Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Cải thiện: (1) Tránh lặp từ và sửa ngữ pháp — dùng thì quá khứ khi nói về kí ức (e.g. "I liked"). (2) Trả lời rõ ràng bằng câu chủ đề ngắn, rồi thêm chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ: hoạt động bạn làm ở công viên). (3) Dùng liên từ phù hợp để mạch lạc (because, so, when). (4) Giữ độ dài dưới 5 câu và phát âm rõ ràng. Cụ thể: Nói "I liked going to parks as a child because...", nêu 1–2 hoạt động bạn làm và một cảm xúc hoặc kết quả.

Ejemplo: I liked going to parks as a child because my family often had picnics there. I used to play on the swings and explore the flower beds, which made me feel happy and carefree.

Sugerencia: Cải thiện: (1) Trả lời trực tiếp hiện tại (Yes, I still do) và tránh lặp từ như "when" nhiều lần. (2) Sử dụng thì hiện tại để nói về thói quen (I still like going...). (3) Thêm một lý do cụ thể và một ví dụ ngắn, dùng liên từ như "because" hoặc "so" để nối ý. (4) Kiểm soát tốc độ nói để tránh lấp đầy bởi "uh/umm".

Ejemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. I often visit a nearby park to walk and read because being outdoors helps me clear my mind and relax after a busy day.

Sugerencia: Cải thiện: (1) Câu trả lời hiện tại mâu thuẫn và khó hiểu — nếu muốn bày tỏ ý kiến, bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng (Yes/No and why). (2) Sử dụng từ vựng chính xác (e.g. "bustling" not "bustle lifestyle"). (3) Cung cấp lý do rõ ràng và một ví dụ ngắn (e.g. thiếu đất hoặc ưu tiên phát triển cơ sở hạ tầng). (4) Tránh các cụm từ mơ hồ như "I'm not prefer sitting will" và giữ ngữ pháp đơn giản.

Ejemplo: No, I wouldn't necessarily want more parks if space is limited. In my city, there is high demand for housing and infrastructure, so I think planners should balance green spaces with other needs.

Sugerencia: Cải thiện: (1) Trả lời trực tiếp và ngắn gọn (e.g. "Yes, I would like to visit Harbin Park"). (2) Giải thích cụ thể vì sao (kỷ niệm, phong cảnh, hoạt động). (3) Tránh lặp và sử dụng cấu trúc rõ ràng: chủ đề + lý do + ví dụ. (4) Sử dụng thì phù hợp khi nói về tương lai (I would like to / I plan to).

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to visit Harbin Park because it holds many childhood memories for me. I remember playing there with my family, and I want to revisit those spots to relive those moments and take photos.

× Yes, of course I I prefer going to parks as a child.

✓ Yes, of course I preferred going to parks as a child.

The sentence refers to a past habit (as a child), so the verb should be in the past tense. Use 'preferred' to match the time reference. Suggestion: use simple past for habits in the past (e.g., 'I preferred going to parks as a child').

× Umm 'cause when I'm at tea now I still, I still a sense of lovely to to go to park 'cause he's helped me reduce my stress.

✓ Because even now I still have a lovely feeling about going to parks, as they help me reduce my stress.

Multiple issues: incorrect phrase 'at tea now', missing verb 'have' for 'a sense of', wrong pronoun 'he's' and awkward structure. This is a sentence structure and verb issue. Suggestion: simplify and use correct verbs and pronouns: 'I still have a lovely feeling about going to parks' and 'they help me reduce my stress'. Use plural 'parks' to match general meaning.

× Yes, of course, I think in my opinion, when, uh, when, when, when, when in the future I will still prefer go to the park cause, umm, when I'm 'cause when I'm go there I feel I can clear my mind and, and find myself.

✓ Yes, of course. In my opinion, in the future I will still prefer to go to the park because when I go there I feel I can clear my mind and find myself.

Errors: missing 'to' in the infinitive 'prefer to go', incorrect verb form 'when I'm go' should be 'when I go'. Redundant phrases ('I think in my opinion'). Suggestion: remove fillers and use correct infinitive and present simple after 'when' to express general situations: 'prefer to go' and 'when I go there I feel...'. Use 'because' for causal link.

× Absolutely not cause in cause in the nowadays cause in nowadays my city have a lot have a household and bustle lifestyle, so with a variety of developed city I'm not prefer sitting will.

✓ Not really, because nowadays my city has a busy lifestyle and many households, and with the city's development I don't prefer to just sit around.

Problems: overuse of 'cause', wrong word order 'have a household and bustle lifestyle' (should be 'has a busy lifestyle and many households'), wrong tense/verb 'have' should be 'has' for singular 'my city', incorrect verb phrase 'I'm not prefer sitting will'. Suggestion: use 'has' for singular subject, 'busy' as adjective, and correct expression 'I don't prefer to just sit around'.

× Umm, the park I prefer to go with, to go to go to in, uh, despite not only in now, in nowadays, but also in the future, I prefer to go to Harbin park 'cause it stick with my childhood, uh, my, my childhood very.

✓ The park I prefer to go to now and in the future is Harbin Park because it is connected to my childhood.

Errors: redundant and broken phrasing 'to go with, to go to go to in', awkward 'despite not only in now', and wrong verb 'it stick' should be 'it is connected' or 'it sticks' depending on intended meaning. Use a clear subject-verb structure: 'The park I prefer to go to now and in the future is Harbin Park because it is connected to my childhood.' Suggestion: simplify the sentence, use correct preposition 'to' after 'go', and use 'is connected to' to express relation to childhood.