Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Improve accuracy, coherence and vocabulary. Begin with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, correct factual/word errors (Paris → parks), reduce hesitations and repetition, and add one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words (because, so) to connect ideas and limit to 2–4 sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because I grew up in a small village with limited activities. For example, I used to meet and play with other local children there, and we would often have long conversations or play team games, which made the park my favorite place.

Sugerencia: Focus on fluency, grammatical accuracy and clearer structure. Start with a direct sentence (Yes/No and reason), avoid unnecessary hesitations and contradictions (parks are for older people), and use linking words (because, however). Provide one specific example of when/why you go and correct grammar (I often go to parks).

Ejemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because I like quiet, green spaces to relax. For instance, I often walk in the nearby park after work to clear my mind and read a book because it is peaceful and close to my home.

Sugerencia: Give a clearer, structured answer with specific reasons and one concrete example. Begin with a direct reply (Yes) then give 2–3 specific reasons using linking words (because, also, for example). Avoid fillers and improve grammar (enjoy time with friends, think about the future).

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide spaces to meet people and relax. For example, additional parks would offer places for friends to gather and for young people to study outdoors, which would improve community life and well-being.

Sugerencia: Be specific and accurate when naming places, and give reasons and an example of what you want to do there. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes — I want to visit X park), correct phrasing (Central Park in New York City), avoid vague comments, and explain what attracts you (size, activities, atmosphere).

Ejemplo: Yes, I would love to visit Central Park in New York City because it looks huge and lively in the videos I have seen. For example, I would like to walk around the lake, visit the gardens, and watch street performances to experience the vibrant atmosphere.

× My favorite activity was uh, going to Paris when I was child, umm, because I'm living, I lived in a small village and park was uh, only activity where I can, I can head a communication with child and having a conversation with them.

✓ My favorite activity was going to parks when I was a child because I lived in a small village and the park was the only place where I could talk with other children.

Errors: incorrect place name 'Paris' vs 'parks' likely typo; missing article 'a' before 'child' (Article errors, but here corrected under past tense context); inconsistent tense 'I'm living' mixed with past 'I lived'. Modal 'can' should be past 'could' to match past tense. Also 'head a communication with child and having a conversation with them' is ungrammatical; use 'talk with other children'. Suggestion: Keep past tense throughout when describing childhood, use 'a child', use 'the' for 'the park' if specific, and use 'could' for ability in past.

× Now I enjoy going to parks, umm, despite the fact that, uh, parks are for older people, uh, I love uh, uh, quiet places, uh, and uh, I often going to the parks. Uh, there are, umm, there are near parts, there are parks near the home and I love it.

✓ Now I enjoy going to parks. Although some parks are used by older people, I love quiet places, and I often go to the parks. There are parks near my home and I love them.

Errors: 'I often going' is incorrect form; present simple requires 'I often go' (Present tense issue). 'There are near parts' is garbled and should be 'There are parks near my home' (sentence structure/preposition issues). Replace 'it' with 'them' to agree with plural 'parks' (Pronoun use/Plural issue). Suggestion: Use simple present for habitual actions, ensure subject-verb agreement, and match pronoun number to noun.

× Of course I would like uh, more parts in my city, uh, because uh, I see uh, the city as I umm, place where you can meet new people, relax, umm, uh, also, uh, enjoy with your friends and thinking your future. Uh, so I would like.

✓ Of course I would like more parks in my city because I see the city as a place where you can meet new people, relax, enjoy time with your friends, and think about your future.

Errors: 'more parts' is wrong word choice; should be 'more parks' (vocabulary). 'the city as I umm, place' missing article 'a' before 'place' (Article errors). 'enjoy with your friends' is incorrect collocation; use 'enjoy time with your friends'. 'thinking your future' needs preposition 'about' and gerund 'thinking about your future' or 'think about your future' (Verb structure). Suggestion: Use correct nouns, include articles where needed, and use common verb-preposition collocations.

× Uh, my favorite park is the New York City, uh, because, uh, it's in, in America and my, as I saw videos and the park is huge. Uh, there are a lot of people type of people. So, uh, I want to, uh, going go.

✓ My favorite park is in New York City because it is in America and, from the videos I have seen, the park is huge. There are a lot of people there, so I want to go.

Errors: 'the New York City' incorrectly uses definite article with city names (Article errors). 'my, as I saw videos' ungrammatical; use 'from the videos I have seen' (tense and sentence structure). 'a lot of people type of people' is redundant and unclear; simplify to 'a lot of people there' (word choice/redundancy). 'I want to, uh, going go' mixes infinitive and -ing form; correct is 'I want to go' (Verb + -ing form / infinitive error). Suggestion: Use 'in New York City' without 'the', use 'the videos I have seen' for recent experiences, avoid redundant phrases, and use correct infinitive after 'want to'.