Tidiness— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with a linking word. Avoid redundancy and grammatical errors (e.g., "my all the things", "in our proper").

Ejemplo: Yes, I like to keep things tidy. For example, I organise my clothes and workspace every weekend because a neat environment helps me feel calm and makes a better impression on others.

Sugerencia: Answer directly then explain briefly with clear linking words. Correct past-tense phrases and avoid hesitations. Use one or two supporting details that are specific.

Ejemplo: No, I didn't. When I was a child my mother cleaned and organised my room for me, so I wasn't responsible for it. Now I tidy my room myself, usually once a week.

Sugerencia: Be specific and use coherent linking words. Correct phrasing (e.g., 'organise my books and notebooks') and avoid unnecessary repetition. Mention frequency or routine to add detail.

Ejemplo: I keep my study space tidy by organising my books and notebooks on shelves and using labelled folders. Also, I wipe the desk and sweep the floor every few days to keep the area clean and germ-free.

Sugerencia: Give a clear opinion sentence then support it with two coherent reasons using linking words. Avoid filler words and repetition; use precise vocabulary (e.g., 'hygienic', 'impression').

Ejemplo: Yes, I think it is necessary to be tidy because a clean environment reduces the risk of illness and helps you feel more focused. In addition, being tidy creates a positive impression on others, which can be helpful at work or school.

× Yes, I would like to keep my all the things in our proper and tidy way because a proper tidiness will determine the personality of the person and it will put a good impression on others about you.

✓ Yes, I would like to keep all my things in a proper and tidy way because proper tidiness reflects a person's personality and makes a good impression on others.

The original sentence has article and word order errors: 'my all the things' should be 'all my things' (correct placement of determiner and possessive). 'our proper and tidy way' is wrong contextually; 'a proper and tidy way' uses the indefinite article correctly. 'a proper tidiness' is unnatural; use 'proper tidiness' or 'tidiness' without 'a'. 'determine the personality of the person' is awkward; use 'reflects a person's personality'. 'put a good impression on others about you' should be 'makes a good impression on others'. Suggestions: place adjectives and determiners in correct order, avoid unnecessary articles, and use natural verbs collocations like 'reflect' and 'make an impression'.

× To be honest, no, because when I was child, my room was managed by my mother.

✓ To be honest, no, because when I was a child, my room was managed by my mother.

Missing article before 'child' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'a child'. This is an article error (ID 22) but also relates to past-tense context; primary correction is adding 'a'. Suggestion: use 'when I was a child' for past-time references to childhood.

× So she used to do everything for me like cleaning the floors or organize the books.

✓ So she used to do everything for me, like cleaning the floors and organizing the books.

Parallel structure and verb form errors: 'cleaning the floors or organize the books' mixes -ing and base form. Use parallel '-ing' forms: 'cleaning' and 'organizing'. Also 'like' should be followed by examples separated with commas. Suggestion: keep verb forms parallel when listing activities.

× So but right now I use, I used I, I do all things with my by myself.

✓ But right now I do everything by myself.

This sentence has disfluencies and wrong word order: extraneous words 'So', 'use', repeated 'I used I'. 'all things' is better as 'everything'. 'with my by myself' is incorrect; correct phrase is 'by myself'. Suggestion: remove fillers and simplify to 'But right now I do everything by myself.'

× I keep my org or study space tidy by managing the all books or copies in organized and structured way and and by cleaning the floor and tables with the water or some chemicals to kill the germs.

✓ I keep my work or study space tidy by organizing all the books and notebooks in an orderly way and by cleaning the floors and tables with water or some disinfectant.

Several issues: 'org' is unclear—use 'work' or 'organization'; 'the all books' incorrect order—use 'all the books'. 'copies' likely means 'notebooks' or 'copies' depending on meaning. 'in organized and structured way' should be 'in an orderly way' or 'in an organized, structured way' with an article. 'and and' duplicate. 'the water' should be 'water'. 'some chemicals to kill the germs' is better as 'some disinfectant' for natural phrasing. Suggestions: use clear nouns, correct determiner order, include articles where needed, and choose appropriate vocabulary for cleaning products.

× Absolutely yes, because being uh tidy will make you a physically healthy person and a good uh health will make the people physically fit and a healthy and clean clean portion will make attract to others people also.

✓ Absolutely. Being tidy helps you stay physically healthy, and good health makes people physically fit; a clean and healthy appearance also attracts others.

Awkward modal and noun usage and repetition: 'being uh tidy will make you a physically healthy person' is wordy—use 'being tidy helps you stay physically healthy'. 'a good uh health' incorrect article and order—use 'good health'. 'a healthy and clean clean portion' is unclear and repeats 'clean'; intended meaning likely 'clean and healthy appearance' or 'space'. 'will make attract to others people also' is ungrammatical; use 'also attracts others'. Suggestions: remove fillers, use correct noun phrases ('good health', 'appearance'), and correct verb forms ('attracts').