Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Start with a clear topic sentence then give two concise, linked reasons. Use past tense consistently and avoid redundancy (e.g. “playing outside with friends” already implies being outdoors). Add a brief example or short detail to make the answer more specific.

Ejemplo: No, I didn’t enjoy going to parks as a child. I preferred playing in the neighborhood with my friends because it was more convenient, and we also lacked reliable transportation to reach the parks. For example, we usually played football in the empty lot near my house.

Sugerencia: Give a clear topic sentence then two supporting points linked with connectors. Correct small grammar issues (e.g. "I know hoping" → "I hope") and be more specific about benefits for the child. Keep to 2–4 sentences total.

Ejemplo: Yes, I enjoy going to parks now, especially with my baby. I take her there so she can observe other children and practice social skills, and I hope that with time she will join in and make friends.

Sugerencia: Begin with a direct statement and follow with two linked reasons using connectors (e.g. “because”, “so that”). Avoid vague phrases like “presence of mobile phones” without explaining the effect. Provide a brief specific suggestion or example of what makes parks beneficial.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to see more accessible parks in the city because they give children safe places to exercise and socialise. For example, parks with playgrounds and open spaces encourage kids to be active rather than staying indoors on their phones.

Sugerencia: Give a clear topic sentence and one or two concise reasons with a specific detail about why that park appeals to you. Fix phrasing to avoid repetition (e.g. “joyful memory that we will remember” is redundant).

Ejemplo: Yes, I would love to take my daughter to Disneyland in the future. It was my childhood dream, and I think sharing the rides and shows with her would create special memories for both of us.

× No, I didn't like going to parks as a child because I like playing outside with my friends instead, and also we didn't have any sort of transportation for us to go to parks.

✓ No, I didn't like going to parks as a child because I liked playing outside with my friends instead, and we also didn't have any way to get to the parks.

Mixing past and present tenses: the speaker refers to childhood, so verbs should be in the past tense ('liked' not 'like'). 'Any sort of transportation for us to go to parks' is awkward; use 'any way to get to the parks' for natural past-tense phrasing. Suggestion: keep all verbs describing past circumstances in past tense and use natural collocations like 'way to get to'.

× Now that I'm an adult and I have my own baby, I like going to parks with her because she gets to see the world, she gets to look at kids playing around and I know hoping that when she grows up she will be one of those kids as well.

✓ Now that I'm an adult and I have my own baby, I like going to parks with her because she gets to see the world, she gets to watch other children playing, and I hope that when she grows up she will be one of those kids as well.

Unnecessary tense/modal mix: 'I know hoping' is ungrammatical; use 'I hope' to express desire. 'Look at kids playing around' is informal — 'watch other children playing' is clearer. Maintain present tense for current habits ('I like', 'she gets'). Suggestion: use simple present for habitual actions and a single correct verb for expressing hope.

× In the future, yes, I like to see accessible parks in our city because kids like to play.

✓ In the future, yes, I'd like to see more accessible parks in our city because kids like to play.

Tense and modal usage: 'I like to see' is odd when expressing a desire for the future; use 'I'd like' (I would like) to show preference or desire. Also add 'more' to match the question asking about seeing more parks. Suggestion: use 'I'd like' for polite expressions of future desires.

× Nowadays, even though there is the presence of mobile phones, it is important for the kids to go outdoor and enjoy activities and playing with their friends as well.

✓ Nowadays, even though mobile phones are common, it is important for kids to go outdoors and enjoy activities and play with their friends as well.

Preposition and word form errors: 'go outdoor' should be 'go outdoors' (adverb) and 'playing with their friends' should be parallel with 'enjoy activities and play with their friends' (use base verb). 'There is the presence of mobile phones' is wordy; 'mobile phones are common' is natural. Suggestion: use correct adverb 'outdoors' and keep parallel verb forms.

× Yes, I would like to go to Disneyland, especially with my daughter because it is my dream as a child and going there with her is such a joyful memory that we will remember.

✓ Yes, I would like to go to Disneyland, especially with my daughter, because it was my dream as a child and going there with her would create a joyful memory we will remember.

Tense inconsistency: 'it is my dream as a child' should be past tense 'it was my dream as a child' because the dream refers to childhood. Also 'going there with her is such a joyful memory that we will remember' is awkward; use 'would create a joyful memory we will remember' to express a future hypothetical event. Suggestion: keep reference to childhood in past tense and use conditional/modal 'would' for hypothetical future experiences.