Tidiness— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and natural: give a clear topic sentence, one supporting reason, and avoid filler words and unclear words (e.g., “kids”). Use correct comparative forms and remove hesitation.

Ejemplo: Yes, I do. Being tidy makes me feel calmer and more productive, so I always organize my belongings at the end of the day.

Sugerencia: Clarify vocabulary and sentence structure. Start with a clear past-tense topic sentence, use correct verbs (e.g., “keep” not “cut”), avoid repetitive fragments, and give one specific supporting detail or example.

Ejemplo: Yes, I usually kept my room tidy when I was a child. For example, I always made my bed every morning and put my toys on a shelf, which my parents often praised.

Sugerencia: Improve fluency and grammar: use simple correct structures and linking words. Say one clear routine and a specific example, remove repetitions, and use correct prepositions (e.g., “on my desk”, “put them in their places”).

Ejemplo: I tidy my study space immediately after using it, so clutter never builds up. For example, when I finish studying I put books back on the shelf and put pens in a cup.

Sugerencia: Make the answer more concise and natural. Start with a direct opinion, give one reason and a short result. Avoid repeating words like “organized” and awkward phrases such as “character personality.”

Ejemplo: Yes, I do. Being tidy shows that someone is responsible and efficient, which makes it easier to find things and manage time.

× 'Keeping things tidy would make me feel much more happier and umm.'

✓ 'Keeping things tidy makes me feel much happier.'

'Much more happier' is redundant and ungrammatical because 'happier' is already comparative; use either 'much happier' or 'happier'. Also change 'would make me feel' to 'makes me feel' to match present habitual preference and sound natural.'

× 'Yes, I generally cut my room tightly when I was a when I was a child.'

✓ 'Yes, I generally kept my room tidy when I was a child.'

'Cut my room tightly' is incorrect word choice and 'generally' with past habit uses simple past 'kept'. Replace 'cut' with 'kept' and 'tightly' with 'tidy'. Remove the repeated phrase 'when I was a'.'

× 'I I think I'm a person who focuses on tiredness since my childhood and because of this I often was praised about my past.'

✓ 'I think I am a person who has focused on tidiness since my childhood, and because of this I was often praised.'

'Since my childhood' requires present perfect or present perfect continuous to show an action from past to present: 'has focused'. 'Tiredness' is wrong word; context needs 'tidiness'. 'Often was praised about my past' is awkward: use 'was often praised' or 'have often been praised'. Here 'was often praised' fits the narrative of past recognition.'

× 'I often keep my work all the space tidy if I clean clean them after as soon as I use them.'

✓ 'I often keep my whole workspace tidy by cleaning it as soon as I finish using it.'

'All the space' is unnatural; use 'whole workspace'. 'Clean clean them' is repetition and wrong pronoun agreement. Use gerund or -ing after preposition 'by cleaning'. Also match singular 'workspace' with 'it' and use 'finish using' to express completion.'

× 'For example, when I finish my work in my desk, I immediately push the things on the desk away and put them in their places.'

✓ 'For example, when I finish my work at my desk, I immediately clear the items off the desk and put them in their places.'

'In my desk' should be 'at my desk' to indicate location. 'Push the things on the desk away' is wordy; 'clear the items off the desk' is more natural.'

× 'I think it is not only necessary to keep everything tidy, but also being organized or keeping place organized is also a valuable character personality of one person because it shows that this person is an organized.'

✓ 'I think it is not only necessary to keep everything tidy, but being organized is also a valuable personal quality because it shows that a person is organized.'

'Keeping place organized' is awkward; use 'being organized'. 'Character personality' is redundant; use 'personal quality'. 'This person is an organized' incorrectly uses adjective with article; use 'organized' without 'an'. Remove duplicate 'also' for conciseness.'