Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Câu trả lời của bạn rõ ràng và liên quan, nhưng cần sửa vài lỗi ngữ pháp nhỏ, tránh lặp từ và làm câu tự nhiên, ngắn gọn hơn (tối đa 3–4 câu). Chú ý: "play football" nên là "playing football", "in the nature" không tự nhiên — dùng "in nature" hoặc "outdoors". Có thể thêm một chi tiết cụ thể ngắn (ví dụ vị trí hoặc hoạt động đặc biệt) để phong phú nội dung.

Ejemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I usually went with my friends on weekends, where we had picnics and played football in the open field. Those days were fun because we always competed in small matches and shared homemade snacks.

Sugerencia: Ý chính rõ ràng nhưng có lỗi ngữ pháp và lựa từ: "going to park" -> "going to parks", "can't visit every often" -> "can't visit very often", "all the commitment" sai ngữ pháp — nên dùng "my commitments". Hãy dùng liên từ để nối ý mạch lạc và giữ tối đa 3 câu. Thêm một chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ khi nào bạn đi) sẽ làm câu thuyết phục hơn.

Ejemplo: I still enjoy going to parks because they have a fresh, natural atmosphere. However, I can't visit very often due to my work commitments. When I do go, I usually spend an hour walking or sitting on a bench to relax.

Sugerencia: Câu trả lời có lý do và ví dụ nhưng có lỗi nhỏ về ngữ pháp/ cấu trúc: "is much nicer" cần chủ ngữ chính xác ("which is much nicer"), và câu nên tránh dài quá; dùng liên từ để mạch lạc. Thêm chi tiết cụ thể hơn về loại công viên bạn muốn hoặc hoạt động sẽ tăng tính cụ thể.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because they improve air quality and provide places to relax. For instance, I often go to a nearby park at weekends to work outdoors and exercise, which is much nicer than staying indoors.

Sugerencia: Ý tưởng tốt nhưng lỗi lặp từ, ngữ pháp và cấu trúc nhiều (ví dụ: "a beautiful mountains" sai số số, "where where" lặp, "I I" lặp, câu cuối không hoàn chỉnh). Bạn cần chia câu thành 2–3 câu ngắn, sửa danh từ số nhiều/số ít, loại bỏ từ lặp và hoàn thiện ý kết. Thêm thời gian cụ thể và hoạt động chi tiết để tăng độ tự nhiên.

Ejemplo: I'd like to visit the National Park near my city because it has beautiful mountains and many hiking trails where I can see butterflies and enjoy fresh air. I'd plan to go with friends on a weekend so we could hike, take photos, and have a picnic.

× When I was a child, I usually went to the park with my friends on the weekends.

✓ When I was a child, I usually went to the park with my friends on weekends.

'on the weekends' is acceptable in some varieties but 'on weekends' is more natural in this context; no tense error but minor phrasing.

× We often enjoyed the picnics and play football together, so I loved spending time outdoors and being in the nature.

✓ We often enjoyed picnics and played football together, so I loved spending time outdoors and being in nature.

Used verbs must match past tense: 'enjoyed' and 'played'. 'the picnics' is unnecessarily definite; use 'picnics'. 'being in the nature' is incorrect article use — 'nature' doesn't need 'the'.

× I still enjoy going to park because they have a fresh and natural atmosphere.

✓ I still enjoy going to parks because they have a fresh and natural atmosphere.

Countable noun 'park' needs plural or article: 'going to a park' or 'going to parks'. 'They' refers to 'parks' (plural) so use plural noun.

× However, I can't visit every often because I'm usually busy with work and all the commitment.

✓ However, I can't visit very often because I'm usually busy with work and all the commitments.

Wrong word 'every' should be 'very' in 'very often'. 'commitment' should be plural 'commitments' when referring to multiple obligations, and article 'all the' fits with plural noun.

× Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they make the air cleaner and give people a place to relax.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they make the air cleaner and give people places to relax.

Original sentence is acceptable, but 'a place to relax' is fine; to be consistent with plural 'parks' better to use 'places'.

× For example, I often go to a nearby park to work and exercise on weekends and is much nicer than staying indoors.

✓ For example, I often go to a nearby park to work and exercise on weekends; it is much nicer than staying indoors.

Missing subject for 'is much nicer' — add 'it' to form correct clause. Also punctuation improved by separating clauses.

× I want to go to the National Park near my city because it has a beautiful mountains and many hiking trails where where I can watch butterflies and enjoy the fresh air.

✓ I want to go to the national park near my city because it has beautiful mountains and many hiking trails where I can watch butterflies and enjoy the fresh air.

'National Park' common noun does not need capitalization unless a proper name; 'a beautiful mountains' mixes singular article 'a' with plural 'mountains' — remove 'a'. Duplicate 'where' should be one. Also 'national park' not capitalized unless specific name.

× For example, I I would like to go there with my friends and on a weekend so we can take the photos, have a picnic and relax that's.

✓ For example, I would like to go there with my friends on a weekend so we can take photos, have a picnic and relax.

Duplicate 'I I' remove extra. 'and on a weekend' unnecessary 'and' — use 'on a weekend' or 'on weekends'. 'the photos' unnecessary article; use 'photos'. Trailing 'that's' is incomplete and should be removed.