Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be concise and use correct tense and article usage. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, avoid filler sounds, correct grammar (e.g., "I loved going to the park when I was a child"), and use linking words for clarity. Add one specific detail and keep to 2–4 sentences.

Ejemplo: I loved going to the park when I was a child because it was the place where all my friends gathered. We would play games like badminton and volleyball every afternoon, and sometimes we organized small matches on weekends.

Sugerencia: Use consistent articles and tense, and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence (present tense). Use linking words and provide a specific example of what soothes you or who you meet. Limit to 2–4 sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to the park because the fresh air and green surroundings help me relax after a busy day. For example, I often sit by the lake or walk on the tree-lined path, and occasionally I meet old classmates for a brief chat.

Sugerencia: Be precise and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to give reasons and one specific benefit with a short explanation. Improve grammar (e.g., "help refresh people" -> "help people feel refreshed"). Keep within 2–4 sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because increased greenery can help reduce air pollution and improve AQI. Additionally, parks provide pleasant spaces for exercise and relaxation, which benefits both physical and mental health.

Sugerencia: Give a clear topic sentence about a specific park and use past and future tenses correctly. Avoid repetition ("play in the ground and to play in the park"). Add a brief reason or memory and a sentence about future plans, using linking words.

Ejemplo: Yes, I want to visit the park near my aunt's house because it holds fond childhood memories; we used to play there for an hour and have small picnics with my cousins. Next time I visit my aunt, I plan to go there again and relax on the grass while catching up with family.

× Absolutely, I love to go to park when I was a child because many of my friends visit park every day and that was the only point where I can meet them everyday.

✓ Absolutely, I loved going to the park when I was a child because many of my friends visited the park every day and that was the only place where I could meet them every day.

Mixed tenses and incorrect verb forms: the sentence refers to a past habit so verbs should be in past tense (loved, visited, could). 'Go to park' and 'visit park' need the definite article 'the' and 'point' is the wrong noun for a meeting place; 'place' is appropriate. Also 'everyday' as an adjective differs from 'every day' (each day); here 'every day' is correct.

× And at that time we just, uh, play many games like sometimes badminton, volleyball or handball.

✓ And at that time we just played many games, like badminton, volleyball, or handball.

The sentence describes past activities so the verb should be in past tense ('played' not 'play'). 'Sometimes' can be placed before activities or omitted; simplify to 'like badminton, volleyball, or handball.' Remove filler 'uh' for clarity.

× I like going to park because the fresh environment and the park soothes me and I think I feel relaxed after going to the park.

✓ I like going to the park because the fresh environment and the park soothe me, and I feel relaxed after going to the park.

Agreement and verb form: 'park soothes me' and 'the fresh environment ... soothe me' — use plural verb 'soothe' to agree with compound subject 'the fresh environment and the park'. Remove redundant 'I think' when saying 'I feel relaxed' to be concise.

× Moreover, sometimes many of my old friends just met me there and we just had little talk.

✓ Moreover, sometimes many of my old friends met me there and we had short conversations.

Use past tense 'met' and 'had' for past events. 'Little talk' is unnatural; use 'short conversations' or 'a little chat.' Also remove unnecessary 'just' to improve naturalness.

× Absolutely yes, I would definitely like to see many and many parks in my city because I think that more greenery can control pollution and AQI level in India and more greenery can help refreshing people and make them feel relaxed.

✓ Absolutely, I would definitely like to see many more parks in my city because I think that more greenery can help control pollution and the AQI level in India, and more greenery can help refresh people and make them feel relaxed.

Use 'many more' instead of 'many and many' for natural emphasis. 'Can control' is fine but better as 'help control'. Include article 'the' before 'AQI level'. Use verb 'refresh' instead of 'help refreshing' — after 'help' use base verb form. Maintain parallel structure in the final clause.

× I would like to go to the park, which is near my aunt's home because when we were small we just visit there for half an hour or one hour to play in the ground and to play in the park.

✓ I would like to go to the park near my aunt's home because when we were small we used to visit it for half an hour or an hour to play on the ground and in the park.

Use 'used to' to describe habitual past actions rather than present 'visit'. Use 'visit it' (pronoun) rather than 'visit there'. Use 'an hour' not 'one hour' for natural phrasing. Use preposition 'on the ground' for playing on the field.

× And all of my cousins just go there and we just had a small picnic there.

✓ All of my cousins used to go there and we used to have small picnics there.

Describe past habitual actions with 'used to' rather than present 'go' and mix of past 'had'. Make number consistent: 'small picnics' plural if repeated occasions. Remove unnecessary 'just' for clarity.