Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Cải thiện: Trả lời trực tiếp hơn bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sửa ngữ pháp và trình bày ý rõ ràng trong tối đa 5 câu. Cụ thể: (1) Nói rõ là bạn không thích hay thích; (2) Giải thích lý do ngắn gọn, mạch lạc; (3) Dùng liên từ như "because" hoặc "so" để nối ý. Tránh lỗi như thiếu chủ ngữ/động từ và phát biểu lộn xộn.

Ejemplo: No, I didn't enjoy going to parks as a child because I preferred staying at home to rest and do my chores. I often wanted quiet time alone to relax, so parks didn't appeal to me.

Sugerencia: Cải thiện: Trả lời rõ ràng với câu chủ đề, dùng từ vựng chính xác (ví dụ 'passionate' không phù hợp). Giải thích ngắn gọn vì sao bạn không đi và khi nào bạn sẽ đi. Dùng liên từ như "because" hoặc "however" để kết nối ý và giữ dưới 5 câu.

Ejemplo: To be honest, I'm not very keen on going to parks at the moment because I have a lot of work to finish. However, if I have free time or feel stressed, I might visit a park to relax.

Sugerencia: Cải thiện: Dùng cấu trúc rõ ràng: mở đầu với ý chính (có/không), sau đó nêu lý do cụ thể. Chú ý ngữ pháp (số ít/như 'there are more parks', 'older people') và tránh từ sai (ví dụ 'spaghed' không đúng). Thêm ví dụ cụ thể về lợi ích cho trẻ em và người già.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide safe play areas for children and pleasant spaces for older people to exercise. For example, a neighborhood park could offer playgrounds and walking paths for seniors.

Sugerencia: Cải thiện: Trả lời cụ thể nêu một địa điểm hoặc lý do rõ ràng. Sử dụng từ đúng (ví dụ 'tried' thay vì 'dried') và tránh câu mơ hồ. Giữ cấu trúc: chủ đề + lí do + một ví dụ, dùng liên từ như 'because' hoặc 'for example'.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to visit famous parks in other countries, such as Hyde Park in London, because it would be interesting to experience a different culture and scenery. For example, I could rent a bike and explore the park's trails.

× No, I don't like so basically I am I want to be an adult so I need time to work and sleep at home. Sometimes I just want to relax alone.

✓ No, I didn't like going to parks when I was a child; basically I wanted to be an adult, so I needed time to work and sleep at home. Sometimes I just wanted to relax alone.

The student mixed present and past tenses. The question asks about childhood, so past tense should be used. Use 'didn't like' and 'wanted' to describe past habits. Also use 'going to parks' (gerund) after 'like' when referring to the activity. Suggestion: keep tense consistent (past) when describing childhood: 'I didn't like going to parks when I was a child.'

× To be honest I don't want to go passional. I have many tasks so needs to be done in this time and after that I want to relax

✓ To be honest, I don't want to go to parks for leisure. I have many tasks that need to be done at this time, and after that I want to relax.

Errors: incorrect adjective 'passional' and tense/structure issues. The speaker is talking about current preference, so present tense 'don't want' is fine, but use 'go to parks for leisure' or 'go for leisure'. Use 'tasks that need to be done' rather than 'needs to be done' because 'tasks' is plural and requires plural verb/agreement. Suggestion: use 'tasks that need to be done' and add conjunctions/punctuation for clarity.

× I totally want to see more parks in my city because this have more space for children and for the older in the city this now in the city is it not spaghed for them.

✓ I would definitely like to see more parks in my city because they would provide more space for children and older people; currently the city is not suitable for them.

Problems: wrong pronoun/reference ('this' used incorrectly), subject-verb agreement ('this have'), and unclear phrase 'spaghed'. Use 'they' to refer to parks (plural) and 'older people' instead of 'the older'. Use 'is not suitable for them' to express lack of facilities. Suggestion: use clear pronouns and correct agreement: 'parks... they would provide...'; replace unclear words with accurate vocabulary like 'suitable'.

× Well, I want to go in some park in another country because I think it's something interesting I haven't dried before. So I think because this bike is where to realize but I also dry noting.

✓ Well, I would like to visit a park in another country because I think it would be interesting; I haven't experienced that before. I also think traveling by bike could be a way to do it, but I haven't tried that yet.

Multiple issues: tense and word choice. Use conditional 'would like' for future preference. Replace 'haven't dried before' with 'haven't experienced/tried before'. 'this bike is where to realize' is unclear — likely meant 'traveling by bike could be a way to do it'. 'dry noting' should be 'tried nothing' -> 'haven't tried that yet'. Suggestion: choose correct verbs ('try/experience'), keep tense consistent, and use clear phrasing for means of travel.