Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Reduce hesitation and filler words, correct grammar and tighten structure. Start with a clear topic sentence, follow with 2–3 specific supporting details (when, what you did, who was there), and avoid repetition. Use linking words (for example, often/usually/while) to make it coherent.

Ejemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. After school I often sat on a bench or on the grass to relax and watch people. For example, many families would chat while others went jogging, which made the park feel lively and safe.

Sugerencia: Fix subject-verb agreement and remove hesitations. Provide a concise topic sentence, then one or two specific reasons with linking words (because, however, so). Mention frequency or a short example to be more vivid.

Ejemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks, but I don't go often because of my busy schedule. However, whenever I get the chance I sit quietly and watch birds, which helps me unwind and forget about work for a while.

Sugerencia: Avoid vague phrases and awkward expressions; be more precise and natural. Start with a clear opinion, then give two specific reasons with linking words (because, for example, therefore). Replace awkward idioms with natural expressions (e.g., "earning a living").

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks because the city is becoming very congested and lacks green space. For example, parks would give residents places to relax and exercise, and therefore improve people’s mental and physical health.

Sugerencia: Avoid contradictory phrasing (saying you haven't decided but then naming one). Use a clear topic sentence, give a brief past experience and a future plan with linking words (however, next time). Reduce hesitations and correct small grammatical slips.

Ejemplo: I haven't planned many park visits, but I would like to visit Hyde Park in London. I once tried to go there, but it rained and we had to cancel; next time I visit with friends I hope to explore it fully.

× It was quite interesting and uh, relaxing moment for me.

✓ It was quite an interesting and relaxing moment for me.

The sentence needs the article 'an' before the adjective phrase 'interesting and relaxing moment' to be grammatically correct. Adding 'an' properly links the adjective phrase to the singular noun 'moment'. Also remove filler 'uh' for clarity.

× Uh, often, uh, often I finish my school.

✓ Often, after I finished school, I would go to the park.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. The verb phrase 'I finish my school' does not match the past habit context. Use 'after I finished school' or 'after school' to indicate past time and 'I would go' to show habitual past action. Remove filler 'uh' for clarity.

× I used to go and sit in the park, uh, sit on the beach and see around.

✓ I used to go and sit in the park, look around, and sometimes sit on the bench.

The original mixes 'park' and 'beach' and the verb 'see around' is nonstandard. Correct structure uses parallel verbs ('sit', 'look') and a logical location ('bench' in a park) or keep 'beach' if intended. Ensure parallelism in the list of actions.

× I saw most of the people were jogging or some people were sitting and chatting with their family.

✓ I saw that most people were jogging, and some were sitting and chatting with their families.

The tense 'saw' can be used but the clause should use 'that' for clarity and 'people' plural needs consistent reference. Use 'families' if referring to multiple families. Also streamline repetition of 'people'.

× Yes, I still likes to go to the park, but because of my busy schedule, I am unable to visit.

✓ Yes, I still like to go to the park, but because of my busy schedule I am unable to visit regularly.

The subject 'I' requires the base form 'like' not 'likes'. 'Likes' is third-person singular. Added 'regularly' to clarify frequency.

× It's often uh, but whenever I get chance, I go and sit in the park.

✓ I don't often have the chance, but whenever I get a chance I go and sit in the park.

The original fragment 'It's often uh' is incomplete. Provide a full clause: 'I don't often have the chance' or 'It's not often, but...'. Also use 'a chance' (article) and remove filler 'uh'.

× Also, I look around and I enjoy bird watching and it also unwinds my mind, uh, and it takes my mind away from my busy schedule as well.

✓ Also, I look around and enjoy bird-watching; it relaxes me and takes my mind away from my busy schedule.

'Bird watching' is better hyphenated as 'bird-watching' when used as a noun. 'Unwinds my mind' is awkward; 'relaxes me' or 'calms me' is more natural. Remove filler 'uh' and redundant 'also'/'as well'.

× Yes, I would love to see more parks in my city because I feel the city is getting more congested and it's a really green space around.

✓ Yes, I would love to see more parks in my city because the city is becoming more congested and there are very few green spaces around.

The preposition 'around' was fine but the phrase 'it's a really green space around' is incorrect. Rephrase to 'there are very few green spaces around' to convey the intended meaning about lack of greenery. Use 'becoming' for gradual change.

× So nowadays the life is very busy and everyone is running behind learning bread and butter.

✓ Nowadays life is very busy and everyone is running around trying to earn their bread and butter.

'Omit the definite article before 'life' when speaking generally. 'Running behind learning bread and butter' is incorrect and unclear; the idiom is 'earn their bread and butter' meaning to make a living. Use 'running around trying to earn' for natural phrasing.

× I haven't decided to visit any park in the future, but I would really love to visit Hyde Park, which is in London.

✓ I haven't decided on any specific parks to visit in the future, but I would really love to visit Hyde Park in London.

Use 'decided on' when referring to choices. 'Which is in London' is unnecessary; integrate location as 'Hyde Park in London' for concise structure.

× I have uh, visited that park once but it was raining so we had to drop our plan.

✓ I visited that park once, but it was raining so we had to cancel our plans.

Use simple past 'visited' for a completed past action; 'have visited' is possible but 'visited' is simpler and matches 'we had to cancel our plans'. 'Drop our plan' is unnatural; 'cancel our plans' is idiomatic. Remove 'uh'.

× But next time if I go with my friends, I'll definitely love to explore it more.

✓ But next time if I go with my friends, I'll definitely want to explore it more.

'I'll definitely love to explore' is awkward; 'I'll definitely want to explore' or 'I'll definitely explore it more' are more natural future constructions. Use consistent future modal phrasing.