Music— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give one specific supporting detail with linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect phrases (e.g., “good musics”, “when I my mood”).

Ejemplo: It depends on my mood: when I’m feeling positive I usually listen to upbeat songs because they help me relax and lift my spirits. However, when I’m sad I prefer slower, melancholic music because it helps me process my feelings.

Sugerencia: Give a direct answer first, then explain briefly with a clear reason and one specific example. Remove fillers like “uh” and avoid incomplete phrases (“boost your and it can boost”).

Ejemplo: Yes, happy music does make me feel more excited because its fast tempo and cheerful lyrics increase my energy. For example, listening to an upbeat pop song at the gym always motivates me to work harder.

Sugerencia: Answer the question directly (Yes or No), then give a clear past detail. Use correct tense and vocabulary (e.g., “music course”, “guitar”, “hobby changed”). Avoid repetition and fragmented sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, I took music lessons when I was a child. I learned basic guitar and attended a weekly music course for two years, but I stopped when my interests changed to sports.

Sugerencia: Provide a clear topic sentence then specific examples. Use correct collocations (e.g., “doing low‑responsibility tasks”, “listen to music”), and link ideas with words like “for example” or “however.”

Ejemplo: Sometimes. For example, I often listen to music when doing household chores or repetitive tasks because it gives me energy and helps me concentrate. However, I avoid music when I have important work that requires full attention.

× Well it depends on my mood.

✓ Well, it depends on my mood.

Minor punctuation missing does not change tense but clarity; add comma after 'Well' for natural speech punctuation. ID:6

× When I my mood is positive I usually listen good musics and it helps me unwind my mind and boost my mood.

✓ When my mood is positive, I usually listen to good music and it helps me unwind and boost my mood.

Errors: extra word 'I', missing preposition 'to' before 'listen', 'musics' is uncountable and should be 'music', redundant 'my mind' can be shortened. Suggestions: remove duplicate words, add 'to', use uncountable noun 'music', use commas to separate clauses. ID:26

× Or when I am in a bad mood I prefer to listen.

✓ When I am in a bad mood, I prefer to listen to music.

Missing object after 'listen' (verb needs 'to' + object), and comma needed after introductory clause. Include 'music' to complete meaning. ID:26

× From my perspective, happy music, uh, can change your mood positively and boost your and it can boost your energy.

✓ From my perspective, happy music can change your mood positively and boost your energy.

Fragmented repetition 'and boost your and it can' creates sentence structure error. Remove filler words and redundant phrases to make a clear sentence. ID:26

× I think is the reason is when I feel upset and I and my favorite music can change my mood.

✓ I think the reason is that when I feel upset, my favorite music can change my mood.

Incorrect word order and extraneous words: missing 'the' before 'reason', need 'that' to introduce clause, remove duplicate 'and I'. Add comma after introductory clause. Suggestions: simplify and use 'the reason is that...'. ID:26

× When I was a kid, I used to go to the music course and I tried to play a guitar and then my ho hobby changed and I think I I don't take, I didn't take.

✓ When I was a kid, I used to attend music classes and I tried to play the guitar, but then my hobby changed and I didn't continue.

Problems: 'music course' better as 'music classes', 'play a guitar' should be 'play the guitar' or 'play guitar', 'ho hobby' is typo, double 'I', incorrect present tense 'I don't take' should be past 'I didn't continue'. Use consistent past tense for past habits and actions. ID:5

× Well, it depends on what I'm doing.

✓ Well, it depends on what I'm doing.

Sentence is correct; present continuous correctly used for current actions. No change needed. ID:6

× For instance, when I am doing a work without resection or responsibility, I prefer to listen music when I am performing so it gives me energy and I can finish my work.

✓ For instance, when I am doing work without pressure or responsibility, I prefer to listen to music while I am working because it gives me energy and helps me finish my tasks.

Errors: 'a work' should be 'work' (uncountable) or 'a task'; 'resection' is wrong word — likely 'pressure'; missing 'to' after 'listen'; awkward 'when I am performing' changed to 'while I am working'; use 'helps me finish my tasks' for clarity. Maintain present continuous for ongoing actions. ID:22