Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Reduce repetition, correct grammar (past tense), and give clearer, specific details. Use a topic sentence then one or two supporting details with linking words. Avoid redundant phrases and fix verb forms and prepositions.

Ejemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I used to play on the slides and swings with my friends, and my parents often took me there while they jogged. I also remember making and flying paper planes on the grass, which was one of my favourite pastimes.

Sugerencia: Be more concise and avoid repeating words. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words like 'because' or 'so'. Use natural collocations (e.g. 'breathe fresh air', 'relax', 'meet friends').

Ejemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they offer fresh air and a peaceful green space to relax. For example, I often go for a run there and sometimes meet friends to chat or do some light work on a bench.

Sugerencia: Organise your answer: give a direct opinion, then two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid repetition and correct word choice ('bustle', 'clean air'). Keep sentences short and varied vocabulary.

Ejemplo: Definitely — I would like to see more parks in my city because they offer an escape from the bustle of urban life and provide cleaner air. In addition, the pleasant scenery and quiet spaces would help improve people's mental health and encourage social activities with friends.

Sugerencia: Use correct tense and avoid repetition. Mention the park by name or feature and give specific future intentions using 'will' or 'plan to'. Keep it concise: topic sentence + supporting detail(s) with linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

Ejemplo: Yes — a new park just opened in my neighbourhood, and I plan to visit it regularly. I expect to relax there, enjoy the fresh air, and spend some quiet time reflecting or reading on the benches.

× I remember when I was when I was a child, I often have slides and swings with my friends.

✓ I remember when I was a child, I often played on slides and swings with my friends.

The sentence mixes present simple 'have' with a past-time frame 'I remember when I was a child'. Use past tense 'played' to match the time reference and use the correct verb and preposition 'play on' for playground equipment. Remove the repeated phrase 'when I was'.

× My parents often take me to there to have a work or to jog to judging to judging and there I often fly paper planes or flights

✓ My parents often took me there so they could work or jog, and I often flew paper planes there.

Use past tense 'took' to match past narration. Remove unnecessary 'to' before 'there' and clean up repeated and unclear phrases ('to have a work', 'to judging'). Use 'so they could' to explain reason. Use past tense 'flew' for the activity in the past. 'Fly paper planes' becomes 'flew paper planes'.

× Yes, I really like going to parks nowadays and I can breathe fresh fresh air and it provides a green place for me to relax myself and I can run there and have some chat with my friends and work there.

✓ Yes, I really like going to parks nowadays; I can breathe fresh air, relax, run, chat with my friends, and sometimes work there.

Remove duplicate word 'fresh'. Use parallel verb forms after 'I can' (breathe, relax, run, chat). 'Relax myself' is unnatural; use 'relax'. Combine items with commas and use 'sometimes' for clarity about working there. These changes improve fluency and correct adverb/adjective usage.

× Definitely I like to see more parks in my city and the park provides an escape from the bustles of the cities and the clean the clean air and the beautiful environment, beautiful scenery there definitely will improve my mental health and it is truly a green place with friends.

✓ Definitely I would like to see more parks in my city. Parks provide an escape from the bustle of the city; clean air and beautiful scenery would definitely improve my mental health, and they are truly green places to visit with friends.

Use 'would like' to express preference. Use plural 'parks' consistently. Change 'the bustles of the cities' to 'the bustle of the city' for idiomatic singular collective noun. Remove duplicate 'the clean the clean'. Use 'would' to express hypothetical benefit. Use 'they' to refer to parks and 'places to visit' for clarity.

× Yes, of course there is a park that just opened in my neighbourhood and I'd often go and I often go there to relax myself and to breathe breathe fresh air and I will be and I will feel so happy there and it provides me to have time to talk to myself.

✓ Yes, of course there is a park that just opened in my neighbourhood, and I often go there to relax and breathe fresh air. I feel very happy there, and it gives me time to be alone with my thoughts.

Keep 'there is' for existence but simplify tense consistency: use present 'often go' for habitual action. Remove repeated 'breathe'. Use 'relax' instead of 'relax myself'. Replace awkward 'provides me to have time to talk to myself' with 'gives me time to be alone with my thoughts' which is natural English. Ensure clauses are clear and concise.