Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Cần rõ ràng hơn và sửa ngữ pháp; tránh lỗi từ vựng như “trials” và cấu trúc không chính xác. Hãy bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề trả lời trực tiếp, sau đó thêm 1–2 câu chi tiết cụ thể (kể tên trò chơi, cảm xúc, tần suất). Dùng liên từ như “because” hoặc “so” để kết nối ý và giữ không quá 5 câu.

Ejemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often went there with my friends and we played outdoor games such as hide-and-seek and tag. Those visits were special because we spent hours playing together and laughing, which helped us become closer.

Sugerencia: Cần sửa ngữ pháp (e.g. “keen on” không kèm “to”; “room” sai từ). Trả lời trực tiếp, nêu tần suất, hoạt động cụ thể và lý do rút gọn. Dùng liên từ như “so” hoặc “which” để làm mạch lạc.

Ejemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks about twice a week. I usually go with three friends and we play volleyball there, which is a great way to exercise. It helps me relieve stress after long periods of study or work.

Sugerencia: Cần ngắn gọn, tránh từ thừa (“you know”), và sửa ngữ pháp (“In my opinion”, “a lot of parks”). Trả lời trước rồi giải thích cụ thể: liệu cần thêm công viên hay cải thiện cơ sở vật chất. Sử dụng liên từ như “however” hoặc “but” để chuyển ý.

Ejemplo: In my opinion, my city already has many parks, so we don't need more. However, I would like the authorities to improve park facilities, such as adding better paths, seating and playgrounds so more people can access and enjoy them.

Sugerencia: Cần loại bỏ tiếng “uh” và dùng cấu trúc rõ ràng (I would like to visit...). Thông tin nên cụ thể ngắn gọn: tên địa điểm, lý do (ví dụ: phong cảnh, khí hậu, hoạt động). Dùng liên từ như “because” hoặc “so” để làm rõ lý do.

Ejemplo: I would like to visit a national park in Tasmania in the future. I have heard that its scenery and diverse plant life are stunning, and I want to experience the cooler climate and peaceful atmosphere there.

× Whenever a trials I love going to the park with my friends and at that time we play a lot of outdoor games such as hide and seek.

✓ Whenever there was a break I loved going to the park with my friends, and at that time we played a lot of outdoor games such as hide-and-seek.

Original sentence has incorrect phrase 'a trials' (unclear noun) and tense inconsistency. Use 'there was a break' or 'during the holidays' to express occasions; match past tense 'loved' and 'played' for childhood. Also hyphenate 'hide-and-seek' as a compound noun.

× That's absolutely amazing. Memory for me is because it's can close all of us together.

✓ It was absolutely amazing for me because it brought us all closer together.

The original has fragmented sentences and incorrect word order ('Memory for me is because it's can close all of us together'). Use a single coherent sentence in past tense: 'it was...because it brought us all closer together.' Use 'brought' (past) and 'closer' (comparative adverb/adjective) correctly.

× Yes, of course I still keen on to go to the park around 2 times a week.

✓ Yes, of course I'm still keen to go to the park around twice a week.

Missing auxiliary verb 'am' for first-person present continuous/present state; 'keen on to go' is incorrect collocation — use 'keen to go' or 'keen on going'. Use 'twice' instead of '2 times' for natural phrasing.

× Now I have a room around 4 people and we play volleyball together at the parks.

✓ Now I share a room with about four people and we play volleyball together at the park.

'I have a room around 4 people' is ungrammatical; use 'share a room with about four people.' Use words for numbers in text and 'park' singular is natural when referring to a nearby park. 'At the parks' suggests many parks; choose context-appropriate singular.

× That absolutely amazing for me to reduce a lot of stress after a long time as well.

✓ That is absolutely amazing for reducing a lot of stress after a long day.

Missing verb 'is' and awkward phrase 'after a long time.' Use 'reducing' (gerund) after 'for' to show purpose and 'after a long day' for typical expression.

× In my opinions, uh, I live in Australia now and they have a lots of park around me.

✓ In my opinion, I live in Australia now and there are lots of parks around me.

Use singular 'opinion' and 'there are' to introduce existence of plural 'parks.' 'They have a lots of park' incorrectly uses 'they' and 'a lots' and singular 'park.'

× So I think they don't need to, you know, open more of the park.

✓ So I think they don't need to open more parks.

Unnecessary filler 'you know' can be omitted. 'Open more of the park' is incorrect; use 'open more parks' or 'create more parks.'

× And especially the thing I want them to do that they improve the facility for the people that they can access to the park and have more fun.

✓ What I especially want them to do is improve the facilities so people can access the parks and have more fun.

Original sentence has incorrect word order and pronoun overuse ('they' twice) and 'access to' is wrong after 'can.' Use 'improve the facilities' (plural) and 'so people can access the parks.'

× Actually, uh, I really appreciate if I have a chance to go to Tasmania because in there they have a really, really beautiful park in the middle of the Tasmania with a lot of different plant flower where I can come and immerse myself into the new atmosphere with the cold weather.

✓ Actually, I would really appreciate a chance to go to Tasmania because there is a really beautiful park in the middle of Tasmania with many different plants and flowers where I can immerse myself in the new atmosphere and enjoy the cold weather.

Original mixes tenses and has incorrect phrases: use conditional 'would appreciate a chance' to express desire; 'there is' to state existence; 'in the middle of Tasmania' without 'the'; 'plants and flowers' plural and 'immerse myself in' (not 'into'); 'enjoy the cold weather' is more natural.

× That's absolutely amazing for me.

✓ That would be absolutely amazing for me.

When speaking about a future or hypothetical trip, use conditional 'would be' to match the context. The original present tense 'That's' sounds odd for a hypothetical future event.