Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Make the answer more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give 2–3 specific reasons with brief supporting detail. Avoid repetition (e.g. “children” repeated) and fix articles and verb forms (a park, to meet other children). Use linking words like “because” and “also.”

Ejemplo: Yes. I loved going to the park as a child because it was a place to play football with my friends and make new friends of the same age. Also, it helped me stay active and healthy by running and climbing on the equipment.

Sugerencia: Provide a clear, coherent main sentence explaining your current feeling, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words (e.g. “however,” “because”). Avoid hesitation and unfinished sentences. Keep it under five sentences.

Ejemplo: I still enjoy parks, but not as much as when I was a child. As I grew older, my social life changed and my friends and I now meet at cafés or sports centres instead of parks, so I visit parks only occasionally for fresh air.

Sugerencia: Give a direct answer first, then 2 concrete benefits with clear linking words. Avoid filler words and repetition. Mention a specific advantage (e.g. community space, safe play areas) to strengthen the response.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they promote health and fitness for people of all ages. For example, parks provide safe play areas for children and pleasant walking paths for older people to exercise and socialise.

Sugerencia: Answer clearly whether you would visit parks and give specific conditions or examples. Use one clear topic sentence, then add a supporting detail about what would motivate you to visit (e.g. sports facilities, nostalgia). Avoid unfinished sentences.

Ejemplo: I would not go to the park every day, but I would visit occasionally to remember childhood memories. I would especially go if the park had a football pitch or other fitness facilities, because I enjoy playing football and exercising outdoors.

× Yes, I did like to go to park when I was a child because of many reasons like to play with my friends, to get to know other children of my age, to connect with others children and to be fit.

✓ Yes, I did like to go to the park when I was a child because of many reasons, like playing with my friends, getting to know other children my age, connecting with other children, and staying fit.

The sentence missed the definite article 'the' before 'park' (common English usage requires 'go to the park'). Also several verb forms were non-parallel ('to play', 'to get') so changing to gerunds creates parallel structure. 'others children' is incorrect word order; use 'other children' and 'my age' does not need 'of'. Make commas to separate items.

× Yes, I still do like to go to parks, but I'm not. But as I grew, I don't I don't have that much excitement about parks anymore, which I used to have at a young age because I've got my whole different group, we meet at different places and park is more of a.

✓ Yes, I still like to go to parks, but not as much. As I grew up, I don't have the same excitement about parks that I used to have when I was young because I have a completely different group of friends; we meet in different places and the park is more of an occasional option.

Errors include awkward tense and repetition ('do like' and 'I'm not'), incorrect use of 'as I grew' (use 'grew up'), incorrect clause 'which I used to have at a young age' corrected to 'that I used to have when I was young'. 'I've got my whole different group' is informal and ungrammatical; use 'I have a completely different group of friends'. Missing article before 'park' corrected to 'the park'. Also sentence fragments were completed and tense agreement fixed.

× Just parks in our city. I would love to see them more because of many reasons like health and fitness, which people of all age, uh, from young to old should participate in and should be fit and should go for a walk or young, young, younger ones should go and play there.

✓ I would like to see more parks in our city because of many reasons such as health and fitness; people of all ages, from young to old, should take part, walk for exercise, and children should play there.

The fragment 'Just parks in our city.' is incomplete; combine into a full sentence. 'of all age' is incorrect — use 'of all ages'. Remove hesitations and repetitions. Use parallel verbs ('take part, walk, and play') and correct article usage by making sentence cohesive.

× In the future, I would like I wouldn't want to go at the park daily. Occasionally I would love to to for the old memories that I have of them. And if the park gets a sports facility and my favorite sport, football, and includes any other fitness facilities, I would.

✓ In the future, I wouldn't want to go to the park daily. Occasionally I would go to recall the old memories I have of it. If the park had sports facilities including my favorite sport, football, and other fitness equipment, I would visit more often.

Multiple issues: wrong preposition 'go at the park' should be 'go to the park'. Redundant phrasing 'I would like I wouldn't want' corrected to consistent modality 'I wouldn't want'. 'to to for the old memories' is ungrammatical — express purpose with 'go to recall the old memories'. Use past conditional 'If the park had' (or 'were to have') to express hypothetical future possibility. Replace 'them' with 'it' referring to 'the park' and complete the final clause 'I would' to 'I would visit more often' for clarity.