Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Improve clarity and grammar: start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add one or two specific supporting details. Use correct verb forms and complete phrases. Keep it concise (max 5 sentences) and avoid unclear fragments.

Ejemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks when I was a child. I remember visiting them from the age of three with my family, and we would often bring an old bedsheet to sit on while we had a picnic. Those outings felt exciting because I could run around and play freely.

Sugerencia: Make the response more natural and coherent: begin with a direct answer, then use linking words to add two specific reasons (e.g., peaceful atmosphere, people-watching). Correct grammar and pronouns (e.g., 'the peacefulness it gives', 'being by themselves') and avoid fragmented sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they provide a sense of calm and fresh air. Also, I like watching people jog or walk, which is interesting and relaxing to observe. Moreover, I enjoy listening to birdsong, which makes the whole experience peaceful.

Sugerencia: Clarify your main point and give specific reasons: answer directly, then explain why more parks would help (e.g., reduce noise, provide green space). Avoid incomplete phrases and vague words like 'vibes' without examples. Use linking words such as 'because' and 'for example'.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because it is becoming more urbanised and noisy. For example, parks would give residents green spaces to relax and escape traffic, and they could improve air quality and community well‑being.

Sugerencia: Make the reply more natural and structured: start with a clear statement, then add a specific plan or preference. Use correct phrasing ('I don't have any particular park in mind') and a linking phrase ('but if I find one'). Keep it concise and specific about what you would do there.

Ejemplo: I don't have any specific park in mind at the moment, but if I find a nice one I would spend a few hours there. For instance, I would sit under a tree, read a book, and enjoy the peaceful atmosphere.

× Yes, I remember when I was 3 where we go to the.

✓ Yes, I remember when I was three and we used to go to the park.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and missing words. 'When I was 3' should be followed by a clause with past-tense verb; use 'used to go' to express habitual past action. Also 'the' at the end is incomplete; specify 'the park'. Use the number 'three' in words for clarity.

× And being an old bed sheet and use it as well.

✓ We would take an old bedsheet and use it as a picnic blanket.

This fragment lacks a clear subject and tense. Use 'We would' to show habitual past action and change 'being an old bed sheet' to an active verb phrase 'take an old bedsheet'. 'Bed sheet' is typically written as 'bedsheet' or 'bed sheet'; 'use it as a picnic blanket' clarifies meaning.

× Yes, I love the place that I get from it, the calmness.

✓ Yes, I love the feeling I get from it: the calmness.

The phrase 'the place that I get from it' is incorrect; 'feeling' is the correct noun to describe an emotional effect. Use present tense 'get' matches 'I love'. Replacing comma with a colon (or dash) clarifies apposition.

× I love watching people doing somethings like jogging, walking, just them being with yourselves.

✓ I love watching people doing things like jogging and walking, and just enjoying being together.

'Somethings' is incorrect; use 'things'. 'Them being with yourselves' mixes pronouns incorrectly and is ungrammatical. Use 'enjoying being together' or 'being with each other' to convey the intended meaning. Maintain plural agreement with 'people'.

× And I love the birds that you can hear on the sky.

✓ And I love the birds that you can hear in the sky.

Use the preposition 'in' with 'the sky' rather than 'on'. 'On the sky' is not idiomatic English.

× Yes, because to be honest, where I live it's slowly becoming a little more like city than the province like we are and I don't really like the vibes that they are giving so nicely exposure and like the parts that you can just and.

✓ Yes. To be honest, where I live is slowly becoming more like a city than the province, and I don't really like the vibe. I prefer places that give you space and fresh air.

The original is a run-on with many unclear phrases and incorrect articles. Use 'is' for 'where I live'. 'More like a city' needs the article 'a'. 'Province like we are' is unclear; rephrase to 'than the province'. 'Vibes that they are giving so nicely exposure' is ungrammatical; simplify to 'I don't really like the vibe.' The final fragment 'and like the parts that you can just and' is incomplete; replace with a clear preference statement such as 'I prefer places that give you space and fresh air.'

× I actually don't have in mind, but if ever I saw one I think I will take a few hours just to breathe in the peacefulness that they are giving.

✓ I actually don't have one in mind, but if I ever see one I think I will take a few hours just to breathe in the peacefulness it offers.

'Don't have in mind' should be 'don't have one in mind' for clarity. Tense consistency: use present tense 'see' (if I ever see one) rather than past 'saw'. Use 'will' or 'would' consistently; here 'I think I will' is acceptable. 'They are giving' is incorrect for 'a park' (singular); use 'it offers' or 'it provides'.