Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Cải thiện độ tự nhiên, ngắt nghỉ và cấu trúc câu. Tránh tiếng “umm” không cần thiết; mở đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó thêm 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể. Ví dụ: nêu hoạt động bạn thích làm và một kỷ niệm ngắn để làm câu trả lời thuyết phục hơn.

Ejemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often played tag and climbed trees with my friends, and I remember a small pond where we fed ducks on weekends.

Sugerencia: Cải thiện rõ ràng ý và từ vựng chính xác; tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và phát âm; dùng câu hoàn chỉnh và từ đúng (ví dụ "fewer" thay vì "cannot see many"). Thêm liên từ để làm mạch lạc.

Ejemplo: Yes, I still enjoy visiting parks. However, I notice fewer flowers and trees in some parks, but I like them because they are quiet and relaxing.

Sugerencia: Rút gọn câu, dùng cấu trúc trực tiếp và từ vựng chính xác (e.g. "help me relax"), đồng thời giải thích ngắn lý do cụ thể (an toàn, không khí trong lành...). Hạn chế lặp từ và tiếng ngập ngừng.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because they help me relax and feel peaceful; moreover, they provide green spaces for exercise and socialising.

Sugerencia: Làm rõ ý và dùng từ chính xác ("park" thay vì "pub" nếu bạn nói về công viên); tránh câu rối, trình bày thời gian rõ ràng (e.g. "it has been closed for three months"). Nếu không chắc, hãy nói rõ bạn không nhớ và cung cấp kế hoạch ngắn gọn.

Ejemplo: Yes, I plan to visit a park near my house that has been closed for three months and is reopening soon. I'm looking forward to seeing the new playground and walking paths.

× I really liked going to parks when I was a little umm, I enjoyed them because. I could run around and play with my friends.

✓ I really liked going to parks when I was little; I enjoyed them because I could run around and play with my friends.

The original contains an unnecessary period after 'because' and a redundant phrase 'a little umm'. Also 'when I was little' is the correct idiomatic phrase. Combine clauses into one sentence using a semicolon or conjunction to show the relationship. Suggestion: remove fillers and join the clauses so the present participle 'going' correctly links with the past 'liked' and 'enjoyed'. 'Verb in the present participle form' applies because 'going' functions as a gerund here and should be smoothly connected to the rest of the sentence.

× Oh yes, umm I still like visiting parks umm pickers uh, I cannot see many flower and trees. Umm it's a relaxed.

✓ Oh yes, I still like visiting parks, but I cannot see many flowers and trees there. It's relaxing.

Errors: 'pickers' is unclear and likely a filler; 'flower and trees' should be plural 'flowers and trees'; 'it's a relaxed' is incorrect adjective use — use 'relaxing' (present participle) to describe the park. Also add 'there' for clarity and use a conjunction 'but' to contrast. Suggestion: use correct plural nouns and the present participle 'relaxing' to describe atmosphere.

× Well maybe yes, I would like to see more parks in my city, umm, because it helps me umm, feel uh, few relax and uh, peaceful.

✓ Well maybe yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they help me feel relaxed and peaceful.

Problems: tense and agreement — 'it helps me' should refer to 'parks' (plural), so use 'they help me'; 'feel few relax' is ungrammatical; use adjective 'relaxed' (past participle adjective) after 'feel'. Remove fillers. Suggestion: match subject and verb number and use correct adjective forms: 'they help me feel relaxed and peaceful.' This fits the conditional desire expressed.

× MMM maybe yes in the future I want to go to pub near my house. Umm, it's not umm open for three months ago it is it the pickle place?

✓ Maybe yes; in the future I want to go to the pub near my house. It has not been open for three months. Is it the pickle place?

Multiple tense and article errors: use the definite article 'the pub' for a specific pub; 'it's not open for three months ago' mixes tenses incorrectly — correct form is 'it has not been open for three months' (present perfect for a period continuing to now). Final question 'it is it the pickle place?' is unclear—rephrase as 'Is it the pickle place?'. Suggestion: use the present perfect to describe an action/state that started in the past and continues to now, include the definite article when referring to a specific pub, and rephrase unclear fragments.