Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 질문에 바로 답한 점은 좋지만, 시제와 문장 구조가 불안정하고 같은 표현이 반복됩니다. 과거의 경험을 묻는 질문이므로 “I liked”를 사용하고, “I like a lot” 대신 “I really enjoyed it”이라고 말하세요. 또한 “when I walk around the path”는 “while walking along the paths”로, “exercise quite working”은 “get some exercise”로 자연스럽게 수정할 수 있습니다. 이유와 효과를 연결어로 정리하면 더 명확합니다.

Ejemplo: Yes, I really enjoyed going to parks as a child. I often walked along the paths with my puppy, which helped me relax and get some exercise. It was a great way to refresh my mind after spending time indoors.

Sugerencia: 직접적인 답변과 이유를 제시한 점은 좋습니다. 하지만 “more closer”는 비교급을 중복해서 사용한 것이므로 “closer”로 고치고, “the park became more closer to my house”는 “there is a park closer to my new home”처럼 표현하는 것이 자연스럽습니다. “So happy”는 주어와 동사가 필요하므로 “I’m happy that I can visit it more often”이라고 말하세요. “In addition”보다 이 문맥에서는 “Also”가 더 자연스럽습니다.

Ejemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. I recently moved, and there is now a park much closer to my home. As a result, I’m happy that I can visit it more often, especially in the evening.

Sugerencia: 의견을 제시하려고 했지만, 같은 문장을 반복하고 “it is very dark”는 앞뒤 맥락과 맞지 않아 의미가 불분명합니다. “There are enough parks”라고 말한 뒤, 공원의 수나 접근성과 같은 구체적인 이유를 한 가지 제시하세요. “two or three big parks”는 도시 전체의 공원 수를 의미한다면 부자연스러울 수 있으므로 “several large parks”라고 표현하는 것이 좋습니다. 마지막의 “Thank for that”은 이 질문에 필요하지 않습니다.

Ejemplo: I think there are enough parks in my city for most people. There are several large parks as well as smaller neighborhood parks, so residents can usually find one nearby. Instead of building more parks, I think the city should maintain the existing ones better.

Sugerencia: 미래에 가고 싶은 공원의 조건을 언급한 점은 좋지만, 문장 연결과 어휘 선택을 개선해야 합니다. “more recent facilities”는 “modern facilities” 또는 “better facilities”가 적절하고, “skateboard”는 시설을 뜻할 때 “a skateboarding area”라고 해야 합니다. “if the park has..., open the swimming pool” 부분은 “I’d like to visit a park with...”로 구조를 단순화하세요. 미래의 희망을 표현할 때는 “I’d like to”와 “I hope to”를 사용하면 자연스럽습니다.

Ejemplo: Yes, I’d like to visit a park with modern facilities in the future. For example, I’d enjoy going to one with a skateboarding area and an outdoor swimming pool. I hope to spend a relaxing weekend there with my friends.

× Yes, I like a lot I like walking around the park with my puppy when I walk around the path, it refreshes my mind and I can also exercise quite working.

✓ Yes, I liked it a lot. I liked walking around the park with my puppy. When I walked around the path, it refreshed my mind, and I could also exercise quite well.

The question asks about your childhood, so the answer should mainly use the past tense: liked, walked, refreshed, and could. The phrase quite working is incorrect because working is not the appropriate form here; the adverb well should modify exercise.

× Yes, I like a lot I like walking around the park with my puppy when I walk around the path, it refreshes my mind and I can also exercise quite working.

✓ Yes, I liked it a lot. I liked walking around the park with my puppy. When I walked around the path, it refreshed my mind, and I could also exercise quite well.

The verb like needs an object in the expression like it a lot. The pronoun it refers to going to parks or walking in the park.

× Yes, I like a lot I like walking around the park with my puppy when I walk around the path, it refreshes my mind and I can also exercise quite working.

✓ Yes, I liked it a lot. I liked walking around the park with my puppy. When I walked around the path, it refreshed my mind, and I could also exercise quite well.

Well is an adverb that correctly describes how you exercise. Working cannot be used after exercise in this sentence.

× Yes, I like a lot I like walking around the park with my puppy when I walk around the path, it refreshes my mind and I can also exercise quite working.

✓ Yes, I liked it a lot. I liked walking around the park with my puppy. When I walked around the path, it refreshed my mind, and I could also exercise quite well.

The original answer joins several complete ideas without proper punctuation or clear sentence boundaries. Separating the ideas into three sentences makes the response easier to understand.

× In addition I moved recently and the park became more closer to my house.

✓ In addition, I moved recently, and the park became closer to my house.

Closer is already a comparative adjective, so more cannot be used before it. Use either closer or more close, but closer is the natural choice.

× So happy that I can go park more.

✓ I am so happy that I can go to the park more often.

The original sentence does not have a main verb. Add am after I. The phrase go park also needs the preposition to.

× So happy that I can go park more.

✓ I am so happy that I can go to the park more often.

The verb go requires to before a destination: go to the park. More often is the natural expression for increased frequency.

× So happy that I can go park more.

✓ I am so happy that I can go to the park more often.

Use the before park when referring to a specific park near your house.

× I think there are enough parks in our city I think there are almost two or three big parks in our city it is very dark.

✓ I think there are enough parks in our city. There are about two or three big parks in the city.

Almost two or three is not the natural way to give an approximate number. Use about two or three or around two or three. The original answer also contains several complete ideas that should be separated.

× I think there are enough parks in our city I think there are almost two or three big parks in our city it is very dark.

✓ I think there are enough parks in our city. There are about two or three big parks in the city.

Several independent clauses are joined without punctuation or suitable conjunctions. Dividing them into separate sentences creates a clearer structure.

× Yes if the park has more recent facilities like skateboard or swimming pool open the swimming pool.

✓ Yes, if the park had more facilities, such as skateboards or swimming pools, I would use them.

The plural nouns skateboards and swimming pools are needed when referring to facilities in general. The pronoun them agrees with these plural nouns.

× Yes if the park has more recent facilities like skateboard or swimming pool open the swimming pool.

✓ Yes, if the park had more facilities, such as a skateboard area or a swimming pool, I would use them.

Singular countable nouns need articles. Use a before a skateboard area and a swimming pool. A skateboard area is also more grammatically complete than the bare noun skateboard in this context.

× Yes if the park has more recent facilities like skateboard or swimming pool open the swimming pool.

✓ Yes, if the park had more facilities, such as a skateboard area or a swimming pool, I would use them.

The original conditional sentence is incomplete and contains an unclear sequence of verbs. A complete second clause, I would use them, is needed after the if-clause.

× I want to enjoy it when it happens in the future.

✓ I would enjoy using them in the future.

The question asks about a possible future preference. Would enjoy is more suitable for this hypothetical situation, and them agrees with the plural facilities.

× I want to enjoy it when it happens in the future.

✓ I would enjoy using them in the future.

It is unclear because it does not clearly refer to the plural facilities. Use them to refer to skateboards, swimming pools, or other facilities.