Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and grammatical: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Use correct tense and articles (e.g., "parks", "the park"). Avoid repeating phrases and filler words.

Ejemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I felt happier and more energetic there because I could play games with my friends and we would chat about our day. These visits were a regular part of my weekends and helped me relax.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and use clearer reasoning with correct grammar. Avoid vague phrases like "the childhood in it's me". Use linking words (however, because) to connect ideas and keep to two or three sentences maximum.

Ejemplo: Not really. I rarely visit parks now because people, including me, spend more time on social media and mobile phones. However, I sometimes go for a walk when I want fresh air or exercise.

Sugerencia: Provide a clear topic sentence and two specific benefits of more parks. Remove hesitations and repeated fragments. Use linking words (because, for example, therefore) and concrete vocabulary (exercise, mental health, green space).

Ejemplo: Yes, I would. More parks would improve the city's quality of life because they provide green space for exercise and relaxation. For example, people could walk or jog regularly, which would benefit both physical and mental health.

Sugerencia: Give a direct answer and a specific example of the kind of park you'd like to visit. Avoid confusing or unclear words ("granaries") and explain why the park appeals to you. Keep it to two or three sentences with linking words (but, because).

Ejemplo: Not at the moment, but I would like to visit a large park with a good playground and open fields. I enjoy such parks because they are great for playing sports and spending time outdoors, and I would go if one were built near my area.

× I like going to park as a child because it makes me feel happy and more energetic while going there as many of my friends also go there to interact with each other about their daily life and to enjoy with and to time pass with their friend.

✓ I liked going to parks as a child because it made me feel happy and more energetic when I went there, as many of my friends also went there to interact with each other about their daily lives and to enjoy themselves and pass time with their friends.

Errors: incorrect singular/plural nouns: 'park' should be 'parks' and 'daily life' should be 'daily lives'; 'friend' should be 'friends'. Also tense consistency: question asked about childhood past, so use past tense. Suggestions: use plural forms when referring to general or multiple items (parks, friends), and keep tense consistent (liked/made/went). Use reflexive pronoun 'themselves' for 'enjoy themselves' and 'pass time' instead of 'time pass'.

× Oh that's a really tough question. As of now, I am not interested going in the park because the childhood in it's me is totally gone now because of today's social media as people used to go parks whenever they fit bored. But in today's generation, many people used to have fun in their own mobile phones.

✓ Oh, that's a really tough question. At the moment, I'm not interested in going to parks because my childhood is totally behind me due to today's social media; people no longer go to parks whenever they feel bored. In this generation, many people prefer to have fun on their mobile phones.

Errors: incorrect verb patterns and prepositions: 'interested going in the park' should be 'interested in going to parks' (preposition 'in' after 'interested' and 'to' for destination). Tense and aspect: speaking about present habits requires present simple ('people no longer go', 'many people prefer'). 'Used to' implies past habit and was misused. 'Fit bored' is incorrect; use 'feel bored'. Suggestions: use 'interested in' + gerund, 'going to parks' for general habit, and present simple for current general habits; use 'prefer' and 'on their mobile phones'.

× As of now, I am not interested going in the park because the childhood in it's me is totally gone now because of today's social media as people used to go parks whenever they fit bored.

✓ At the moment, I'm not interested in going to parks because my childhood is totally behind me due to today's social media, as people no longer go to parks whenever they feel bored.

Errors: 'the childhood in it's me' is ungrammatical and unclear; correct pronoun/possessive is 'my childhood' and expression is 'behind me' or 'over'. Also 'it's' is misused; use 'is'. Suggestions: use correct possessive pronouns (my) and idiomatic expressions (behind me), and avoid redundant words.

× I am not interested going in the park

✓ I am not interested in going to the park

Errors: missing preposition 'in' after 'interested' and wrong preposition 'in' after 'going' when indicating destination; correct pattern is 'interested in doing something' and 'go to a place'. Suggestions: remember verb patterns: 'interested in + gerund' and use 'to' for movement toward places.

× But in today's generation, many people used to have fun in their own mobile phones.

✓ But in today's generation, many people have fun on their mobile phones.

Errors: 'used to' implies past habit; here present habit should be present simple ('have fun'). Also 'in their own mobile phones' should be 'on their mobile phones' and 'own' is unnecessary. Suggestions: use present simple for current trends and correct preposition 'on' for using devices.

× Yes, absolutely, because it, it and it enhance the, uh, it, it enhance the quality of the cities like uh, our area.

✓ Yes, absolutely, because parks enhance the quality of cities like our area.

Errors: repetitive filler words and broken structure; subject-verb agreement also affected by missing clear subject. 'it enhance' is incorrect; with singular 'it' verb should be 'enhances', but plural 'parks' takes 'enhance'. Suggestions: remove fillers, choose clear subject ('parks') and correct verb form accordingly.

× It makes people busy walking there to improve, which makes to your, which makes them to improve their health and to activities.

✓ They make people more active by encouraging walking there, which helps improve their health and participation in activities.

Errors: unclear pronoun reference ('it' ambiguous), incorrect verb forms ('makes people busy walking' awkward), unnecessary infinitive 'to' before 'activities'. Suggestions: use clear plural subject 'they' referring to parks, use natural phrasing 'encouraging walking' and 'helps improve their health and participation in activities'.

× Not really, but in some cases maybe yes, because which part? I have more granaries and more playgrounds.

✓ Not really, but in some cases maybe yes, because in that area there are more gardens and more playgrounds.

Errors: 'granaries' is wrong word (granary is a store for grain) likely meant 'gardens' or 'green areas'; also sentence structure and reference unclear. Suggestions: choose correct plural noun 'gardens' and specify 'in that area there are' for clarity.

× I really enjoy a lot going there, but as of now there are no such things in my local areas, so no.

✓ I used to really enjoy going there a lot, but at present there are no such places in my local area, so no.

Errors: tense mismatch: talking about past enjoyment of parks should use past tense 'used to enjoy' or 'really enjoyed'. 'Local areas' should be 'local area' or 'my local area'; 'such things' is vague — use 'such places'. Suggestions: align tense to refer to past habits and use precise nouns and singular/plural appropriately.