Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be careful with tense and natural phrasing. Use past tense consistently for childhood memories, avoid redundancy, and keep it concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details linked logically.

Ejemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. For example, I often went with my parents to a local park where we strolled, bought street food, and sat on a bench to eat together, which made those afternoons very enjoyable.

Sugerencia: Polish grammar and phrasing, use natural collocations (sit on the grass, feel the breeze), and link ideas with a simple connector. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and avoid repetition.

Ejemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they help me slow down. For instance, I often walk there with friends or family, sit on the grass, and enjoy the fresh breeze, which helps me relax.

Sugerencia: Make grammar correct and concise; use clearer reasons and better vocabulary (shopping pressure → commercial pressure). Avoid awkward or wordy phrases and use linking words to explain cause.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would. More parks would give people peaceful green spaces to stroll and relax without the commercial pressure to go into shops and spend money.

Sugerencia: Good specific answer; vary vocabulary to avoid repetition of 'would love' and use natural verbs (look at the river, watch the river). Keep sentences concise and connect activities smoothly.

Ejemplo: Yes, I'd like to visit the parks along the Han River in South Korea. There I plan to cycle, walk with friends and family, and sit on the grass to watch the river and enjoy the view.

× Yes, I do love going to parks as a child.

✓ Yes, I loved going to parks as a child.

The sentence refers to past habitual action 'as a child', so the past tense should be used. Use 'loved' instead of 'do love' to match time reference; alternatively 'I used to love' is possible for habitual past.

× I remember I went to a local park in my hometown with my parents and we just strolled around bought some street foods and sat in the bench and ate together.

✓ I remember I went to a local park in my hometown with my parents; we strolled around, bought some street food, sat on the bench, and ate together.

Multiple issues: sequence of past actions should use past tense consistently (strolled, bought, sat, ate). 'street foods' is uncountable in this context — use 'street food'. Use 'sat on the bench' not 'sat in the bench'. Add commas or conjunctions to separate actions for clarity.

× Overall I was having a good time.

✓ Overall, I had a good time.

The speaker recounts a past event; simple past 'had' is more appropriate than past continuous 'was having' for summarizing a completed experience. Add a comma after 'Overall' for clarity.

× Yes, I still like going to the parks especially it is where I can just slow down, take a walk with my friends or family.

✓ Yes, I still like going to parks; especially, they are places where I can slow down and take a walk with my friends or family.

Do not use the definite article 'the' before a general plural 'parks' when speaking generally. The original also has a sentence-structure issue: 'especially it is where' is awkward. Rephrase to 'they are places where' and use plural agreement. Semicolon and commas improve flow.

× We can sit under grass and relax and feel the fresh breeze of the air and be one with the nature.

✓ We can sit on the grass, relax, feel the fresh breeze, and be one with nature.

Use 'sit on the grass' not 'under grass'. 'The fresh breeze of the air' is redundant; 'feel the fresh breeze' is natural. Use 'one with nature' without the definite article 'the'. Add commas for list clarity.

× Yes, I would love to see more parks in the city because I would like to stroll around in nature and just being able to relax without the pressure of going into a store or a retail and forces me to spend some money.

✓ Yes, I would love to see more parks in the city because I would like to stroll around in nature and just be able to relax without the pressure of going into a store or a shop that forces me to spend money.

After 'would like', use the base verb 'be', not 'being'. 'a retail' is incorrect; use 'a shop' or 'retail store'. Also adjust clause 'that forces me to spend money' to match subject 'a shop'.

× Are there any parks you want to go to in the future?

✓ Are there any parks you want to go to in the future?

No correction needed; sentence is grammatically correct. (Included for completeness.)

× Yes, I would love to go to the parks beside the Han River in South Korea.

✓ Yes, I would love to go to the parks beside the Han River in South Korea.

This sentence is acceptable as written: 'the Han River' correctly uses the definite article with a named river, and 'the parks beside the Han River' is specific. No grammatical change required.

× I would love to ride a bicycle there, take a walk with my friends and family and just sit on the grass and gaze the Han River.

✓ I would love to ride a bicycle there, take a walk with my friends and family, and just sit on the grass and gaze at the Han River.

Use 'gaze at' with the preposition 'at' when looking at something. Also add commas to separate list items for clarity.