Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid filler sounds (uh) and incorrect tense or phrasing (e.g., “we just lived around there”).

Ejemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I usually visited a large park near our home every week with my family, and I enjoyed playing on the playground and having picnics on the grass.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and give clear reasons using correct grammar. Avoid vague or unclear phrases (e.g., “is there have a big sum” and “other a lot of bags”). Use linking words to connect reason and consequence.

Ejemplo: Not as much as before, because I worry about cleanliness and crowds. For example, when parks are crowded or there is litter, I find it less relaxing, so I tend to avoid them.

Sugerencia: Good clear opinion. Improve sentence structure and provide a specific reason or benefit. Use linking words like because or so to make the answer coherent.

Ejemplo: Yes, absolutely. I live in an area with many old buildings, so I would love more parks nearby because they would provide green space for exercise and help improve air quality.

Sugerencia: Be specific about which parks or countries and correct grammar (e.g., “a lot of really big park in other country”). Use linking words to explain why you want to visit and give one concrete detail about the park.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to visit large parks abroad, such as Central Park in New York or Hyde Park in London, because I enjoy scenic walks and seeing famous landmarks and landscapes.

× I usually went to the park with my family and the park is very huge because, uh, we just lived around there so we can go to the park every week.

✓ I usually went to the park with my family and the park was very large because we lived nearby, so we could go to the park every week.

Tense consistency and word choice: 'is' should be 'was' to match past context ('went'). 'Very huge' is awkward; 'very large' is more natural. 'Just lived around there' is nonstandard; 'lived nearby' is correct. 'So we can go' should be 'so we could go' to keep past tense. Improve by keeping verbs in the same time frame and using natural collocations.

× Not very much because now I am concerned about a lot of things like is there have a big sum or umm other a lot of bags.

✓ Not very much because now I am concerned about a lot of things, like whether there is a big crowd or lots of bags.

Incorrect 'there be' structure and word choice: 'is there have' is ungrammatical. Use 'whether there is' for indirect yes/no clause. 'Big sum' doesn't fit context; likely 'big crowd' works. 'Other a lot of bags' should be 'lots of bags'. Also maintain present tense 'am concerned' and use clear vocabulary.

× I'm now living in the city which around a lot of old buildings, so I would love to have more parks there and close to nature.

✓ I'm now living in a city that has a lot of old buildings, so I would love to have more parks there and be closer to nature.

Relative clause and verb choice: 'which around a lot of old buildings' is incorrect; use 'that has a lot of old buildings' or 'with a lot of old buildings'. 'Close to nature' should be 'be closer to nature' to form a complete clause matching 'would love to'. Maintain present continuous 'I'm now living' and correct relative clause structure.

× I think I know a lot of really big park in other country, so I would like to go there because I love to see a lot of beautiful view.

✓ I think I know a lot of really big parks in other countries, so I would like to go there because I love to see many beautiful views.

Number agreement and articles: 'a lot of really big park' should be plural 'parks'. 'In other country' should be plural or specified: 'in other countries' or 'in another country'. 'A lot of beautiful view' is incorrect; use 'many beautiful views' or 'a lot of beautiful scenery'. Ensure plural forms match quantifiers.