Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be accurate and concise: correct factual errors, avoid hesitations and redundant phrases, and use a clear topic sentence plus one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words to connect ideas (e.g., “and”, “so”, “for example”).

Ejemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. For example, my friends and I often played on the swings and slides, and we enjoyed games like hide-and-seek and tag.

Sugerencia: Reduce fillers and combine related ideas to sound more fluent. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give specific reasons with linking words (e.g., “because”, “so”, “which”).

Ejemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because I love being surrounded by trees, plants and flowers, which help me reduce stress and relax.

Sugerencia: Correct vocabulary and grammar: use the correct word (“parks” not “price”) and simplify sentences. Provide one clear reason and one specific supporting detail, using linking words (e.g., “because”, “so that”). Avoid repetition and hesitations.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like more parks in the city because it is quite polluted; parks with many trees would improve air quality and give people places to relax.

Sugerencia: Be specific and grammatically correct: name a country or a type of park, explain why, and use linking words to connect reasons. Avoid vague phrases like “parks outside my country” without detail and reduce repetition.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to visit parks abroad, especially the national parks in Canada, because they are famous for dramatic landscapes and cooler, more comfortable weather, which I find relaxing.

× Yes, I like going to Prague.

✓ Yes, I liked going to parks.

The student used present tense 'like' but context is 'Did you like going to parks as a child?' which asks about the past. Use past tense 'liked' and correct 'Prague' to 'parks' to match the question. Suggestion: Align verb tense with question time frame and check nouns for relevance.

× we used to play the swings and slides and my friends and I used to play hide and seek and tags.

✓ we used to play on the swings and slides, and my friends and I used to play hide-and-seek and tag.

Use preposition 'on' with swings and slides and hyphenate 'hide-and-seek'. 'Tags' is incorrect; the game is 'tag' (uncountable). Also add commas for clarity. Suggestion: Use correct prepositions for playground equipment and correct game names.

× Yes, I still love going to parks even though I am an adult.

✓ Yes, I still loved going to parks even when I became an adult.

The question 'Do you still like going to parks now?' asks about present habits; the original answer uses present 'love' which is fine, but elsewhere the student mixes past and present. To specifically answer now, prefer present simple: 'Yes, I still love going to parks now.' Alternatively, if referring to change after childhood, use past tense 'loved' and time marker. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent with the time reference; here use present simple for current habits.

× It helps me uh, for my stress and helps me to relax.

✓ It helps with my stress and helps me to relax.

Use 'help with' + noun rather than 'help for'. Also 'helps me to relax' is acceptable but 'helps me relax' is more natural. Suggestion: Use 'help with' for problems or conditions and drop unnecessary 'to'.

× Yes, I'd like to see more price in the city because the city is, I know the city is now polluted, uh, in the parks are there, there are many trees that helps the city for uh, for good airs and helps people to uh, have some time to relax and.

✓ Yes, I'd like to see more parks in the city because the city is, as I know, polluted now. Parks have many trees that help the city have cleaner air and give people a place to relax.

'Price' is incorrect; intended word is 'parks' (countable). Sentence has many issues: word order, extra filler, subject-verb agreement ('trees that helps' should be 'trees that help'), and awkward phrase 'good airs' (use 'cleaner air'). Also remove redundant phrases. Suggestion: Use the correct noun, simplify sentence structure, ensure subject-verb agreement, and use 'air' uncountable.

× Are there any parks you want to go to in the future? Yes, the parks that I want to go to the future is parks outside my country, because I heard that the parks outside the country is like more beautiful, and then the weather of the other country is cozy and cold. That's why I like to see other.

✓ Yes. The parks I want to go to in the future are parks outside my country, because I have heard that parks abroad are more beautiful, and the weather in other countries can be pleasant and cool. That's why I want to visit them.

Multiple errors: article and noun number ('the parks ... is' should be 'are'); unnecessary repetition 'the parks outside the country' -> 'parks abroad'; 'is like more beautiful' ungrammatical — use 'are more beautiful'; 'the weather of the other country is cozy and cold' -> 'the weather in other countries can be pleasant and cool'; final fragment 'That's why I like to see other.' should be 'That's why I want to visit them.' Suggestion: Match subject and verb number, use 'abroad' for parks outside the country, use 'visit' for places, and choose appropriate adjectives for weather.