Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Improve grammar and sentence structure, use a clear topic sentence, and add specific details with correct verb forms. Use linking words to make the sequence clear (e.g., “when,” “then,” “also”). Keep answers concise (maximum 5 sentences).

Ejemplo: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child. When I was young, I visited the park with my friends at least once a week. We usually played soccer or raced toy cars on a small path, and we often ran around the playground for an hour. Those outings were lively and helped us stay active.

Sugerencia: Focus on making a single clear topic sentence then give 1–2 specific supporting reasons. Correct verb tense and collocations (e.g., “busy as a worker” -> “busy at work”; “I don't have time” not “I don't have a time”). Avoid confusing or redundant phrases.

Ejemplo: Not really — I rarely visit parks now because I am very busy at work. I usually work long hours and have little free time, so I prefer to rest at home or meet friends briefly for a meal instead of going to a park.

Sugerencia: Start with a clear direct answer, then give specific supporting points and use linking words (e.g., “because,” “for example,” “also”). Use proper noun phrases (e.g., “parks for adults and children”) and avoid repetition.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would, because our city already has a variety of parks. For example, there are natural parks, playgrounds for children, and quiet parks popular with older people. I would visit them more often if I had more leisure time.

Sugerencia: Give a clear topic sentence naming the park, then provide specific reasons and plans using correct grammar (e.g., “I want to save money,” “it is located in a remote area”). Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences; use linking words like “because” and “so.”

Ejemplo: In the future, I would like to visit the National Park in my country because it is in a beautiful, remote area. It is quite far from my city, so I am saving money and planning a trip with friends. I hope to hike the trails and see wildlife when I go.

× When I was child, at least once a week I went to the park with my friends.

✓ When I was a child, at least once a week I went to the park with my friends.

Singular and plural issue: the noun 'child' needs an article 'a' to form the singular noun phrase 'a child.' Without the article the noun phrase is ungrammatical. Suggestion: use 'a child' for singular or 'a kid' or 'children' with appropriate verb forms.

× We go we had some place there and we playing a car or just we playing soccer and we just running around the park.

✓ We had a place there where we played with a toy car, or we played soccer and just ran around the park.

Sentence structure errors: the original sentence mixes tenses and lacks proper conjunctions and verb forms (e.g. 'we go,' 'we playing'). Use consistent past tense 'had,' 'played,' 'ran' and rearrange clauses for clarity. Suggestion: keep the past tense throughout and use relative clauses ('where we played...').

× Not really. Since I have a busy time as a worker, I don't have any break time for going to park.

✓ Not really. Because I am busy with work, I don't have any break time to go to the park.

Present tense issue and sentence structure: 'I have a busy time as a worker' is awkward and 'for going to park' is ungrammatical. Use present continuous or simple present 'I am busy with work' and the infinitive 'to go' plus the article 'the park.' Suggestion: say 'I am busy with work' and 'to go to the park.'

× I mean, even if we can, I don't have to.

✓ I mean, even if I could, I wouldn't be able to.

Incorrect use of pronouns and modal verbs: 'we' is inconsistent with 'I' used elsewhere; 'I don't have to' changes meaning (it means obligation absent). The speaker likely means inability or lack of opportunity. Use 'I could'/'wouldn't be able to' or 'I can't.' Suggestion: match pronouns and use correct modal to express inability ('I can't').

× I don't have a time for going to park because I have to go to my meal, my friend.

✓ I don't have time to go to the park because I have to go to a meal with my friend.

Article errors and preposition/word choice: 'a time' is unnecessary—use 'time' without article. 'Going to park' needs 'the park.' 'Go to my meal, my friend' is unclear; likely 'go to a meal with my friend.' Suggestion: use 'time' (no article), 'to go to the park,' and 'a meal with my friend.'

× Yes, I would since my city has many parks.

✓ Yes, I would, since my city has many parks.

Modal verb usage and punctuation: the sentence is grammatically acceptable but needs a comma for clarity after 'would.' If the intended meaning is willingness, 'I would' should be followed by an infinitive ('I would like to') to be complete. Suggestion: say 'Yes, I would like to, since...' for clarity.

× It's just natural parks or just parks for adult, for older people and for kids.

✓ There are natural parks, and parks for adults, older people, and kids.

Incorrect use of adjectives/adverbs and pluralization: 'adult' should be plural 'adults'; use parallel structure and plural nouns. Also use 'there are' to introduce types of parks. Suggestion: list categories in parallel and use plural forms.

× They have many parks here so I want to go to the parks if I have a leisure time.

✓ They have many parks here, so I want to go to the parks if I have leisure time.

Present tense fine but article and word choice: 'a leisure time' is incorrect; use 'leisure time' without article. Suggestion: remove 'a' before 'leisure time.'

× In the future, I want to go to the National Park in my in my country.

✓ In the future, I want to go to the national park in my country.

Sentence structure and repetition: 'in my in my country' repeats words. Also 'National Park' need not be capitalized unless it's the official name; use 'the national park' or the park's proper name. Suggestion: remove duplicate words and use 'the national park' or the specific name.

× It's located in the remote area far from my city.

✓ It's located in a remote area far from my city.

Preposition/article issue: 'in the remote area' sounds specific but the speaker likely means any remote area—use 'in a remote area.' Also 'far from my city' is correct. Suggestion: use 'a remote area' unless specifying a particular area.

× So I I want to saving my money to go there.

✓ So I want to save my money to go there.

Verb + -ing form: 'want to' must be followed by the base form 'save,' not the -ing form. Remove the extra 'I' as well. Suggestion: use 'want to' + base verb.

× So if I going there, I want to.

✓ So if I go there, I will want to.

Verb in the present participle form/present tense: 'if I going there' is incorrect; use the simple present 'if I go there' for a conditional clause referring to future. The main clause 'I want to' is incomplete—better 'I will go' or 'I would like to.' Suggestion: use 'If I go there, I will go' or 'If I go there, I would like to.'