Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details using linking words. Avoid filler words (umm) and grammatical errors (tense and article use). For example, say when you went, what you did, and who you went with. Use linking words like “also” or “for example.”

Ejemplo: Yes. I loved going to parks as a child. I usually went with my friends after school, and we spent hours on the swings and slides. Also, I remember playing simple games like tag, which made those visits very enjoyable.

Sugerencia: Clarify your main idea and fix grammar and word choice. Begin with a clear contrast sentence, then give two concise specific reasons using linking words (e.g., “however,” “now”). Replace unclear phrases like “finding a piece” with precise vocabulary such as “peace.”

Ejemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks, but for different reasons now. Whereas I used to go to play with friends, now I visit parks to relax and enjoy some peace and quiet. I also like walking there to get fresh air and clear my mind.

Sugerencia: State your opinion clearly and give two specific reasons, using linking words like “because” and “so.” Correct vocabulary (e.g., “more parks” not “a moot park”) and simplify sentence structure to avoid run-ons.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because there are very few parks and the nearest one is far from my home. As a result, it is hard to visit in bad weather, so having more local parks would make recreation much easier.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and provide specific features you want, using linking words like “for example” or “and.” Fix plural and article errors (e.g., “people” not “peoples”) and avoid repetition. Limit to up to five sentences.

Ejemplo: I don’t have a specific park in mind, but I would like to visit parks that have lots of flowers and greenery and also offer adventure equipment. For example, a park with climbing frames, obstacle courses, and picnic areas would be ideal because it allows both exercise and socializing with others.

× Yes, umm, I do like to go to the park, going to the park when I was child in park, there are different kinds of equipments that can be played by children. In past and we used to go on our weekdays, it is to play with this equipment. There are different umm.

✓ Yes, I liked going to the park when I was a child. There were different kinds of equipment that children could play on. In the past we used to go on weekdays to play on this equipment.

Multiple tense and article errors: 'do like' is present but context asks about childhood, so use past 'liked' (Present tense issue, ID 6). 'when I was child' misses article 'a' (Article errors, ID 22). 'equipments' is uncountable/plural misuse; use 'equipment' (Singular and plural issue, ID 1). 'that can be played by children' is passive awkwardness; 'children could play on' is natural (Passive voice/verb use, ID 21/8). 'In past' needs article 'the' and consistent past tense: 'In the past we used to go on weekdays.' Suggestions: match past tense for childhood descriptions, use 'a child', use uncountable 'equipment', and prefer active phrasing like 'children could play on' or 'play with' for clarity.

× Yes, I do like going to parks nowadays, but the motive is different. In childhood I just to go there for playing with my friends equipment, but now I just go there for finding a piece, spending a time with myself and for relaxing.

✓ Yes, I like going to parks nowadays, but the reason is different. As a child I used to go there to play with my friends and their equipment, but now I go there to find some peace, to spend time alone, and to relax.

Present tense and verb form errors: 'do like' is unnecessary—simple present 'like' is natural (Present tense issue, ID 6). 'In childhood I just to go' is incorrect; use 'As a child I used to go' to express past habit (Past tense issue, ID 5). 'for playing with my friends equipment' needs infinitive and possessive: 'to play with my friends and their equipment' (Incorrect use of pronouns/possessive and verb form, ID 12 and 8). 'finding a piece' is a wrong phrase; correct is 'find some peace' and 'spending a time with myself' should be 'to spend time alone' (Incorrect use of adjectives/adverbs and collocations, ID 13). Suggestions: use 'used to' for past habits, use infinitives 'to play/to spend', use possessive 'friends' equipment' or 'friends and their equipment', and common collocations 'peace' and 'spend time alone'.

× Yes, I do like to see a moot park in my city because they are very limited parks in my town which is far away from my home and it is difficult for me to reach in unpleasant weather so I feel should be more.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because there are very few parks in my town, which is far from my home, and it is difficult for me to reach them in bad weather, so I think there should be more.

Article and word choice errors: 'do like to see a moot park' is incorrect; 'would like to see more parks' fits the polite preference and correct word 'more' (Modal/phrase issue, ID 4 and Article errors, ID 22). 'they are very limited parks' should be 'there are very few parks' (There be issue, ID 3 and Singular/plural, ID 1). 'which is far away from my home' should be 'which is far from my home' (Preposition use, ID 11). 'reach in unpleasant weather' needs object 'them' and 'bad weather' is more natural. 'I feel should be more' needs subject and verb: 'I think there should be more.' Suggestions: use 'there are' for existence, 'few' for scarcity, include objects for verbs, and use 'I would like' or 'I think' for opinions.

× There is not a particular park, but I like to go to the park where there are lots of flowers and greenery with adventure equipment, adventure side, where we can play a different kind of games and we can socialize with other peoples also.

✓ There is not a particular park, but I like to go to parks that have lots of flowers and greenery and adventure equipment, where we can play different kinds of games and socialize with other people.

Existence and count noun errors: 'There is not a particular park' is acceptable, but 'the park where there are lots of flowers' is better as plural 'parks that have' to match general preference (There be issue, ID 3). 'adventure side' is unclear; 'adventure equipment' suffices. 'a different kind of games' mixes singular and plural; use 'different kinds of games' or 'different kinds of games' (Singular and plural issue, ID 1). 'other peoples' is incorrect plural of 'people' (Singular/plural and pronoun use, ID 1 and 12). Suggestions: use 'parks that have', match singular/plural consistently, and use 'other people' not 'other peoples'.