Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be careful with grammar, sentence length and accuracy of vocabulary. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb tenses and singular/plural forms, and avoid unnecessary filler. Use linking words (for example, “also” or “besides”) and correct word forms (e.g., “a swing,” “a climbing dome,” “and my friends and I played …”). Keep answers to no more than five sentences and make details specific (e.g., types of games and memories).

Ejemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. The local park near my house had a single swing and a small climbing dome, which we used all the time. There was also a big open field where my friends and I played hide-and-seek, tag, and football. I especially remember racing to the swings after school because it felt like our little adventure every day.

Sugerencia: Use consistent tense and correct word choices; watch singular/plural and collocations (“motor skills,” “bring her some bubbles,” “the swings and the slide”). Make the topic sentence clear, then support with one or two concrete details and a linking word like “because” or “so.” Avoid vague phrases like “the season.”

Ejemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks, but now I go mainly with my daughter so she can play. She loves the swings and the slide, and I always bring bubbles for her, which she finds fascinating. Because of these visits, I enjoy watching her develop new motor skills and social confidence while playing with other children.

Sugerencia: Be precise with nouns and articles (“open fields,” “revitalizing playgrounds” or “revitalization of playgrounds”), and use linking words (“however,” “since,” “so that”) to connect ideas. Provide a specific reason and an example of what you mean by “modern,” such as safety features or equipment. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, definitely. In the past, parks in Jakarta were mostly open fields, but they have improved since the city started revitalizing playgrounds. I would like to see more parks with modern equipment and better lighting so families have safe, accessible places for children to play. For instance, covered play areas and paved paths would make parks usable year-round.

Sugerencia: This answer is clear and well-structured. To improve further, add one concrete detail about what you’d do or see in each park and use linking words (“for example,” “also”) to connect ideas. Keep it concise (2–4 sentences) and include a personal reason or expectation to show interest.

Ejemplo: Yes, I'd love to visit Central Park in New York because it's famous for its walking paths, boating on the lake, and street performances. I also want to see parks in Tokyo, like Shinjuku Gyoen, to observe Japanese garden design, and parks in London, such as Hyde Park, to compare how public spaces host events and leisure activities.

× I love going to park.

✓ I love going to the park.

The noun 'park' is countable and singular here, so it requires a definite article 'the' when referring to parks in general contexts like this one. Use 'the park' to indicate the idea of a park you visited or parks in general when speaking about the activity.

× As a child the park that I used to visit was a small local park near my house with a slight a swing and a climbing Dome.

✓ As a child, the park that I used to visit was a small local park near my house with a slide, a swing, and a climbing dome.

Multiple errors: 'slight a swing' is incorrect word order and word choice; it should be 'a slide, a swing' (list each item with an article). Capitalization: 'Dome' should be lowercase 'dome'. Also add a comma after the introductory phrase 'As a child'. Ensure parallel structure when listing items and correct word order.

× There was also an open field where I and my friends play games like tech, hide and seek and football.

✓ There was also an open field where my friends and I played games like tag, hide-and-seek, and football.

Several issues: Use correct pronoun order 'my friends and I'. Verb tense should match 'There was' (past), so use past 'played' instead of 'play'. 'Tech' is likely a typo for 'tag'. Use hyphens in 'hide-and-seek' for clarity and commas to separate items.

× Looking back.

✓ Looking back, I remember those days fondly.

'Looking back' is a sentence fragment lacking a main verb and subject. To be a complete sentence, add a subject and verb or attach it to the previous sentence. The suggested correction completes the thought.

× Now since I have a daughter, I take her to parks so she can enjoy the same kind of childhood I had.

✓ Now, since I have a daughter, I take her to parks so she can enjoy the same kind of childhood I had.

Mainly punctuation: add a comma after 'Now' for clarity. The tense and structure are otherwise appropriate: present habit 'I take' and past 'I had'.

× She loved to play on the swings, the slide, and the season, and I always bear her some bubbles to play with whenever we go.

✓ She loves to play on the swings and the slide, and I always bring her some bubbles to play with whenever we go.

Tense inconsistency and word choice: Use present 'loves' if referring to current habit. 'Season' is incorrect here — likely intended 'sees' or other; removed. 'Bear her some bubbles' is incorrect verb choice; use 'bring her some bubbles'. Ensure parallel items and correct verb forms.

× It's great to watch her develop new motor skill while playing.

✓ It's great to watch her develop new motor skills while playing.

'Skill' should be plural 'skills' because 'motor skills' is the standard collocation and multiple abilities develop. Also ensure verb 'develop' is correct with 'watch her develop'.

× In the past, parks in Jakarta were mostly open field, but they have improved a lot since the city government began revitalizing playground.

✓ In the past, parks in Jakarta were mostly open fields, but they have improved a lot since the city government began revitalizing playgrounds.

Plural forms needed: 'open field' should be 'open fields' and 'playground' should be 'playgrounds' because speaking generally about many parks and playgrounds. Maintain number agreement.

× I would like to see more parks so families have safe modern place for children to play.

✓ I would like to see more parks so families have safe, modern places for children to play.

Countable noun 'place' needs plural 'places' to match 'families' and general meaning. Also add a comma between adjectives 'safe, modern'.