Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and use clear, fluent sentences. Start with a direct topic sentence, avoid filler sounds (uh, umm), correct awkward phrasing (e.g. “at the good places”), and add one specific supporting detail. Use linking words (because/so/and) naturally.

Ejemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because my family and I spent many weekends there. For example, we often had picnics and played games under the trees, which made those visits memorable.

Sugerencia: Begin with a clear topic sentence and replace fillers. Correct grammar (e.g. “less people” → “fewer people”, “a noisy places” → “noisy places”, “contemplate my mind” → “clear my mind”). Add one concrete example of what you do in a quiet park and use a linking word to connect ideas.

Ejemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks, especially when there are fewer people because I prefer quiet places. For instance, I like to sit on a bench and read or walk slowly to clear my mind and relax.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and avoid vague or repetitive phrases. Use singular/plural consistently (“the old park” vs “old parks”), and give a specific reason why older parks are interesting (history, mature trees, design). Limit to 2–3 sentences and use a linking word to add the reason.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks, especially well-established ones with mature trees and historic features. Because they have interesting designs and calm paths, my family and I would enjoy spending afternoons there together.

Sugerencia: Be specific and avoid uncertainty. If you don't know the name, describe the park clearly and explain why you want to visit. Remove fillers and correct grammar (e.g. “go in my future” → “visit in the future”, “photos about that it” → “photos of it”). Provide one concrete reason or activity you want to try there.

Ejemplo: Yes, I hope to visit several parks in the future, including a large recreational park in Korea that I saw in photos. It looked amazing with huge playgrounds and lakes, and I would like to try boating and explore its gardens.

× Of course I did because it was my, uh, great hobby to go to the park with my family members because, umm, I think the parks are at the good places for all the, uh, people.

✓ Of course I did because it was my great hobby to go to the park with my family.

Using 'the' before 'great hobby' and 'the parks are at the good places' is incorrect and wordy. Articles are unnecessary before 'great hobby' and 'parks' here; 'at the good places' is unidiomatic. Remove redundant phrases and simplify to a natural sentence. Also 'family members' can be shortened to 'family'. Suggestion: use 'the' only when referring to a specific known noun and keep sentences concise. Grammar problem type ID:22

× Yeah, of course I love to go to the park, especially when uh, there are umm, less people because I don't want to be in a noisy places.

✓ Yeah, of course I love to go to the park, especially when there are fewer people because I don't want to be in a noisy place.

'Less people' is incorrect with countable nouns; use 'fewer people'. 'A noisy places' mixes singular article with plural noun; use singular 'place' or plural without 'a'. Also remove filler words. Suggestion: use 'fewer' for countable nouns and ensure article matches noun number. Grammar problem type ID:1

× So parks are better option for me when I want to contemplate my mind.

✓ So parks are a better option for me when I want to clear my mind.

Missing article 'a' before 'better option' is an article error combined with present-tense phrasing. 'Contemplate my mind' is unnatural; native speakers say 'clear my mind' or 'reflect'. Suggestion: add 'a' and use idiomatic verb phrase 'clear my mind'. Grammar problem type ID:6

× Why not? Of course, I want to go to the old park, uh, because, uh, they are interesting not only for me, but also for, for my family members.

✓ Why not? Of course, I want to go to the old park because it is interesting not only to me but also to my family.

Mixing singular 'the old park' with plural pronoun 'they' is incorrect. Use 'it' to agree with singular 'park'. Also 'interesting to' is the correct preposition, and 'family members' can be shortened to 'my family'. Remove repeated filler words. Suggestion: ensure pronoun agrees in number with its antecedent and use correct prepositions. Grammar problem type ID:12

× So I want to spend my time in parks, uh, with my friends and family members.

✓ So I want to spend time in parks with my friends and family.

'Spend my time' is acceptable but often shortened to 'spend time'. 'Family members' is wordy; 'family' is more natural. Ensure consistent pluralization: 'parks' with 'friends' is fine. Suggestion: remove unnecessary possessive and redundant words for clarity. Grammar problem type ID:1

× Are there any parks you want to go to in the future?

✓ Are there any parks you would like to visit in the future?

The original question from the examiner is fine, but the student responses later misuse 'go in my future'. However, 'Are there any parks you want to go to in the future?' as a question is acceptable; suggested correction uses more natural phrasing 'would like to visit'. Suggestion: use 'would like to' for polite future preferences and 'visit' instead of 'go to' for places. Grammar problem type ID:3

× There are many parks that I want to go in my future.

✓ There are many parks that I want to visit in the future.

'Go in my future' is ungrammatical. Use the phrase 'in the future' and 'visit' or 'go to' with correct preposition: 'visit' is more natural here. Suggestion: use 'in the future' for time reference and pair 'go to' with a place ('go to parks') or use 'visit'. Grammar problem type ID:7

× One of them is located in Korea. Uh, I don't know exactly its name, but I saw some photos about that it and it was really amazing and uh, recreational park I.

✓ One of them is located in Korea. I don't know its exact name, but I saw some photos of it and it looked like a really amazing recreational park.

'Photos about that it' is ungrammatical; use 'photos of it'. 'It was really amazing and recreational park I' is incorrect word order and extra pronoun. Use 'looked like a really amazing recreational park' or 'it was a really amazing recreational park'. Also 'exactly its name' should be 'its exact name'. Suggestion: use correct word order and prepositions: 'photos of', 'its exact name', and place adjectives before nouns. Grammar problem type ID:11