Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and avoid hesitation words (e.g., "uh"). Start with a clear topic sentence, then give 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Reduce repetition (don't say "parks" too many times) and correct small grammar issues (e.g., "to the parks" → "to the park").

Ejemplo: Yes, I did. As a child I loved going to the park because it was my daily routine and my main source of entertainment. For example, I would spend hours playing on the swings and meeting friends from the neighborhood, which made those afternoons memorable.

Sugerencia: Give a clear, grammatical topic sentence and avoid vague phrases like "I don't have anything except on this." Use linking words to explain reasons and give one specific contrast (e.g., why parks are better than gaming zones). Also watch verb forms: say "I'm 17" rather than "Now I turn 17."

Ejemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to the park. I'm 17 now, and I prefer the park to gaming zones because it feels more relaxing and free; for example, I can walk, read under a tree, or play casual football with friends, which you can't do in a gaming center.

Sugerencia: Avoid repetition and long hesitations. Start with a direct opinion sentence, then give two specific reasons using linking words (e.g., "because", "so"). Use more precise vocabulary (e.g., "it often smells unpleasant due to littering"), and keep sentences clear and grammatically correct.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would. We only have one park in the city, so I think more parks are needed because the existing one is overcrowded and often smells unpleasant due to littering. New parks would reduce crowding and provide cleaner, quieter places for families.

Sugerencia: Correct word choice and grammar ("park", "located in Miami"). Give a clear reason why that park is appealing and add one specific detail about what you want to see. Avoid repeating "I would love" and vague phrases like "differs really differently."

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to visit a park in Miami. For example, I want to see Bayfront Park because it has large waterfront lawns, public art, and organized events; I think those features would be very different from our small, crowded park and offer new experiences.

× When I was a child, I loved going to the parks because it was my favorite, uh, daily routine to go to the parks because I never had a phone or toys and I always went to the park to have fun.

✓ When I was a child, I loved going to the park because it was my favorite daily routine; I never had a phone or toys so I always went to the park to have fun.

Use singular 'park' when referring to the activity of going to a park in general or to a specific nearby park. Repeating 'the parks' is inconsistent; changing to 'the park' clarifies meaning and keeps number consistent. Also remove filler 'uh' and combine clauses for fluency.

× Now I turn 17, but I still like to go into the parks because I don't have anything except on this.

✓ Now I am 17, but I still like to go to the park because I don't have anything else to do.

The original 'Now I turn 17' is incorrect for current age; use present 'I am 17'. 'I don't have anything except on this' is ungrammatical: correct to 'anything else to do'. Use singular 'the park' for habitual activity.

× I don't like going to gaming zones or to stadiums, but I love going to the parks because it's the most entertaining thing in my city.

✓ I don't like going to gaming zones or stadiums, but I love going to the park because it's the most entertaining place in my city.

Remove unnecessary 'to' before 'stadiums' and change 'parks' to 'park' for consistency. Also 'thing' is odd for a place; use 'place'. Prepositions and noun choice corrected for natural English.

× I would love to see, I would love to see more parks as it's, it would be really nice because we only have one park in my city and it's really sad to see that there are a lot of people and it's always smells bad because some people are not clean.

✓ I would love to see more parks because we only have one park in my city; it's sad that it gets crowded and often smells bad because some people do not keep it clean.

Remove redundant repetition and fix pronoun/reference issues: 'it's, it would be' is confusing. Use 'it gets crowded' and 'some people do not keep it clean' to clearly refer to people’s behavior. Correct verb phrase 'smells bad' to 'often smells bad' for naturalness.

× Yes, there is one pack that I would love to go because it is really different from our park.

✓ Yes, there is one park that I would love to go to because it is really different from our park.

Correct spelling 'pack' to 'park' and add preposition 'to' after 'go'. Use singular 'park' consistently. This fixes noun choice and verb-preposition combination.

× I would love to go to an American park that located in Miami because it differs really differently and I would love to see new type of things.

✓ I would love to go to an American park that is located in Miami because it is very different, and I would love to see new types of things.

Add missing verb 'is' after 'that' to form relative clause. Replace awkward adverb phrase 'differs really differently' with 'is very different'. Correct 'new type of things' to plural 'new types of things'. Fixes preposition omission, adverb/adjective misuse, and noun-number agreement.