Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Improve grammar and fluency: use past tense consistently, correct article use, remove fillers, and make sentences concise. Add one or two specific details and a linking word. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then give supporting details with a linking phrase.

Ejemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often went with my parents, and I enjoyed simple activities such as feeding ducks and playing on the swings with new friends. These visits made me feel adventurous and happy.

Sugerencia: Use present tense and clearer linking: state directly whether you still like parks, avoid repeated fillers, and give two specific activities with a linking word to explain why. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks now because I can relive my childhood memories with my children. For example, we play on the slides and climb small rock structures, which reminds me of the games I used to play. As a result, these visits help me bond with my kids and relax.

Sugerencia: Be concise and structured: give a direct opinion, then support it with two clear, specific examples using linking words. Correct prepositions and avoid trailing incomplete sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because current options are limited. For instance, there is an older park near the library and a pleasant small park near Kacheri. If the city built more parks, families would have safer outdoor spaces to relax and play.

Sugerencia: Organize and complete your answer: state the park name and location, describe specific attractions with correct vocabulary, use linking words, and finish with a brief reason or plan. Remove hesitations and incomplete sentence endings.

Ejemplo: Yes, I plan to visit a water park in Kelowna in the future. It features water slides, a shallow wave pool, and floating swings, which sound exciting. I want to go because I enjoy water activities and it would be a fun family day out.

× Yes, I would like to go park.

✓ Yes, I would like to go to the park.

Missing preposition 'to' and definite article 'the'. The verb phrase 'go to' requires 'to' before a place; 'park' as a specific place usually needs 'the'. Suggestion: use 'go to the park' or 'go to parks'.

× When I was a child I often went with my parents and I enjoyed discovering new things like as a feeding duck, uh, and playing with a new friends likewise.

✓ When I was a child I often went with my parents and I enjoyed discovering new things like feeding ducks and playing with new friends.

Problems: incorrect phrase 'like as', wrong article 'a' before plural 'friends', and singular/plural mismatch 'a feeding duck' should be plural or 'feeding a duck'. Also 'likewise' is unnecessary. Suggestion: remove 'as' after 'like', use plural nouns for general activities, and drop 'a' before 'friends'.

× Yes, of course I liked going park uh nowadays with my kids and I can recreate my childhood memory, uh, example nowadays I can play with my uh kids, uh, and climbing the umm stones, uh, so it's give uh, that umm memory recapping so.

✓ Yes, of course I like going to parks nowadays with my kids and I can recreate my childhood memories; for example, I can play with my kids and climb the stones, so it brings back those memories.

Multiple issues: tense (should be present 'like' not past 'liked'), missing preposition 'to' and article/plural 'parks', 'memory' should be plural for repeated memories, 'example' needs linking phrase 'for example', verb forms 'climbing' should be base 'climb' after 'can', and awkward phrase 'so it's give... memory recapping' corrected to 'it brings back those memories'. Suggestion: use present tense for habitual actions, include 'to' with 'go', and use base verb after modal 'can'.

× Yes, I like to see more parks uh, in my city, Jaffna, but unfortunately there are a few parks in Jaffna, uh, city.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city, Jaffna, but unfortunately there are only a few parks in Jaffna.

Use 'would like' for preference; 'a few' vs 'only a few' clarity; repeating 'city' is redundant. Also 'there are a few parks' may imply nonproblematic—'only a few parks' conveys scarcity. Suggestion: avoid unnecessary repetition and choose phrases that express quantity precisely.

× So one is near to uh, old, uh, near to library that is called old park.

✓ One is near the old library; it is called Old Park.

English omits 'to' after 'near'—use 'near' + noun. 'Near to' is nonstandard here. Also word order and punctuation benefit from splitting into two sentences and capitalizing proper name. Suggestion: use 'near the old library' and capitalize park name.

× Another one is uh, near to Kacheri umm, it's a, it's a nice place that we can play and we can.

✓ Another one is near Kacheri; it's a nice place where we can play.

Remove 'to' after 'near', avoid trailing incomplete clause 'and we can.' Use 'where we can play' to express purpose. Suggestion: complete clauses and avoid repetition 'it's a, it's a.'

× Yes, I have a plan to go, uh, a park which is located in Kelowna, It is called water park.

✓ Yes, I have a plan to go to a park in Kelowna. It is called a water park.

Need preposition 'to' after 'go', and 'park which is located in' is wordy—'a park in Kelowna' is natural. 'Water park' as a common noun takes an article 'a' unless it's a specific name. Suggestion: use 'go to a park in Kelowna' and include 'a' before common nouns.

× So it's umm, having the older play activities with the water like umm, that swing inside the water or sliding, Uh, so it's a water park, all activities based on water.

✓ It has water play activities like swings in the water and water slides. It's a water park where all the activities involve water.

Incorrect phrasing 'having the older play activities' and 'that swing inside the water'—use 'has' for possession and clearer nouns: 'water play activities', 'water slides'. 'All activities based on water' is awkward; use 'involve water'. Suggestion: use simple present 'has' and concise noun phrases for clarity.

× I plan to.

✓ I plan to go there.

Sentence is incomplete; 'I plan to' requires an infinitive object (e.g., 'go there'). Suggestion: complete the sentence with the intended action after 'plan to'.