Respond politely and accurately with correct grammar (use present perfect: 'have not taken'). Avoid overgeneralizations about religion; be specific about your personal situation. Use one or two reasons and a linking word.

Ejemplo: No, I haven't taken any music classes because my family is quite conservative and they don't allow it. However, I still enjoy listening to music at home.

Sugerencia: Give a clear topic sentence then list activities with correct verbs and linking words. Avoid unclear phrases like 'swipe my room' — use 'tidy' or 'clean'. Provide a short specific example.

Ejemplo: Yes, I often listen to music while I study and when I tidy my room. For example, I put on background music while I do assignments because it helps me concentrate.

× Most of the time I hear happy music it feels more relaxed and whenever I get upset then I listen to sad music.

✓ Most of the time when I hear happy music it makes me feel more relaxed, and whenever I get upset I listen to sad music.

Run-on and incorrect clause linkage: missing conjunction/connector 'when' after 'Most of the time' and awkward phrasing 'it feels more relaxed' should be 'it makes me feel more relaxed' to express experience. Remove unnecessary 'then'. Suggestion: use clear clause connectors and active verbs to show cause and effect.

× Uh, when whenever I listen happy music, I feel so I feel, I get so excited.

✓ When I listen to happy music, I get very excited.

Missing preposition 'to' after 'listen' (listen to). Redundant words 'so I feel, I feel'. Use concise adverb 'very' instead of vague 'so' to improve clarity. Also remove duplicated 'when/whenever'.

× I used to dance dancing.

✓ I used to dance.

Incorrect combination of 'used to' with present participle 'dancing'. 'Used to' requires the base form 'dance' to indicate a past habit. Remove the '-ing' form.

× Moreover, my friends also join with me.

✓ Moreover, my friends also join me.

Verb 'join' in this context takes a direct object without 'with' when meaning 'participate with me'. Alternatively, use 'join me in dancing' or 'join me' for correct structure.

× No, I have not take any music classes as a Muslim.

✓ No, I have not taken any music classes because I am a Muslim.

Present perfect requires past participle 'taken' not base 'take'. Also the causal phrase 'as a Muslim' is better expressed as 'because I am a Muslim' for clarity.

× It's totally uh prohibited and my family quite conservative.

✓ It's totally prohibited and my family is quite conservative.

Missing verb 'is' before 'quite conservative' to link subject and adjective. Maintain 'totally prohibited' as adjective phrase about the activity.

× They don't allow me to take any music classes but I love to listening music.

✓ They don't allow me to take any music classes, but I love listening to music.

Incorrect verb form 'to listening' should be 'listening to' (gerund with preposition). Also add comma before 'but' to join clauses. No definite article needed.

× Yes I do whenever I swipe my room.

✓ Yes I do; whenever I tidy my room,

The original 'swipe my room' is incorrect collocation — use 'tidy' or 'clean'. Also sentence fragment; restructure to lead into following actions. Use punctuation to connect clauses.

× I go doing my assignment and. Tidy up my room.

✓ I do my assignments and tidy up my room.

Fragmented and incorrect verb form 'go doing'. Use simple present tense 'do my assignments' for habitual action and parallel structure 'do ... and tidy ...'. Combine into one sentence for completeness.