Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Improve grammatical accuracy and reduce hesitation. Use correct tense and plural forms, avoid filler words (uh, umm), and make the response more concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words.

Ejemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often played on the swings and climbed the jungle gym with children my age, and I enjoyed chatting with both older and younger kids about simple, playful topics.

Sugerencia: Reduce hesitations and clarify ideas. Provide a clear topic sentence about current habits, then give a specific reason and an example. Use linking words like however or because to connect ideas and keep it within 3–4 concise sentences.

Ejemplo: I still like going to parks, but not as often as before because the playground equipment feels too small for me now. Instead, I usually walk around the park with friends and we talk about our studies or recent news.

Sugerencia: Be concise and precise about your interest. Remove fillers and organize the response: state your opinion, give a reason linked to your studies, and provide a specific example of what you would like to see in new parks (e.g. design features). Use varied vocabulary related to planning and landscape design.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would. As a prospective urban planning student, I’m interested in how new parks are designed, especially features like native planting, pedestrian paths, and seating areas that encourage community use.

Sugerencia: Be more specific about which parks or countries and why. Reduce vagueness and fillers, give one or two concrete examples (park names or cities) and explain what you want to learn from them. Use linking words like for example or such as.

Ejemplo: Yes, I’d like to visit famous parks in Europe, such as Villa Borghese in Rome or the Tuileries Garden in Paris, to study how their layout and historical architecture attract visitors and shape public use.

× I love to, uh, play in the playground and the run around with the other Childs who were around my age.

✓ I loved to play in the playground and run around with the other children who were around my age.

The noun 'Childs' is incorrect pluralization. Irregular plural of 'child' is 'children'. Also tense consistency with 'loved' is better for past description and removing extra 'the' before 'run around' fixes article/structure. Suggestion: learn irregular plural forms like child->children, and keep verb tense consistent for past narratives.

× And I love to communicate with uh, the older and younger children and just talk about everything in the world more like in a childish way.

✓ And I loved to communicate with the older and younger children and just talk about everything in the world in a childish way.

Pronoun use is okay but tense inconsistency: 'love' should be 'loved' to match past context. Also 'more like in a childish way' is awkward; 'in a childish way' is clearer. Suggestion: keep tense consistent within the same time frame and simplify redundant phrases.

× And because the playgrounds are now considered very small for me.

✓ And because the playgrounds are now too small for me.

The phrase 'considered very small for me' is grammatically acceptable but wordy; 'too small for me' is more natural. The original mixes passive 'considered' unnecessarily. Suggestion: use concise, natural expressions for present descriptions.

× So I just walk around, uh, in the park with my friends and just talk about something like my, umm, like study, Yeah.

✓ So I just walk around in the park with my friends and talk about things like my studies.

'Talk about something like my, umm, like study' is ungrammatical and awkward. Use plural 'studies' to refer to academic work and 'talk about things like' to introduce examples. Suggestion: use clear noun forms and avoid filler repetition when listing examples.

× as someone who is planning to major in urban planning or maybe in civil engineering, uh, I love to see new places in my city like how they planned their landscapes and how they, uh, urbanize the, uh, green place, green spaces, yeah.

✓ As someone who is planning to major in urban planning or maybe civil engineering, I love to see new places in my city, such as how they planned their landscapes and how they urbanize green spaces.

Articles and phrasing are awkward: 'in civil engineering' can be 'civil engineering' without 'in', and 'the green place, green spaces' is redundant. Use 'such as' to introduce examples and 'green spaces' as the standard term. Suggestion: remove unnecessary articles and filler words, and use standard collocations like 'green spaces' and 'such as'.

× Umm, yes of course, there are many parks that I would love to explore and see how they attract the tourists.

✓ Umm, yes, of course, there are many parks that I would love to explore and see how they attract tourists.

Article 'the' before 'tourists' is unnecessary when speaking generally. Use 'attract tourists' for general statement. Suggestion: omit 'the' when making generalizations about groups and ensure punctuation for clarity.

× And besides my home country, I would love to go to umm, Italy or France and see how their architecture works or their landscape, uh, designs.

✓ And outside my home country, I would love to go to Italy or France and see how their architecture and landscape designs work.

'Besides my home country' is awkward; 'outside my home country' is clearer. 'See how their architecture works or their landscape designs' needs parallel structure: combine into 'architecture and landscape designs' and place 'work' at the end. Suggestion: use parallel structures and smoother prepositional phrases like 'outside my home country'.