Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and reduce hesitation ("umm"). Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail. Replace repeated phrases and avoid mixing tenses. Aim for 2–3 sentences and use a linking word if adding a reason.

Ejemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. Since our house had very little outdoor space, I often played on the swings and slides there, which was my favorite way to spend weekends.

Sugerencia: Open with a direct statement, then give a specific current use and a linking word to connect ideas. Avoid vague phrases and redundancy like "sometimes some things" and maintain correct grammar ("continues" → "continue"). Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, I still enjoy parks. Although I no longer play there, I now visit regularly for brisk morning walks because I find the fresh air and greenery refreshing.

Sugerencia: Provide a clear main point and one specific reason with concise wording. Remove filler words like "umm" and incomplete phrases ("be able to be"). Use a linking word (e.g., "because" or "so") and offer a concrete example of benefit to strengthen the answer.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would. Kathmandu lacks sufficient green spaces, so building more parks would give residents a place to relax, exercise, and escape the city's noise, improving overall wellbeing.

Sugerencia: Start with a direct statement about wanting to return, then give two specific details about the park using linking words. Combine short fragmented sentences to improve fluency and avoid repetition ("visited there" twice).

Ejemplo: Yes, I'd love to return to Sea Avenues in Arkansas because I visited it once and found it beautiful. It has a lake and a river, and I enjoyed watching many exotic birds there, which made the visit very memorable.

× I loved going to parks as a child because, umm, there used to be swings and since there wouldn't be a lot of ground to play in my house, I would love to go there and play swings and slides in the park.

✓ I loved going to parks as a child because there used to be swings, and since there wasn't a lot of space to play in my house, I loved to go there and play on the swings and slides in the park.

Incorrect use of 'wouldn't be' and 'a lot of ground' when describing past habitual situation. Use 'there used to be' for past existence and 'wasn't' for singular uncountable 'space'. Also use 'loved to go' or 'would go' for past habit consistently and add 'on the' before 'swings and slides'. Suggestion: use 'there used to be' + past simple and replace 'a lot of ground' with 'space'.

× Yes, of course, just because you grow up doesn't mean you do not like going to parks anymore.

✓ Yes, of course; just because you grow up doesn't mean you stop liking going to parks.

Awkward phrasing 'do not like going to parks anymore' is grammatically acceptable but style and tense are improved by 'stop liking'. Use 'doesn't mean you stop liking' to express change over time more naturally. Suggestion: use 'stop liking' for habitual preference change.

× Sometimes some things that you loved as a child still continues to be something to be your favorite.

✓ Sometimes things you loved as a child still continue to be your favorites.

Subject-verb agreement and tense: 'things' is plural so use 'continue' not 'continues'. Awkward phrasing 'something to be your favorite' should be 'your favorites'. Suggestion: make subject and verb agree and simplify phrase.

× And these days I go to the park for not playing, but to do my morning walks.

✓ These days I go to the park not to play, but to take my morning walks.

Incorrect word order with infinitive/gerund. Use 'not to play, but to take' to show purpose. 'Do my morning walks' is less natural than 'take my morning walks'. Suggestion: use infinitive phrase 'to take' for activities like walks.

× Yes, I would absolutely love seeing more parks in my city because I live in Kathmandu and there are not enough parks for people.

✓ Yes, I would absolutely love to see more parks in my city because I live in Kathmandu and there are not enough parks for people.

'Love seeing' is acceptable, but with 'would' the infinitive 'would love to see' is more idiomatic. Suggestion: use 'would love to see' after 'would'.

× I think creating more parks would lead to people, uh, visiting there often and feeling more relaxed and it is such a quiet luxury to be able to be.

✓ I think creating more parks would lead to people visiting them more often and feeling more relaxed; it is such a quiet luxury to be able to do so.

Use 'visiting them' instead of 'visiting there' to refer back to parks. 'More often' is preferred to 'often' for frequency implied. Final clause 'to be able to be' is ungrammatical — replace with 'to be able to do so'. Suggestion: refer to parks with 'them' and complete the idiom 'to be able to do so'.

× Yes, there's a park called Sea Avenues in Arkansas.

✓ Yes, there's a park called Sea Avenues in Arkansas.

Sentence is grammatically correct regarding 'there's' (there is) for a specific park. No change needed.

× I visited there. Visited there once and it was lovely.

✓ I visited it once, and it was lovely.

Fragment 'Visited there once' lacks subject and verb agreement; also 'visited there' is less natural than 'visited it'. Combine into one complete sentence with subject 'I'. Suggestion: use 'I visited it once' or 'I visited there once' with subject included.

× It had a lake, a river, and a lot of exotic birds also came by and I just love being there.

✓ It had a lake and a river, and a lot of exotic birds also came by; I just loved being there.

Run-on sentence; better to separate clauses. Use past tense 'loved' to match 'had' and 'came by' as past events. Also punctuation improved. Suggestion: keep consistent past tense for describing past visit.

× It was really mesmerizing and would love to visit there again.

✓ It was really mesmerizing, and I would love to visit it again.

Missing subject 'I' before 'would love' and use 'visit it again' rather than 'visit there again'. Maintain subject and object clarity. Suggestion: include subject and use 'it' to refer to the park.